First time author, I could really use some feedback. Help me PLEASE.
Disclaimer: I dont own DP, just love it and Derek.
Chapter 1
Derek POV
He woke up slowly, feeling more at peace than he could ever recall being. And became slowly aware of his surroundings, and the threat that surrounded them, and the fact that he had chnged back in his sleep. Chloe was nestled in his arms, her head buried in his chest and her hands where curled into the fabric of his shirt, she looked safe and secure and comfy in his arms.
And they were surrounded by werewolves.
His instincts took over, and all of his muscles tensed, preparing to fight, to die, to keep his mate safe. Chloe felt this change, and started to stir from her deep sleep. She heard his warning growl as a smaller, older wolf stepped forward right in front of them, and immediatly snapped awake. She caught his arm as he was about to make a leap for the offender, and tugged on his arm. He stopped moving, but didnt take his eyes off the older wolf. Chloe wasnt looking at him anyway. She was looking at the wolf as she said with a shaking voice, " I-I'm Chloe S-Saunders, this i-is Derek So..." She stopped realizing that it might not be the best idea for them to have his name, and the proceeded cautiosly. " W-We..., he just n-needed to change. Please, j-just..." she stopped, took a moment to get her stutter under control and then went on," Please, if you'll just Ch-Change back, we could all d-discuss this, please?
The wolf bowed his head and motioned for the rest to go into the bushes. A large blond wolf to their left made a motion to stay there and do it, but the older simply had to look at him to have him moving into the forest.
Derek looked at her and motioned for her to run, she shook her head, no way was she leaving. They both heard the wimpers of pain that came through the trees as the wolves changed back. Chloe asked, hesitantly, "What do you think is going on?"
Derek looked at her, thinking about how to phrase this so as not to make her more afraid. He just gave up, she might as well know what they may be in for. And he sayed something he knew she would get, knew she would understand the dangers of, "Pack" he told her and watched her eyes go huge with fear.
It seemed like an internity later when a middle aged man stepped from the trees, and came up to them. Derek tensed expecting a fight, but all the man did was stick out his hand and say, "Hello, I'm Jeremy Danvers."
Im really sorry its so short, its just a taster, if you want more please tell me.
Oh and I need a beta reader, sooo, if anyone would be willing, just PM me.