ook people this is my first ff so be nice but i would like some comments on how to make it better.
"I don't want the cookie" was what neji heard through hinata's door. hmm she must be awake . thud owww when did I get on the floor! HINATA stop making all that noise. Hanabi yelled at her sister. Hinata visibly flinched at her sisters harsh words. She sighed and crawled off the floor and started to walk to her lavender dresser but when she saw her reflection she was wearing a lavender midriff tank top with white shorts shorts that were a 15th birthday gift from none other than kiba.
Downstairs neji was getting hinata some chocolate of course hiashi didn't want her to have any but she had been in a bad mood lately so she needed some thing to help cheer her up .
As she stared at her self in the mirror she decided to change her look so she called her friend sakura to help her.
Ding Ding Bam Bam sakura was at the door and was impatient when hinata called her for help she thought she meant neji had went crazy again. So after about 15 seconds she broke down the door and had a very surprised
Neji in a headlock. Hinata get this crazy girl off of me! He yelled.
Upstairs hinata said hmm sakura must be here. She then walked down stairs. Sakura g-get of n-neji please. You sure I could get rid of him for you hina. No sakura I-ohh is that chocolate she started walking over to the little box of chocolate in the other room. Wait what nooo hinata don't leave me with this psycho. cough hack hack sakura stop choking me. No I'm no psycho neji hyuuga. Two hours later sakura got bored and got up to go in hinata's room. So what did you want hina. Um I wanted you to help m-me with my look. Um ok hina but why. Then an image of hinata in a field of flowers under the moon holding hands with…hinata hello. Oh sorry sakura I j-just want to no reason. she's a terrible liar but if she doesn't want to tell me who she likes oh well.
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