''sara'' sara'' my head jumped up as the teacher yelled for me to sit up and pay attention to her lecture and she started to say so while sara was sleeping she missed the part about the egyption ruin found by professer rodrick could any one tell miss whinchester the ansewre to that question i looked around and i saw my cosin raise her hand.whiel she anserwd the question i thought to my self why did bella have to choise to go to college with me and take the classes that i take to i cant stand her dad says i got that from him because him and uncle sam were always at each others trought we really arent that close when i choies to go to college he got mad and said that ''sara you should be hunting not going to college uncle sam did that and look his girl friend got killed for it do you want that to happen to you or some one you love .'' he kicked me out for a fort night then uncle sam cooled his hot head down and dad let me stay the night before i had to leave for dartmouth so the only time we have contact is when he calls me at nine . after bella told that stupid anser the teacher said we were free to go and i zoomed out of there like a race car .when i got to the library from my history class bella caught up with me and she asked''what was that stuff in class do i need to call dad and tell him to tell unc dean that you had a vision i said ''i did not have a vision i wish you wouldnt bring that up that is how my last boy friend found outshe said instinly okay het sara um this was left in my mail i thnk its fore you open it up itold her ''no nosie this is my letter not youres see and she looked at the bold sara whinchester letters just open it and see if its a dirty letter i opened the small paper and it said if youre father wants to find his dead family tell him to call this person peter whinchester 555-4352...
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