Hey this is my first fanfic so criticism is welcome and encouraged. Just take it easy on me.
Max POV
My name is Max. It's short for Maximum Ride. Just so you know I'm not a people person. I usually keep to myself. So when this random guy came up to me I was pretty surprised. "Hey my name is James and my brother over there is Nick and, well we saw you over here, and we thought now what's a pretty little girl doing all by herself. So I decided to come over here and take you away from this wonderful place." He gestured to the picnic table I was at. You see I am at the beach. And I came here to have peace and quiet so I could finish reading my book. Since at home all my mom and dad do is yell. So I decided to not like this guy, he disturbed my peace and I just wanted that one thing. "You know why I was over here?" I asked him with a flirtatious smile. He smirked and said, "No I don't beautiful." I smirked back and said, "It was to get away from jack asses like you." I smiled at his reaction. Then took my Dr. Pepper and dumped it on him. "Damn, what a waste of a good Dr. Pepper. Oh well I can get another one." I smiled, then got up and left.
I was laughing on the way back to my car when someone caught me by my arm and whipped me around and said, "Yo, dude what the hell did you do that to my brother for?" I stared at the guy who had taken possession of my arm for the moment. "Oh, that was your brother?" I asked he nodded his head. I smiled and said, "Well I feel sorry for you dude." I laughed and tried to take my arm out his grasp. Key word here tried. "Hey, dude can you let go of my arm? I gotta get home." I asked. He immediately let go as if it was on fire. "Sorry, but seriously I know he can be kind of a ladies' man, but…" He couldn't finish his sentence because he was laughing too hard. I laughed to. "So I take it, he does this often?" I said while trying to calm down. "Yeah, but I don't think he has had soda poured on him. Ice cream sure, but not soda." He smiled and I laughed. "Oh, by the way I'm Fang." He said. "Wait I thought your brother said your name was Nick?" I said with a confused look on my face. "Oh, yeah Fang is my nickname I hate my real name. It kinda sucks." Fang said. "Oh, well my name is Max." I replied. "Max, isn't that a guy's name?" He said."Yeah, it's short for Maximum." Wait didn't I already do this with you? Whatever. On with the story! "Oh. Cool, it suits you." He said. It was awkward for a moment when nobody said anything.
"Well I really do need to get home if I want dinner so bye. I'll see you later, okay?" I started to back away to my car. "Wait, um, can I have your number?" He asked while looking at his shoes. "Sure." I smiled and took his hand and took a pen from my bag and wrote my number on his palm. "Thanks." He said. "Bye." I said and waved as I got in my car.
When I got home I was immediately found by my dad and yelled at for not making dinner for him and my so called mom. Cough. *bitch* Cough. Cough. So I got to work on making something but he said that they already order out, and didn't order me anything because I was late. Well that's just great. I guess my dinner was what I had of my Dr. Pepper before I poured it on James. So I headed up to my room in the attic. I pulled out my phone and scrolled through my contacts, (I don't have that many) and found Nudge.
(Max italicized Nudge bolded)
Hey nudge
She replied not 3 seconds later
Hey buddy! :) wats up?
Nuthin im just bored wbu?
Ya me 2 but I had 2 babysit my lil bro :o it waz SOOOOO frustatin! I hate doin dat! I mean gazzy iz so annoyin! Wich reminds me I saw this realy hot guy earlir and his name waz Nathen XD he waz SOOOOOOOO cute! Then he startd 2 talk 2 me and I waz my usual self ;) ZOMG he iz so my type! XD so how waz ur day? :)
Okay nudge really needs to stop drinking coffee in the morning. She just goes off on you if you're not careful. But she's a good friend. Especially when you need girly stuff advice. And she's been trying to get me to let her give me a makeover for the past couple of years. But I keep saying no.
Ok nudge did u hav caffeine or sugar this morning?
Mayb….ok yes I confess u just guiltd me n2 telling u! im so sry I lied 2 u! jk but I did hav a coffee this morning :)
Nudge! Remember wat happend last time u had 2 much sugar? Dat waz not a good day
Ya sry bout dat
Hey I still hav nitemares *shudders*
Sry
Itz ok but nevr do it again
Ok I promise ;)
Hey g2g
K bye
I flipped my phone closed. Nudge was one of my very many friends. (note sarcasm) I actually have very few friends maybe 10. Max. Oh well I have to get to bed to I can get up really early in the morning if I want to stay here without getting kicked out again. That was not a good day either.
I was late to come home last night after having a late study date with Nudge at the library so we went to her house for a while and had some food. Then I walked home. It was late at night so I kinda got lost for a while but eventually found my house. Then I snuck up to my room and looked at the clock it was 2 in the morning I didn't think I was out that long. So I crashed on my bed. I woke up that morning to someone slapping me strait across my face. It was my mom, and she said, "Get your lazy ass up! You have work to do or go better yet just pack up your things and get out. You're just like your brother! A lazy good for nothing dumb ass!"
Yeah, I was out on the streets for 3 days before they decided they needed me to do their work for them again. My brother's name is Ari. He's 26 and works at a gas station to earn money. I send him some every once in a while when I get enough tips working as a waitress at the restaurant that I work at. I undress and took a shower downstairs. Then went back upstairs before they figured out that I used their shower again. I was in my comfy pj's. I smiled then laid down on my 'bed'. It was really just a thin mattress on a table. But it works for now. I immediately fell asleep once my head hit the pillow