Hey! This is my first fanfiction on this account, so I know I will be a little rusty with grammar and all that stuff ever since I quit last time :( Anyway, feel free to give me some of your opinions and tell me what I could do better :D COURTESY TO DAWN, MY COUSIN FOR COMING UP OF THESE MARY-SUES (Sorry, Dawn. I know you hate Mary-sues, but as a good older cousin I must torture you! :D)
Sparkleglimmer- Beautiful sparkly silver she-cat with bright glittery aqua blue eyes.
Sparkleglimmer. Ugh. It doesn't even make sense. Glimmer and sparkle are honestly both prefixes. IF THEY EXIST IN THE WARRIOR WORLD! Sparkle?! For one, cats don't sparkle. Same as glimmer- These words are honestly the worst. And the appearance- Oh, god. CRINGE ALERT CRINGE ALERT CRINGE ALERT. Sparkly? Glittery?! Cats, cannot be sparkly or glittery. Okay. You know what? Now that I think about it, this isn't half as bad as the other Mary-Sues I've seen. But if anyone ever uses this OC, I will die. If anyone decides to use this, I'm assuming they will add wings and let it fart rainbows. Starkit's Prophecy, anyone?
Okay, now for the stupid part- The one shot of Sparkleglimmer. I'm sorry if it sucks.
Sparklekit opened her eyes, widening at the world before her, full of color.
Her mother, Gorgeousglitter gasped- "Sparklekit! Oh my Starclan! Oh, my Sparklekit! GALAXYSTAR! GALAXYSTAR! SPARKLEKIT'S OPENED HER EY-"
Galaxystar barged in the den's entrance and immediately started licking Sparklekit's cheek.
"Oh, isn't she adorable!"
"She's bound to be a great warrior!"
"Galaxystar, you need to make her deputy right now so that she'll be a leader one day!"
A queen, Diamondgleam exclaimed.
A big smile spread along Sparklekit's face, and she raised her chin high.
"Daddy! I would love to be deputy! Please!"
To prove her skills, Sparklekit launched herself into the air, and landed squarely on Galaxystar's muzzle, unsheathed her long, sparkly rainbow claws and raked her father's muzzle, causing blood to spurt out from all directions. She bared her little rainbow fangs and leaped down to his chest, clinging on with her glittering claws and sinking her fangs into his shoulder. Galaxystar yelped in pain, and grabbed Sparklekit by the scruff, hauling her onto the great rock.
"CATS OF SHIMMERCLAN! We- We have a new warrior!" He managed to splutter.
Sparklekit gestured to Galaxystar's deep wounds, and winked. All the toms swooned, and immediately fell to the ground.
"From this day forward, you will be known as Sparkleglimmer! Shimmerclan honors your beauty, talent, courageousness, bravery, fabulousness and more!"
"Also, I now appoint you as the new deputy! You will be a great addition to our clan, and I'm sure you will teach our clan to be the most fabulous clan of all!"
"SPARKLEGLIMMER! SPARKLEGLIMMER!"
Well. That was weird. And amazingly stupid. Alright. I never knew I could write like that. Eh.
OKAY!