Okay, I understand that this part complete blows. It has like, no revising what-so-ever and I completely assure you that I have revised this sense I first put it up and the story is much better and I believe it'll much better. Please read and describe to me what are the things that I can work on the most. I believe that negative critism is the best way to improve on writing, so if you have anything to say, please make it more of constructive critism. This story pretty much tells the story of two she-cats (Dovetalon and Shadowheart) growing up in ThunderClan by the lake. The only family the have left in ThunderClan is eachother and their unknown father, which Shadowheart only knows about. Their mother died when they were young. This story shows the struggles of the pain on the two sisters throughout their lives. It's a very descriptive story, including much interaction between all the clans as in the actual Warriors series. I have not added anything like Clans or changed any of the actual details like most fanfics do. I've only added my own cats. This story takes place in a future ThunderClan, where Firestar is but a legend. The only cats that this ThunderClan sees from the old times are Bluestar, Firsestar, Cinderpelt, and the original starters of the clan. (Shadowstar, Thunderstar, Riverstar, and Windstar) All other cats are a thing of the past. I tried to tie in some of the older issues and I will not have ANY interaction from the Dark Forest. I find that concept kinda dumb... Lol, what can I say? I like traditional Clanlife. They're a very good story line showing their apprenticeship, warrior/medicine cat times, and all other points throughout their lives. I really hope that you guys enjoy this as much as me and the other writer (Dovetalon) have. And if you read that whole thing just to read a tiny preview... I salute you! So yeah... Huggles! :3

Shadowheart and Dovetalon are two sisters that are complete opposites of each other. Their looks, personality, and interests are both completely opposite. Experience their lives from the age of six moons until death. This fanfic includes betrayal, murder, love, mystery, and the lives of two cats growing up in ThunderClan. Other main characters include Frostbite, Lightningstar, Falconwing, Pebblemoon, and Treeleaf.

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This is a sneak peak of a later chapter.

Shadowkit was standing in the middle of the ThunderClan camp. Her ears roared with fright. She desperately scented for her loving mother's warm scent. She quickly ran out of the camp, deep into the forest. Leaves quietly rustled underneath of the three moon old kit. The delicious scent of prey flooded her nose.

Her mother's scent became stronger the farther she ran from the camp. A dark voice could be faintly heard over the noises of the forest.

"The kits will be magnificent warriors one day."

Shadowkit snorted, He doesn't even know his own kit! Everyone knows that Dovekit wants to be Medicine Cat one day.

Silversong's melodious voice echoed through the trees, "At least Shadowkit will. Her determination and strength is more than any kit I've ever seen. She be amazing."

The tom deeply chuckled, "I must admit, I admire her determination to be the best that she can be. And Dovekit could be just as strong, if she were to be a warrior." Sadness dripped over every word he mewed.

That's because she has mother's wisdom and intelligence, you mouse-brain! Anger flared within Shadowkit. She knew her father was always trying to convince Dovekit to be a warrior.

Silversong sighed, "You know Dovekit's place is in the medicine cat den. She understands everything so well. I can assure you, she'll better serve the clan as medicine cat."

Shadowkit came to the clearing where her parents stood. She saw her father's pelt bristle.

"Perhaps it's because of her weak mother," the huge tom growled.

Silversong was taken aback, "I beg your parden?"

He stood up, "My kits were supposed to be warriors! Shadowkit is perfect in every way! Why couldn't Dovekit be as fierce and amazingly gifted as her?"

"Don't you talk about Dovekit like that!" Silversong spat.

"I should have never had kits with a weak she-cat like you!" he puffed out his chest.

No! Mother!

"What are yo-" she was cut off by the massive tom slicing the silver she-cat's throat open.

"Mother!" Shadowkit ran to her mother's dead body and clawed the attacker's eyes. The huge tom, shocked, ran toward the ThunderClan camp.

Shadowkit looked at the sky with clouded eyes. Lightning struck in the distance and lit up the only star in the sky.

Shadowkit pressed her muzzle into her dead mother's flank. "Mother, why you?" the small kit wailed. "You could ask any cat from any clan and they could say ten other cats that deserved this more than you."

Rain trickled into Shadowkit's fur through the thick trees overhead, washing away the killer's scent. Shadowkit cringed, "My father's a genius. His scent's nearly gone now."

She looked at Silversong's dead body, her blue eyes sparkling with intensity. "I know that StarClan's angry with him, as am I." She looked at the eyes of her dead mother.

"My blood is soiled with that of a killer. I will make up for my mother's death and my father's betrayal. I will become the best I can possibly be. I swear this in StarClan's name!"

The bushes in front of Shadowkit rustled. Mouse dung! If Lightningstar sees me out here, I'm fresh kill! Lightningstar's scent became much stronger.

The small kit quickly ran away from Silversong's body. She hurried through the trees to a secret clan entrance. The camp was quiet as she snuck through the brambles to the nursery. Two white kits, Dovekit and Frostkit, were lying close to one another next to Sunclaw.

Shadowkit quietly laid down by her sister and her best friend. Her grey pelt bristled at the thought of her father as tears slowly ran down her face.

You'll pay, father. I'll show you the strength and ferocity that I truly possess.