okay this is my first fic tell me what you think

The forest rang out with an ear shattering crack and a scream like that of a demon from the lowest bowels of hell.

There was a large thud as the boy hit a tree. The setting sun's orange rays turned the boy's blond hair into molten gold as he lay motionless against the trunk.

"Foolish brat, did you really think you had the slightest chance of beating me?" his opponent smirked as he walked slowly over to the inert body, "I've already broken all of your limbs, there's no point in trying to resist. You will never-" he leaned his head back as a kunai passed in front of his face, "Ah, it would seem your friends are here, this is going to be interesting."

Sure enough, at that moment Kiba, along with a full grown Akamaru, burst through the trees. "Garouga no jutsu (double wolf fang)!" two cyclones flew towards the man standing over Naruto making him jump back to dodge the attack. Kiba and Akamaru stopped in front of the blond, putting themselves between him and his attacker.

"Naruto-kun are you ok?" he strained to look up, Hinata was standing next to him in a defensive stance.

"You know me, a few broken bones never stopped Uzamaki Naruto, believe it." he said weakly with a small grin. He turned his head when he heard a gasp and soon wished he hadn't. Pain shot through his body and he let out a groan.

Naruto-kun! Sit still, we've got this." He looked over and saw this was true. The person he could barely touch was lying on the ground, Kiba standing over his still body.

"H-how did you…" the strain on his body was too much and he lost consciousness.

Naruto's eyes snapped open then hurriedly closed. Man those lights hurt. Wait, lights? What happened to the forest? He slowly reopened his eyes. At first it was too bright to do more than just squint, but slowly his eyes adjusted to the light enough to make out shapes, he saw he was in a hospital room with silhouettes of people leaning over him. The closest was staring down at his face with worry in her purple tinged eyes. "Naruto-kun! You… you're awake." Hinata put a hand to his chest to keep him from getting up then snatched it away and blushed when she realized what she had done.

"Hinata… what… how did you beat him?" Naruto mumbled weakly. He tried to get up but Hinata held him down with a gentle hand.

"P-Please N-Naruto-kun… d-don't… y-you're hurt." She looked down at him with pleading eyes.

He lay back down "Alright, but what happened?"

She looked at him, relieved that he was well enough to be curious. Shino started to explain in his usual monotone, "While you were fighting that man, we made a plan. When we saw you get hurt we went in to help. Kiba distracted him while I sent one of my bugs with a deadly venom to attack the man, I find it extraordinary how little attention people pay to insects. We carried you back here after we beat him. That's basically it. That was two days ago." Naruto frowned at the anticlimactic story, he didn't like that he was bested by a bug.

Just then, a nurse walked in, "what are you doing up? With as much medicine we put you on you should be out for at least another day!"

Naruto looked confused. "What are you talking about, I feel fine."

This time it was the nurses turn to look confused, "What are you talking about?! Your arms are broken in three places, your right leg is broken in four, and you left is completely shattered, don't get me started about the rest of you! It's a wonder you survived the trip to the hospital!"

Naruto look startled at this for a second, then quickly hid his expression. "The doctors must have made a mistake. It doesn't feel like anything's broken."

"If you don't believe me I'll show you." She reached out and grabbed his wrist. He didn't even flinch which gave her a shock, even with all the medicine he was on he still should have been in a lot of pain. A look of determination appeared on her face, she performed a complicated series of hand seals. "Skeletal projection jutsu!" a green fog appeared above Naruto quickly took the shape of a human skeleton about a foot above Naruto. As soon as the image was fully formed the nurse gasped out loud getting everyone's full attention. "This isn't right, it should have taken you at least three months to heal this much!"

Naruto didn't seem to understand, "So, if I'm all better can I go?"

Naruto sighed as he was down the street. He thought he would never get out of that hospital. It had taken him almost four hours to convince them to let him go. Now all he wanted to do was get some ramen and go to bed. He walked into the Ichiraku noodle shop, said hello to Ayame and her father, and ordered his usual of everything on the menu.

He was halfway through his eighth bowel when he felt someone sit down beside him. He stopped eating and looked up to see who it was, "Oh, hey Sakura. What are you doing here?"

"I was looking for you. I heard what happened at the hospital today, I came to make sure you were okay."

"I'm fine. I just can't get over how easy that guy beat me." He looked into the swirling mass of noodles that sat before him. "Even with all the training I've been through I couldn't even touch him. If it weren't for Shino we'd probably all be-"

"Don't think about that Naruto." She cut him off, "What matters is you're okay."

Hearing this he put on that goofy grin that only he could pull off, "you know Sakura, if I didn't know better I'd say you-"

"Naruto," she cut him off again, "we're having a moment, don't ruin it."

He just started laughing, he stopped actually hitting on Sakura long ago, he just enjoyed annoying her. He finished his meal and brought out his gama-chan to pay. He said good bye to Sakura and the Ichiraku family and headed home.

Naruto stared up at the ceiling. He couldn't sleep, he kept thinking about that fight. What's wrong with me I couldn't even touch him. He got out of bed and got dressed in his usual orange and black. "Maybe a walk will help me clear my mind."

It was a cool cloudless night. The moon was nearly full, giving off silver light that brightened up the darkness of night. Naruto sighed as he looked up into the dark blue infinity of the sky. He decided to turn away from the lights of the city and turned down a path that lead into the woods to better enjoy the night sky.

He walked silently through the forest trying to think the fight over. It had all happened so fast, they were on their way back from a simple mission to secure a trade agreement with a local village. Naruto got overly excited about coming home and dashed ahead. Kiba Hinata and Shino were used to these sudden outbursts so they just let him go on not giving it a second thought.

flashback

At first Naruto didn't know what hit him. He was running along to get back to the village when all of a sudden a man appeared in front of him and punched him in the stomach knocking him through the air before landing and skidding several feet along the ground. From that point on it was all a blur. He remembered fighting as hard as he could and being unable to get in a good hit, and then a searing pain in his arms and legs, blacking out momentarily and waking to find Hinata standing over him protectively before he lost consciousness again.

end flahback

Naruto was brought out of his memories when he heard a sound.

splash

yay! first chapter complete! now review and tell me what you think. be brutal I can handle it. tell me what to do to be better or it will never get any better. five reviews or you dont get to see what happens next!!

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