ALLIANCES
ok so like i said this iks my first story be nice plz (Which is virtually impossible at this point. . .)

btw its set afte rsunset so

ThunderClan

Leader: Firestar - ginger tom with a flame-colored pelt (And GREEN EYES can't forget that. . . Oh look, you already did. . .)

Deputy: Brambleclaw - dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes

Medicine Cat: JayFeather-gray tom (Too descriptive to believe. Now tell us why Jayfeather is named Jayfeather if he's just a gray tom? You do know that he has light blue eyes and that he's blind?)

Warriors:

Squirrelflight - dark ginger she-cat with green eyes

Apprentice, Foxpaw (Who looks liiike. . . ?)

Dustpelt - dark brown tabby tom

Sandstorm - pale ginger she-ca (*Searches up she-ca on Google Images and is scarred for life*)

Cloudtail - long-haired white tom (Cool. So I assume that his pelt is rainbow, and so are his eyes? Like Starkit?)

Apprentice DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (Daisy is NOT an apprentice. She's technically like the head queen of the nursery, even if she isn't caring for kits at the moment.)

Brackenfur - golden brown tabby tom (With rainbow eyes? DESCRIPTIONS PLEASE)

Sorreltail - tortoiseshell-and-white she-cat with amber eyes

Thornclaw - golden brown tabby tom (Again with the colorless eyes. . . )

Brightheart - white she-cat with ginger patches (You forgot that she has one eye. . . And the color. . .)

Spiderleg - long-limbed black tom with brown underbelly and amber eyes

Whitewing - white she-cat with green eyes

Apprentice, Icepaw (Appearance?)

Birchfall - light brown tabby tom (Eye color?)

Graystripe - long-haired gray tom (Eye color?)

Berrynose - cream-colored tom (Eye color?)

Hazeltail - small gray-and-white she-cat (Eye color?)

Mousewhisker - gray-and-white tom (Eye color?)

Cinderheart - gray tabby she-cat (Eye color?)

Poppyfrost - tortoiseshell she-cat (Eye color?)

Honeyfern- light brown tabby she-cat (Eye color?)

Lionblaze - golden tabby tom (Eye color?)

Hollyleaf - black she-cat (Eye color?)

FoxHeart-reddish tabby tom (Eye color?)

IceFire-white she cat (Eye color?)

ToadRibbit-black—and-white tom (I really can't. . . "Ribbit" Isn't even part of the warrior cats' vocabulary. . . and where's the eye color?)

RoseFlame-dark cream she cat (Eye color?)

BriarStorm-dark brown she cat (Eye color? Bleuh this is probably annoying for you guys but. . :P)

BumbleFlower-very pale gray tom with black stipes ("Flower" Is reserved for she-cats, right? Idk)

BlossomWind-pale brown she cat iwth a dark stripe along her spine (Yes! "iwth" no eye color!)

Apprentices:

Fox DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (Is it a fox named DaisyPaw or a Daisy-Pawed cat called Fox?)

FlamePaw-firecolored she cat with one grnee eye one blue eye ("Firecolored" is definitely a word. Firecolored.)

LakePaw-bright blue gray she cat with blue eyes

The last 2 r starKits siters (Starkit has two sitters? As in, like, what we call babysitters? Wow, they really spoil this kit a lot. . .)

JazzPaw-red she cat with blue eyes and a black tail (Yes, "Jazz" is the most widely used Warrior name ever! Like, totally! NOT.)

Queens:

Ferncloud - pale gray (with darker flecks) she-cat with green eyes mother of Dustpelts kits

Dawnsparkle-bright tortishell she cat with garguntan blue eye's mother of Jayfeathers' ktis, formaly of Shadowclan (I thought she had a different name. . . She has "garguntan" blue eyes? Uhhh. . .

Kits:

StarKit-graysh-blue-and purple she cat with molting orange eyes and a white star on her forhaed (Is a forhaed the part that marks that she is the most pompous worm-headed snot-faced camel turd-ish cat that has ever existed? Yes, I made a Wings of Fire reference by Tui T. Sutherland. That's another one of my favorite book series. By the way, how is a cat grayish-blue AND PURPLE?)

Elders:

Longtail - pale tabby tom with dark black stripes, retired early due to failing sight

Mousefur - small dusky brown she-cat

Weaslepelt-big red tabby he cat with bight yellow eyes (hes Rowanclaw's dad, he came to Thunderclan when Dawn- did0

LeafPool-brown tabby she cat

ShadowClan

Leader: Blackstar - large white tom with huge jet-black paws

Deputy: Russetfur - dark ginger she-cat

Medicine Cat: Littlecloud - very small tabby tom

Apprentice, Flamepaw (ginger tom)

Warriors:

Oakfur - small brown tom (No words for this description.)

Apprentice, Tigerpaw (dark brown tabby tom) (Why are the descriptions of the apprentices separated with parenthesis instead of dashes? Idk)

Rowanclaw - ginger tom (Descriptive.)

Smokefoot - black tom (Too descriptive, OMIGOSH. There won't be a lot more comments after this one. . .)

Apprentice, Owlpaw (light brown tabby tom)

Ivytail - black, white and tortoiseshell she-cat

Apprentice, Dawnpaw (cream-furred she-cat)

Toadfoot - dark brown tom

Crowfrost - black-and-white tom

Apprentice, Olivepaw (tortoiseshell she-cat)

Kinkfur - tabby she-cat, with long fur that sticks out at all angles

Ratscar - brown tom with long scar across his back

Apprentice, Shrewpaw (gray she-cat with black feet)

Snaketail - dark brown tabby tom with striped tail

Apprentice, Scorchpaw (dark gray tom)

Whitewater - white she-cat with long fur, blind in one eye

Apprentice, Redpaw (mottled brown and ginger tom)

Tawnypelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes

Flamewind- flame color tabby tom with green eye's

Tigerclaw-huge dark brown tabby tom with long claw's and amber eys

DawnFeather-cream tabby she cat (shes a different cant then the one in tC ok?)

OlivePaw-bright brown she cat

Queens:

Snowbird - pure white she-cat

Elders:

Cedarheart - dark gray tom

Tallpoppy - long-legged light brown she-cat

WindClan

Leader: Onestar - brown tabby tom

Deputy: Ashfoot - gray she-cat

Medicine Cat: Barkface - short-tailed brown tom

Apprentice, Kestrelpaw (mottled gray tom)

Warriors:

Tornear - tabby tom

Crowfeather - dark gray tom

Owlwhisker - light brown tabby tom

Whitetail - small white she-cat

Nightcloud - black she-cat

Gorsetail - very pale gray-and-white cat with blue eyes

Weaselfur - ginger tom with white paws

Harespring - brown-and-white tom

Leaftail - dark tabby tom, amber eyes

Apprentice, Thistlepaw (long-haired white tom)

Dewspots - spotted gray she-cat

Apprentice, Sedgepaw (light brown tabby she-cat)

Willowclaw - gray she-cat

Apprentice, Swallowpaw (dark gray she-cat)

Antpelt - brown tom with one black ear

Emberfoot - gray tom with two dark paws

Apprentice, Sunpaw (tortoiseshell she-cat with large white mark on her forehead)

Heathertail - light brown tabby she-cat with blue eyes

Breezepelt - black tom with amber eyes

Elders:

Morningflower - very old tortoiseshell queen

Webfoot - dark gray tabby tom

RiverClan

Leader: Leopardstar - unusually spotted golden tabby she-cat

Deputy: Mistyfoot - gray she-cat with blue eyes

Medicine Cat: Mothwing - dappled golden she-cat

Apprentice, Willowshine (gray tabby she-cat)

Warriors:

Blackclaw - smoky-black tom

Voletooth - small brown tabby tom

Apprentice, Minnowpaw (dark gray she-cat)

Reedwhisker - black tom

Mosspelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes

Apprentice, Pebblepaw (mottled gray tom)

Beechfur - light brown tom

Rippletail - dark gray tabby tom

Apprentice, Mallowpaw (light brown tabby tom)

Graymist - pale gray tabby

Dawnflower - pale gray she-cat

Dapplenose - mottled gray she-cat

Pouncetail - ginger-and-white tom

Mintfur - light gray tabby tom

Apprentice, Nettlepaw (dark brown tabby tom)

Otterheart - dark brown she-cat

Apprentice, Sneezepaw (gray-and-white tom) (Who names their kit SNEEZEKIT? Like, seriously, this author has a problem with naming cats. . . )

Pinefur - very short-haired tabby she-cat

Apprentice, Robinpaw (tortoiseshell-and-white tom)

Rainstorm - mottled gray-blue tom

Duskfur - brown tabby she-cat

Apprentice, Copperpaw (dark ginger she-cat)

Queens:

Icewing - white cat with green eyes, mother of Beetlekit, Pricklekit, Petalkit, and Grasskit

Elders:

Heavystep - thickset tabby tom

Swallowtail - dark tabby she-cat

Stonestream - gray tom

Chpater oen prouloge (Yes. "Chpater oen" and the "prouloge" are the same things. Totally.)
The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly. (Wow, such an interesting pool! It must be better than even a WARRIOR CEREMONY!) A dark shape appeared on the surface. (I wonder if it spelled out "WARNING, AN IDIOT BEEN BORN IN THUNDERCLAN!") A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright. (Great, now they gave poor Bluestar pocket flashlights for eyes. WHAT HAVE YOU DONE, AUTHOR?)

"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." (Cool. Kill me now. I can't take much more of this crap.)

"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest," He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar. "she has powers nobody dreamed of." (Yeah, nobody has dreamed of them before. They probably had NIGHTMARES about them, not dreams.) Said the gold tom. "Should we tell JayFeather?" (No. tell him to get rid of that stupid kit immediately.) He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know."

She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy. (Why did they know that they needed to stare in some random pool in StarClan's territory, anyway?)

did u like it? plz tell me in urm review! (No, I didn't like it.)