Hi. For those of you who haven't read my profile, which I'm sure is most if not all of you, I'm Mac.
This, as I'm sure you know, is a Law And Order:CI fanfic.
Now I know some people don't like me doing a description at the beginning of a story. I will fit it in at some point of the story, but I have always liked having a description at the beginning so I can look back and remind myself what the character looks like, with out havening to reread the whole story. If you don't like a description of a character then skip it. Don't write to me complaining about it. Another thing I like to do is to change POV's( Point OF View.) a lot. I have had people say that it is confusing. I think it is not because I make it very clear who's POV it is. If I don't, please tell me.
Next, I am not the best speller, and I just got a spell check thing, but it dose not always give me the right words. Please tell me, nicely, if I spell something wrong.
I have not seen a lot of the new episodes, so I am basing this on the older ones. If you don't like something, tell me. I love to hear others ideas, but please do it NICELY.
Also,a lot of people just tell me what I am doing wrong. Don't get me wrong, I like to know when I mess up, but I also like to know when I do something right.
If you do R&R, I will most likely write you back, but not always. For many reasons. The first being that I just started my second week of school, and I tend to crash when I get home. That reminds me, the only reason I am up right now is that there is a show on TV that I want to see. Normally I will only update on the weekends. The other reason I will not respond to someone committing on something I write is if it is only mean things.
Anyway thank you for reading this, and have a great week. Later.
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Name: Jacqueline Malory. ( Jack, Jacky)
Age: 23.
Looks: Thigh length wavy black hair, black eyes, fair skin that never seems to tan or burn, and she is 4"9.
Job: Psychic.
Family: Her Dad, James, and her brothers', Jeremy and Jacob. Both of her brothers are older than her.
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Jack's POV:
I am standing with Caption Deakins, or James as he had asked me to call him, at a crime scene. I had just been hired to help the Major Case Squad. Today is my first day.
My name is Jacqueline Malory. I am a 4"9 female, with thigh length black hair and eyes that contrasted with my pail skin. I have been a Psychic since I could remember. I am told my mother, whom died when I was very young, was where I got it from. She was from a long line of gypsys. My father, James, is British, but my older brothers, Jeremy and Jacob, and I where raised in America.
I know there are a lot of people who did not believe in my ability, in anyone. Most changed there mind after knowing me for a while. I know that it disturbs people, that I see ghosts, but I pay them no mind. I mean, sure, the idea that some one can see dead people is creepy, but I really have no sympathy for them, and when people tell me that they don't want to be around my because of what I see, giving those reasons, I tell them ' That's nothing compared to actually SEEING them.' and it's not. I once woke up to a man holding his head, a head that was not connected to his body. Pretty creepy for a 6 year old. My scream woke the whole block.
Anyway, James and I had been waiting 3 minutes for his detectives. We had not seen the body yet, because James said' Det. Goren will want to see it as it was.'. Apparently Det. Goren is compared to a modern day Sherlock Holmes. I had no problem in waiting. I don't have to be near a body to see a ghost. The victim is standing next to me, quite ovesly in shock. I had not told James that the ghost is standing next to him. It tended to creep people out.
The woman was quite pretty when she was alive, with shoulder length blond hair, bue eyes, and tan skin.
Some ghosts look like there body when they died, take for example the ghost from when I was 6, he his head cut off, which is how he died, the other type of ghost is the kind that look like they are still alive. The ghost standing next to me and James is like the last one. If every one could see her they would think that she was alive. The fact that she is standing IN a rock kind of takes away from that image though.
We had been waiting 5 minutes when the Detectives arrived. One is a short female, though she is taller than me she is only 5"5 topes, and she has short dirty blond hair, brown eyes, and lightly tanned skin. She smiled at me when she got to us.
The other is a tall man. I mean tall. He is at least 6"2 with black hair with some gray in it ( very little), brown eyes, and tan skin. When he got to us, he gave me a lite smile an a curious look.
" Glad you two could make it. I'm sorry to pull you out of bed at this hour." It is 5:12. " May I introduce Jacqueline Malory. She will be working with us from now on."
I smiled at them and shook there hands." It's nice to meet you both. Please call me Jack or Jacky." I insisted.
" Jacqueline Malory. Your a Psychic, right?" Det. Goren asked.
" That's right. How did you know?" I asked him.
" I read an article on you. You helped to get the cereal killer, Thomas Johnson, put away."
I nodded. " That's right. We should go look at the body."
He agreed. " How do you do it? Do you need to touch the body or something like that?" He asked.
" No, I'll just talk to her." I answered.
Det. Eames gave me a strange look." There was a witness?" She asked.
" The best kind." I answered, realizing that she must not know anything about Psychic's. " The victim."
" But she's dead."
" Mm-hmm. But that's what I do, talk to dead people." I informed her. I stopped walking and turned to look at the dead woman who was following us. " Grace." I said to her.
She looked at me." You can see me?"
" Of course, weren't you listening to are conversation, I'm a psychic. Or a medium. Depends on who you ask." I said to her. A lot of people are now looking at me funny. All except Det. Goren.
" How long has she been here?" He asked.
" Sense I got here." I replied.
He nodded and went to look at her body. Det. Eames just shook her head and followed him.
I spook to Grace, and drew her description of her killer. It took some time because she was very upset, of course she did just die, but I did it and got everything she could remember down in my note book, I always have one with me so that I can write anything I see down or anything a ghost says.
I gave the everything I got from her to the detectives when we got to the station. By then Det. Eames had told me to call her Alex, and sense everyone else was doing it, Det. Goren told me to call him Robert.
Robert and Alex went to study the evidence, James went to his office, ans I went to sleep. The best thing a psychic could do, as we get more from our dreams, than from paper.
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Well I hope everyone liked it. I hope I did not make anyone OFC ( Out Of Character ), but I think Goren might be, at lest a little.
If you don't under stand anything tell me. And please write what you don't under stand, don't just say you didn't get something. Well please R&R. Later.