Hey this is my first fanfic ever it's not done, and I was wondering if you guys could review it and tell me how I'm doing so far. Thanks. And it's after Pollo Loco, I know its late but I just wanted to post this to know if I have any writing.. talent?
Disclaimer: Dark Angel and it's characters are property of FOX, and I'm not taking any credit, I'm just an over obsessed fan that likes stories. =]
Problems
"Hey is something wrong?" Max quietly said to Logan as he quickly stuffed some papers into a yellow envelope.
'They were pictures, of me, how did he get those?' Max questions herself.
Logan, unsure of his emotions quickly answers, "No, why would anything be wrong?"
"I dunno you just seem kinda spacey tonight."
"Well, I guess rain does that to you."
"Guess so." Max answers suspiciously. Trying to make best out of the situation, Max quickly adds, "You know seeing Ben showed me so much about how much I've changed since the escape. I mean he's still hanging on to the past while.. well I've moved on."
"Yea.. I guess so.." Logan answers softly.
Seeing that as her mark, Max heads towards the door. "Well I better get back home. If I don't show up for work tomorrow, Normal will probably 'bip bip bip' me to death. Night."
"Hmm? Oh yeah good night."
Max thinks to herself on her Ninja. 'What the hell is his problem tonight? Well, I guess I was acting like a bitch the last couple of days. Oh what the hell who am I fooling. Logan thinks I'm a cold blooded killer, and how can I make him think any different.'
A couple of days go by. Max starts getting worried because Logan hasn't been paging her.
Original Cindy walks through the door. "Lover boy still not call?"
"Nope."
"Don't worry boo, he aint worth the wrinkles."
"Yeah..."
Logan sits in front of his computer not knowing what to do. He thinks to himself, 'Damn, why am I letting this get to me? I know she won't hurt me. I can't hate her and exclude her cuz of her past. Hell, I think I'm in love with her. If I love her, why can't I get the words out?'
At that moment, the phone rings. "The machine clicks, and the familiar voice of Max comes on from the other line. "Hey it's me. Just been curious bout what you been up to. A girl gets bored with nothing dangerous to do. Call me --"
Logan reaches the phone just in time. "Max."
"Hey I was wondering what you were doing lately."
"Oh just stuff, you know world to save and all."
"Yeah well need any help?"
"I think I can handle it for now."
"Alright.. then later"
"Yeah later."
Logan hears the dial tone as Max hangs up. 'Damn it, you had a chance. Well maybe I'd have a chance if I didn't have a wheelchair growing out of my ass.'
Logan continues to sit and stare at the screen.
Back at the apartment, OC is trying to cheer Max up.
"Come on boo. Wheels aint worth it."
"Hmm."
"Damn you do have it bad huh?"
"Hmm."
"Original Cindy's gonna perk your ass up. Come on"
"You know I don't feel like going out today."
"Too bad get dressed."
Original Cindy and Max go out to a club.
Men at the entrance comment on Original Cindy and Max.
"Are those some nasty pigs or what?"
"Hmm."
"Max!"
"Yeah?"
"Original Cindy don't know how the whole heterosexual night out thing works,
but she know it aint like this. You gonna find a man tonight and cheer you ass up."
"Right."
As Max and OC sit at the bar, OC spots a woman checkin her out. Max sees OC looking back.
"Hey why don't you go talk to her?"
"You sure?"
"Positive."
"Aiight boo, thanks."
"Hmm."
Max sits and stares at nothing when a hot looking guy walks up.
"This seat taken?"
"I dunno, would you sit down if it was?"
"No."
"Then it's taken, sorry."
A grin appears in the corner of the guy's mouth.
"Hi, I'm Aaron." Aaron streches out his hand for a handshake.
Max just stares at the hand then at Aaron.
"What do you want, an award?"
"No.. but I would like to get to know you."
"And why exactly would that be?"
"Because your not like the other girls here."
"Oh please!" Max lets out a sigh of annoyance. "You got all that from the back of my head?"
"So you wanna go get some coffee?"
"Would that make you leave me alone?"
"If we don't have any chemistry then yes."
"Fine."
Max tells Original Cindy she'll meet her at home. Max and Aaron go outside and walked towards a local coffee shop.
"So I'm guessing socialization isn't one your best qualities." Aaron jokingly suggests.
"Why be nice when you can be honest. And I'm guessing subtlety isn't one of your best qualities."
"Why take it slow when you won't get anywhere."
Max manages to let out a faint smile.
"So whats a beautiful girl like you doing at a club alone?"
"How is that any of your business.?" Max sarcastically says.
"Whoa, just asking. So those that attitude come with a name?"
"I dunno does that nonstop talkshow come with a remote?"
Aaron laughs. "No. So you gonna answer my questions or not?"
Max sighs. "My name's Max."
The pair walks without anymore words to a nearby coffee house. Just as they it down, Max's pager starts to ring.
"Sorry gotta get this." Max says as she stands up and heads towards the pay phone.
"No problem." Aaron answers although Max is already out of hearing range.
The phone rings and Logan quickly picks it up. "Max. I got some information I think you'll like. Maybe you'll wanna come by and get it."
Max irritably answers. "You know what I'm kinda busy right now, I'll swing by later aiight?"
As Logan sits in silence, he can hear a guy in the background. "Hey Max what do you want?"
Max answers. "Just coffee, thanks."
Logan clears his throat trying to make his presence known. "So who's that?"
"I dunno just some guy. Well I gotta blaze. Lates"
As Logan trys to answer, he realizes that Max had already hung up.
After their coffee date, Aaron offers Max a ride home.
Max answers, "Thanks anyways, but I don't make a habit of getting in cars with strangers."
"Yeah I understand." Aaron says with a worried look on his face.
Max lets out a small chuckle. "Don't worry I'll be fine.
Max starts to walk, and Aaron follows her from a distance. Max, realizing that someone's following her, speeds up in her strides and zooms in to see a man in dark clothes following her.
Aaron sees a man following Max and without thinking jumps out of his car and run towards the man.
"Max! Watch out!."
Max spins around to see two men flying towards her. She instinctively steps out of the way, and sees Aaron getting his ass kicked by a dark man. Max kicks the man off of Aaron and sees that he is unconscious. The man and Max start to fight the man starts to hit and block, and Max realizes that he is an experienced fighter. Sounds of sirens ring out and the man starts running. Max quickly runs to Aaron's side, and checks his pulse.
"God, this night sucks." She says as she carries Aaron back to her place.
"You can come out.. I know you're following me." Lydecker speaks into the darkness.
"Why if it isn't good ol' Deck." The man mockingly said.
Lydecker, wondering whether to turn or stay with his back turned to the man, says,
"Well it's been a while hasn't it."
Lydecker slowly pulls a gun out of his coat pocket.
"I guess so."
The man, equipped with only a grin on his devilish face, speeds by Lydecker's side and takes the gun out of his hand.
"Seems like you haven't lost any of your speed." Lydecker jokingly states.
"You know I should just shoot you now, but it's more fun torturing you." The man says.
"So why did you want to meet me here?" Lydecker questions.
"I just wanted to see you." The man answers.
Lydecker turns around only to see that he is all alone. An evil chuckle is heard
echoing in the darkness. Lydecker is unable to hide his emotions, and his eyes become red and watery. 'Shake it off soldier!' Lydecker commands himself. Headlights of a car are seen and Lydecker gets in.
Max is on her bike, when her pager starts to ring. A familiar number appears on the screen. Max walks into Logan's apartment, only to see him once again in front of his computer.
"Blowin up my pager, this better be major." Max sarcastically says.
Since Logan is used to Max's cynical behavior, he says calmly, "You never came by last night, I was worried." He pauses. "Anyways, I got some news."
"Bout what?"
"A man was found dead this morning. The man was killed exactly the same way that Ben killed his victims. Except for the barcode of course."
"So it's some crazy psycho trying to scare everyone. He'll get busted soon."
"I doubt it. This killer was incredibly strong too." Logan remembers the pictures that Lydecker sent him and quickly adds. "By the way, where were you last night?"
"Wait you don't think I did it, do you?" Max questions.
"No, of course not, I was just wondering where you were."
"I was out."
"Doing what?."
"None of you damn business. Look I wasn't out killing anyone alright?!"
Max angrily storms out of the apartment.
She thinks to herself while on her bike. 'I can't believe Logan thinks I'm a murderer. Didn't he know that I could see those pictures when he was stuffing them into that envelope. Damn, what I won't give to be normal for once, no one would suspect me of anything. I mean I can't just straight up tell him that I was on a date, can I? Wait, we're not like that. I think. Forget it, he'll get over it... I hope.'
Logan is back on his computer as Bling walks in.
"Hey you got another letter in the contact room." Bling hands Logan a regular white envelope. Logan opens it and starts to read.
"Looks like Lydecker wants to meet again."
"Why? Do you think it's safe?"
"It's says that it's about the safety of the X-5s and no I don't think it's safe."
"What are you gonna do?"
"Not sure."
Bling nods to Logan and walks out of the room leaving Logan staring at the letter from Lydecker.
Back at the apartment, Max walks in and sees Original Cindy being annoyed by Aaron.
"Damn girl." She says to Max as she walks in. "Can you take this bitch away?"
"What'd I do?!" Aaron questions.
Original Cindy rolls her eyes, and walks into her room.
"Hey, what happened last night anyways?" He asks Max.
"You don't remember?"
"No." Aaron says grinning. "All I know is that I woke up in an incredibly sexy lady's bed and my body aches all over. You like it rough don't you?"
"Look I'd love to stay here and listen to your little perverse dreams, but I have to go to work. I think you should leave before Original Cindy gets pissed and kicks your ass."
"Well how bout lunch today? Then you can explain to me what REALLY happened last night."
"Thanks but I'd rather not, your better off not knowing."
"Come on."
"Look there's somethings about me your safe not knowing."
"What, that your a monster in bed?"
"Look we didn't get it on or anything ok?!"
"Then what DID we do?!" Aaron says loudly.
"I saved your ass from getting killed is what happened alright!?" Max says full of rage, and bursts out the door.
A small disk falls out of the envelope from Lydecker, and Logan pops it into his computer. Logan determined to find more information for Max is searching through sources. He uncovers a file named 'Project Daniel' in a folder full of Manticore information. As he opens the file, a picture of Lydecker and a boy pops up. Under the picture, information pops up.
Subject name: Daniel L.
D.O.B.: August 22, 1986
Logan scans through the basic appearance information and stops at a section.
Significant changes since 03/25/97: Subject showing violent outbursts, refuses to follow orders.
Last seen: Unknown
Logan wonders to himself, 'what does this have to do with anything.' As he looks through the file, he sees more pictures of experiments and then a picture of Lydecker, his wife, and Daniel. As Logan looks at the pictures, a thought pops in his head. 'Lydecker had a genetically engineered son."
Disclaimer: Dark Angel and it's characters are property of FOX, and I'm not taking any credit, I'm just an over obsessed fan that likes stories. =]
Problems
"Hey is something wrong?" Max quietly said to Logan as he quickly stuffed some papers into a yellow envelope.
'They were pictures, of me, how did he get those?' Max questions herself.
Logan, unsure of his emotions quickly answers, "No, why would anything be wrong?"
"I dunno you just seem kinda spacey tonight."
"Well, I guess rain does that to you."
"Guess so." Max answers suspiciously. Trying to make best out of the situation, Max quickly adds, "You know seeing Ben showed me so much about how much I've changed since the escape. I mean he's still hanging on to the past while.. well I've moved on."
"Yea.. I guess so.." Logan answers softly.
Seeing that as her mark, Max heads towards the door. "Well I better get back home. If I don't show up for work tomorrow, Normal will probably 'bip bip bip' me to death. Night."
"Hmm? Oh yeah good night."
Max thinks to herself on her Ninja. 'What the hell is his problem tonight? Well, I guess I was acting like a bitch the last couple of days. Oh what the hell who am I fooling. Logan thinks I'm a cold blooded killer, and how can I make him think any different.'
A couple of days go by. Max starts getting worried because Logan hasn't been paging her.
Original Cindy walks through the door. "Lover boy still not call?"
"Nope."
"Don't worry boo, he aint worth the wrinkles."
"Yeah..."
Logan sits in front of his computer not knowing what to do. He thinks to himself, 'Damn, why am I letting this get to me? I know she won't hurt me. I can't hate her and exclude her cuz of her past. Hell, I think I'm in love with her. If I love her, why can't I get the words out?'
At that moment, the phone rings. "The machine clicks, and the familiar voice of Max comes on from the other line. "Hey it's me. Just been curious bout what you been up to. A girl gets bored with nothing dangerous to do. Call me --"
Logan reaches the phone just in time. "Max."
"Hey I was wondering what you were doing lately."
"Oh just stuff, you know world to save and all."
"Yeah well need any help?"
"I think I can handle it for now."
"Alright.. then later"
"Yeah later."
Logan hears the dial tone as Max hangs up. 'Damn it, you had a chance. Well maybe I'd have a chance if I didn't have a wheelchair growing out of my ass.'
Logan continues to sit and stare at the screen.
Back at the apartment, OC is trying to cheer Max up.
"Come on boo. Wheels aint worth it."
"Hmm."
"Damn you do have it bad huh?"
"Hmm."
"Original Cindy's gonna perk your ass up. Come on"
"You know I don't feel like going out today."
"Too bad get dressed."
Original Cindy and Max go out to a club.
Men at the entrance comment on Original Cindy and Max.
"Are those some nasty pigs or what?"
"Hmm."
"Max!"
"Yeah?"
"Original Cindy don't know how the whole heterosexual night out thing works,
but she know it aint like this. You gonna find a man tonight and cheer you ass up."
"Right."
As Max and OC sit at the bar, OC spots a woman checkin her out. Max sees OC looking back.
"Hey why don't you go talk to her?"
"You sure?"
"Positive."
"Aiight boo, thanks."
"Hmm."
Max sits and stares at nothing when a hot looking guy walks up.
"This seat taken?"
"I dunno, would you sit down if it was?"
"No."
"Then it's taken, sorry."
A grin appears in the corner of the guy's mouth.
"Hi, I'm Aaron." Aaron streches out his hand for a handshake.
Max just stares at the hand then at Aaron.
"What do you want, an award?"
"No.. but I would like to get to know you."
"And why exactly would that be?"
"Because your not like the other girls here."
"Oh please!" Max lets out a sigh of annoyance. "You got all that from the back of my head?"
"So you wanna go get some coffee?"
"Would that make you leave me alone?"
"If we don't have any chemistry then yes."
"Fine."
Max tells Original Cindy she'll meet her at home. Max and Aaron go outside and walked towards a local coffee shop.
"So I'm guessing socialization isn't one your best qualities." Aaron jokingly suggests.
"Why be nice when you can be honest. And I'm guessing subtlety isn't one of your best qualities."
"Why take it slow when you won't get anywhere."
Max manages to let out a faint smile.
"So whats a beautiful girl like you doing at a club alone?"
"How is that any of your business.?" Max sarcastically says.
"Whoa, just asking. So those that attitude come with a name?"
"I dunno does that nonstop talkshow come with a remote?"
Aaron laughs. "No. So you gonna answer my questions or not?"
Max sighs. "My name's Max."
The pair walks without anymore words to a nearby coffee house. Just as they it down, Max's pager starts to ring.
"Sorry gotta get this." Max says as she stands up and heads towards the pay phone.
"No problem." Aaron answers although Max is already out of hearing range.
The phone rings and Logan quickly picks it up. "Max. I got some information I think you'll like. Maybe you'll wanna come by and get it."
Max irritably answers. "You know what I'm kinda busy right now, I'll swing by later aiight?"
As Logan sits in silence, he can hear a guy in the background. "Hey Max what do you want?"
Max answers. "Just coffee, thanks."
Logan clears his throat trying to make his presence known. "So who's that?"
"I dunno just some guy. Well I gotta blaze. Lates"
As Logan trys to answer, he realizes that Max had already hung up.
After their coffee date, Aaron offers Max a ride home.
Max answers, "Thanks anyways, but I don't make a habit of getting in cars with strangers."
"Yeah I understand." Aaron says with a worried look on his face.
Max lets out a small chuckle. "Don't worry I'll be fine.
Max starts to walk, and Aaron follows her from a distance. Max, realizing that someone's following her, speeds up in her strides and zooms in to see a man in dark clothes following her.
Aaron sees a man following Max and without thinking jumps out of his car and run towards the man.
"Max! Watch out!."
Max spins around to see two men flying towards her. She instinctively steps out of the way, and sees Aaron getting his ass kicked by a dark man. Max kicks the man off of Aaron and sees that he is unconscious. The man and Max start to fight the man starts to hit and block, and Max realizes that he is an experienced fighter. Sounds of sirens ring out and the man starts running. Max quickly runs to Aaron's side, and checks his pulse.
"God, this night sucks." She says as she carries Aaron back to her place.
"You can come out.. I know you're following me." Lydecker speaks into the darkness.
"Why if it isn't good ol' Deck." The man mockingly said.
Lydecker, wondering whether to turn or stay with his back turned to the man, says,
"Well it's been a while hasn't it."
Lydecker slowly pulls a gun out of his coat pocket.
"I guess so."
The man, equipped with only a grin on his devilish face, speeds by Lydecker's side and takes the gun out of his hand.
"Seems like you haven't lost any of your speed." Lydecker jokingly states.
"You know I should just shoot you now, but it's more fun torturing you." The man says.
"So why did you want to meet me here?" Lydecker questions.
"I just wanted to see you." The man answers.
Lydecker turns around only to see that he is all alone. An evil chuckle is heard
echoing in the darkness. Lydecker is unable to hide his emotions, and his eyes become red and watery. 'Shake it off soldier!' Lydecker commands himself. Headlights of a car are seen and Lydecker gets in.
Max is on her bike, when her pager starts to ring. A familiar number appears on the screen. Max walks into Logan's apartment, only to see him once again in front of his computer.
"Blowin up my pager, this better be major." Max sarcastically says.
Since Logan is used to Max's cynical behavior, he says calmly, "You never came by last night, I was worried." He pauses. "Anyways, I got some news."
"Bout what?"
"A man was found dead this morning. The man was killed exactly the same way that Ben killed his victims. Except for the barcode of course."
"So it's some crazy psycho trying to scare everyone. He'll get busted soon."
"I doubt it. This killer was incredibly strong too." Logan remembers the pictures that Lydecker sent him and quickly adds. "By the way, where were you last night?"
"Wait you don't think I did it, do you?" Max questions.
"No, of course not, I was just wondering where you were."
"I was out."
"Doing what?."
"None of you damn business. Look I wasn't out killing anyone alright?!"
Max angrily storms out of the apartment.
She thinks to herself while on her bike. 'I can't believe Logan thinks I'm a murderer. Didn't he know that I could see those pictures when he was stuffing them into that envelope. Damn, what I won't give to be normal for once, no one would suspect me of anything. I mean I can't just straight up tell him that I was on a date, can I? Wait, we're not like that. I think. Forget it, he'll get over it... I hope.'
Logan is back on his computer as Bling walks in.
"Hey you got another letter in the contact room." Bling hands Logan a regular white envelope. Logan opens it and starts to read.
"Looks like Lydecker wants to meet again."
"Why? Do you think it's safe?"
"It's says that it's about the safety of the X-5s and no I don't think it's safe."
"What are you gonna do?"
"Not sure."
Bling nods to Logan and walks out of the room leaving Logan staring at the letter from Lydecker.
Back at the apartment, Max walks in and sees Original Cindy being annoyed by Aaron.
"Damn girl." She says to Max as she walks in. "Can you take this bitch away?"
"What'd I do?!" Aaron questions.
Original Cindy rolls her eyes, and walks into her room.
"Hey, what happened last night anyways?" He asks Max.
"You don't remember?"
"No." Aaron says grinning. "All I know is that I woke up in an incredibly sexy lady's bed and my body aches all over. You like it rough don't you?"
"Look I'd love to stay here and listen to your little perverse dreams, but I have to go to work. I think you should leave before Original Cindy gets pissed and kicks your ass."
"Well how bout lunch today? Then you can explain to me what REALLY happened last night."
"Thanks but I'd rather not, your better off not knowing."
"Come on."
"Look there's somethings about me your safe not knowing."
"What, that your a monster in bed?"
"Look we didn't get it on or anything ok?!"
"Then what DID we do?!" Aaron says loudly.
"I saved your ass from getting killed is what happened alright!?" Max says full of rage, and bursts out the door.
A small disk falls out of the envelope from Lydecker, and Logan pops it into his computer. Logan determined to find more information for Max is searching through sources. He uncovers a file named 'Project Daniel' in a folder full of Manticore information. As he opens the file, a picture of Lydecker and a boy pops up. Under the picture, information pops up.
Subject name: Daniel L.
D.O.B.: August 22, 1986
Logan scans through the basic appearance information and stops at a section.
Significant changes since 03/25/97: Subject showing violent outbursts, refuses to follow orders.
Last seen: Unknown
Logan wonders to himself, 'what does this have to do with anything.' As he looks through the file, he sees more pictures of experiments and then a picture of Lydecker, his wife, and Daniel. As Logan looks at the pictures, a thought pops in his head. 'Lydecker had a genetically engineered son."