Ok this is my first Soul Eater story, so please give me advise for this story. Its not that good and I don't care if the review is mean just review and tell me how it is. So I can decide if I want to continue it or not.

Maka pov

It was a sunny afternoon and I was shopping with my friends Tsubaki and Liz. Liz's sister Patty couldn't come because she was on a date with her imaginary giraffe boyfriend. I thought it was kind of weird, but thats Patty for you.

"Maka did you hear me" Liz asked me waving a hand in front of my face.

"Umm. No sorry I was just thinking. What was it you said." I aminated to my two friends, making them giggle.

"Oh, thats ok you were probably daydreaming about your boyfriend Soul." Liz said smirking.

What she said made me blush. And yes Soul Eater Evans is my boyfriend for about a year now. He's also my weapon partner for the DWMA. Soul is a really nice guy and cute too.

"She said she has to get home to Kid and Patty because they have to go on a mission tomorrow, and she needs to get ready, Also I gotta get going to Black Star and I have a date tonight." Tsubaki said nicely like usual.

I nodded OK to the two of them to go and said goodbye. Now it was just me shopping at the Death Mall alone. I only had to go to one more story so I wouldn't have to be alone at the mall for too long.

I started to walk to the bookstore well thinking about how Soul was just so nice and about how he would never hurt me. I love him so much.

After about five minutes of thinking and walking I got to the bookstore what was on the other side of the mall. At less I got my exercise for the day. Who knew shopping could take so much time and work.

I walked in the store and greeted the owner with a sweet smile and a small hello. I wanted this new book that came out a week ago, but I couldn't get it because I had to go on a mission with Soul in New York. Anyways the book was about a young girl trying to find out who she truly was. To me it sounded like a good book and I really wanted to read it. I looked around the store for the book and found it and a couple other books too.

I paid the cashier and walked out the store. I looked at the time and saw that it was only three thirty and I told Soul I wouldn't be home till five. Oh well I could pick up a movie and Soul and I could watch it together for the night. I left the the mall and begin walking to the movie store that was a block away from my apartment. By I got there and finished picking out a movie it was four, so I decided to go home and surprise Soul with me coming home early.

I was really happy I would get to see him. Even though I get to see him everyday, that I practically ran to my apartment. I know its weird for me to be so happy, but what can I say when you love someone so much you're happy all the time.

I ran and open the front door to come in, but I could have swore I locked it before I left the house. Oh well he probably had Black Star or Kid over and they forgot to lock the door when they left.

"Soul I'm home" I yelled in the house as I shut the door.

I got no answer, but I could hear music playing from his room. So i decide to go in and tell him I was home.

The closer I got the happier I got because I would get to see him. I had the biggest smile on my face and you could tell that I was happy by looking in my eyes. Step after step my pigtails bounced up and down. It felt like it took forever to get to Soul's bedroom door from the front door, when it didn't even take two minutes too.

I put my hand on the door and opened it, but I wish I could just close it and never see what I saw. Soul was on his bed making out with some blonde girl from our school. Soul didn't notice me till the blonde girls eyes went wide and she pushed him away. By this time I had dropped the movie and book and was about to break into tears.

"Maka I can explain." Soul yelled standing up and walking toward me.

"No. Just get away from me. Leave me alone. Goodbye" I screamed at him running out the front door.

I ran and ran. He broke my heart and now I'm lost. This is why I never trusted men because they're all just like Papa. Ugh I hate Soul.I ran till I got to the main park in Death City. When I got there I sat on a bench and cried and cried. I didn't know I had so many tears to cry, but I did and they didn't want to go away.

" WHY! I hate you Soul Eater Evans. I loved you and you hurt me" I screamed at the top of my lungs standing up.

After that people started to stare. Little kids begin to point and parents begin to grab their kids and leave the park. I didn't cry I was broken and I didn't care who saw me cry, and who thought I was crazy. My heart was just ripped out my chest and burned.

Ok first chapter. It short and not that good, but yeah I wanted to start it at less.

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Till next time have a good day!

~DemonKitty184