Ok. I just re-read through some of my reviews, and found one by ShaggyDiz. I have to say, thank you. You have made me re-start this story. I will try my best to use your advice. I will keep the old VLOTH up on FF.Net, so you can compare the two. Just remember that i wont be updating the old Vloth, ever again, maybe.
Also, I probably won't be making Videl an alien.
So, now, on with the story.
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"HYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!"
A boy with a cracked and bent Katana was standing in front of an injured Brachiosauras.(sp?)He had Jet-black hair, and eyes, that were pure of the same colour. What had once been a long sleeved Japanese style Dress-shirt, and black tie up pants, were now a tattered peice of white fabric, and some torn black shorts. It seemed that there was a Tyranasaurous-Rex was attacking a cave that a young boy and a dinosaur were staying in. The cave itself, had been stepped on by the T-Rex, with injured the Brachiosaurous even more, as it had gotten stepped on. A small purple flying dinosaur had flown the boy out of the cave just in time, and then ducked behind a tree.
The boy was the grandson of an amazing martial arts master on either side of his family. On his mothers side, he was the grandson of th Ox-King, and on his fathers side, he was the great grandson of the Gohan, both some of the first students, of the great Master Roshi, inventor of the Wave Of The Turtle School, AKA the Kamehameha Wave. He was called Gohan.
He lunged at the T-Rex, Sword in hand, only to be threw against a jagged rock that jutted against his, back, temporarily paralising him.
"Daaaaaaaaaaady!"
A raven haired girl about Gohans age stepped through the brolly bush about seven and a half feet behind the T-Rex. The deadly Dinosaur widened its nostrils and eyes, and Gohan swore that hee saw a tiny smirk on its face.
Meanwhile, high above them, Piccolo was watching. He was about to interfere, when the girl entered the scene. He thought that he should stay put, and se what happens. 'Besides,' he thought.'I sense two other life-forms in my forest. If they get hurt, It's there own fault for trespassing.'
The girl had frozen as as soon as she saw the scene that had unfolded itself before her.Through the silence of the moment, footsteps could be heard coming from the direction that the young girl had came. A woman that seemed just a bigger version of the girl, but had emerald green eyes, instead of the pure diamond look that the girl was sporting.
"C'mon Videl, we gotta find your fath-th-th,"She froze as she saw the ginormous dinosaur. Four seconds, the silence, and Gohan, Piccolo, and Videls ears, were pierces, by a long, high pitched, "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!!"
The woman through a capsule,that opened up into a capsule-coptor, and shouted, "Videl, get in, we gotta get outta here."
Two clangs then echoed throughout the forest. The sound of the door shutting, and the sound of the T-Rex clamping its mouth down on the capsule-copter, lifting it in the air, as the two small children looked on in shock, and Piccolo just watched.
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How was that? I hope that the people that reviewed my old story will take an interest in the brand-new revised version of Vertical Limitations Of The Heart. I also hope that new people will review. Thanks to people if they do decide to review.
Bye!
Also, I probably won't be making Videl an alien.
So, now, on with the story.
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"HYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!"
A boy with a cracked and bent Katana was standing in front of an injured Brachiosauras.(sp?)He had Jet-black hair, and eyes, that were pure of the same colour. What had once been a long sleeved Japanese style Dress-shirt, and black tie up pants, were now a tattered peice of white fabric, and some torn black shorts. It seemed that there was a Tyranasaurous-Rex was attacking a cave that a young boy and a dinosaur were staying in. The cave itself, had been stepped on by the T-Rex, with injured the Brachiosaurous even more, as it had gotten stepped on. A small purple flying dinosaur had flown the boy out of the cave just in time, and then ducked behind a tree.
The boy was the grandson of an amazing martial arts master on either side of his family. On his mothers side, he was the grandson of th Ox-King, and on his fathers side, he was the great grandson of the Gohan, both some of the first students, of the great Master Roshi, inventor of the Wave Of The Turtle School, AKA the Kamehameha Wave. He was called Gohan.
He lunged at the T-Rex, Sword in hand, only to be threw against a jagged rock that jutted against his, back, temporarily paralising him.
"Daaaaaaaaaaady!"
A raven haired girl about Gohans age stepped through the brolly bush about seven and a half feet behind the T-Rex. The deadly Dinosaur widened its nostrils and eyes, and Gohan swore that hee saw a tiny smirk on its face.
Meanwhile, high above them, Piccolo was watching. He was about to interfere, when the girl entered the scene. He thought that he should stay put, and se what happens. 'Besides,' he thought.'I sense two other life-forms in my forest. If they get hurt, It's there own fault for trespassing.'
The girl had frozen as as soon as she saw the scene that had unfolded itself before her.Through the silence of the moment, footsteps could be heard coming from the direction that the young girl had came. A woman that seemed just a bigger version of the girl, but had emerald green eyes, instead of the pure diamond look that the girl was sporting.
"C'mon Videl, we gotta find your fath-th-th,"She froze as she saw the ginormous dinosaur. Four seconds, the silence, and Gohan, Piccolo, and Videls ears, were pierces, by a long, high pitched, "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!!"
The woman through a capsule,that opened up into a capsule-coptor, and shouted, "Videl, get in, we gotta get outta here."
Two clangs then echoed throughout the forest. The sound of the door shutting, and the sound of the T-Rex clamping its mouth down on the capsule-copter, lifting it in the air, as the two small children looked on in shock, and Piccolo just watched.
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How was that? I hope that the people that reviewed my old story will take an interest in the brand-new revised version of Vertical Limitations Of The Heart. I also hope that new people will review. Thanks to people if they do decide to review.
Bye!