my first fan fiction story so please review and give me any tips to improve it and with that on with the story
i don't own Naruto i wished i did but i don't so...
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An honest report : chapter 1
(Play Naruto OST - Kakashis Theme)
Naruto was happy
No scratch that he was ecstatic, he had made to the chunnin finals. Him the class clown the dobe the idiot that couldn't do a simple clone jutsu had defined all odds and successfully beaten all challenges set to him. OK maybe he got lucky on some parts of the exam but how cared he had done it. Now he just had to make chunnin and then sakura chan would see how awesome he was and would show that teme sasuke that he was strongest and the village would finally respect him.
Naruto suddenly stopped his train of thought as he finally reached his destination. The hokage's office, it was here the strongest and most respected ninja in the village resigned in 'and hopefully one day me 'he thought.
Opening the door he saw his favorite person in the world his grandfather figure sitting on the hokages desk. hiruzen sarutobi better known as the sandaime hokage, a person that had survived 3 great shinobi wars, a man respected throughout the elemental nations given the title of the 'professor' for mastering every justsu in konoha. In his heyday he was a force to be reckoned with and even at the ripe old age of 80 he was still considered one of the strongest kages, and it was this person's opinion that meant everything to Naruto. Like always he was wearing his traditional kage clothes the hokages hat firmly planted on his head, his white beard and wrinkled skin showed how old he truly was, his brown eyes had dulled over the years but still carried the steel of a veteran warrior.
Hearing the door open the sandaime hokage looked up from his stack of paper work, only to see his grinning surrogate grandson at the entrance of the door. He smiled he enjoyed Naruto's visits they allowed him to forget his kage duties and simply act like a normal person.
"Ah Naruto my boy what can I do for you" he started kindly
"Well it's been such a long time since my last visit so…."he said while scratching the back of his head, it was true it had been almost a month since him and sandaime had talked.
"Indeed it has Naruto and in that time you've been busy. I would never expect you to be in the chunnin finals 6 months after becoming a genin." he was actually surprised how far all of the rookies had gone in the exams. He wasn't shore if it was dumb luck or actual skill that got them there.
"What did you accept old man I'm going to be hokage after all" he said exuberantly with his usual happy grin in place making the sandaime smile to." I actually came here to get your opinion on my performance in the prelims', I totally kicked butt right" he said excitedly, he was shore the sandaime would praise him on his awesomeness. But what Naruto didn't see was the slight drop in the sandaimes smile.
"He wants my opinion" the sandaime whispered to himself. Should he be honest with Naruto, tell him that he felt Naruto's chunnin exam performance was poor. He didn't want Naruto to be crushed, he knew how highly Naruto valued his opinion. 'No this for the best 'maybe if he told Naruto honestly then he might take his ninja career more seriously and reach the potential that he knew he had.
"Naruto how about we do this differently" he said simply
"What do you mean differently?" Naruto asked curiously.
"Well for each stage of the exam all genin were observed and your performances were recorded. "Sandaime said as he got up from his seat.
"What's the point in that" Naruto said simply
"They do it to record your improvements and faults, this information is then given to me and your sensei. Your sensei being kakashi. It helps us to get feel of what level you are at and gives your sensei an idea on where you need to improve. It's really quite useful. "Throughout his explanation the sandaime was rummaging through a file cabinet.
"Ah here it is" he said picking out a file and walked back to his desk. "This Naruto is the information on your specific performance in the chunnnin exam. So before I give you my opinion I'll read it to you." Naruto just nodded he didn't see any harm in that.
"Let's see this first part is on your performance in the first stage of the exam do you remember the protector for the first stage, his name was ibiki morino". He asked Naruto.
"yeah it was that really creepy guy with those all those scars on his head" he shuddered" I don't think I'll ever get it out of my memories" he said dejectedly
The sandaime just chuckled, ibiki had that effect on people." Well he's the one that wrote your performance report on the first stage. Let's read it "
Performance report – genin Naruto uzumaki age: 13
First stage of chunnin exams-
From the start of the exam genin uzumaki came across as loud boisterous and lacked any control of emotion, instead of keeping a cool calm composure so he could rationally think. He chose to show everyone that he clearly didn't know what he was doing as many times in the exam he seem to be panicking. I felt if this was a real mission he would already been caught and killed by enemy shinobi. The only reason he got through the stage was from sheer dumb luck and drive. I feel the only good point about genin uzumaki was his drive and motivation and highly advise his sensei to teach him control.
"…" Naruto was dead silent, his smile had all but gone as the report continued
"…...I'll carry on reading the rest of the report from your prelim match"said the sandaime almost wincing at the pitiful expression Naruto had. This report was done by the sickly special jounin hayate gecko, how was the protector for the chunnin prelim.
Performance report – genin Naruto uzumaki age: 13
Prelims of chunnin exams-
Genin uzumaki was easily riled up by his opponent, he seemed to lack any kind of control on his emotions. A key point I would like to discuss was when he had caught his opponent by surprise in a clever use of henge. Any sensible ninja would take full advantage of this but instead genin uzumaki simply kicked his opponent and just stopped so he could taunt him even though genin uzumaki was on the ropes the entire match. But the most shocking point in the match was at the end, it was here that genin uzumaki loudly proclaimed that he was going finish the match by using his new justsu. He even went as far as telling his opponent when he was going to use it and so his opponent could easily counter. The only reason he had won was because is high pain tolerance and bodily gas. But he did show that he was able to create a plan in ruff situations and showed great motivation. I recommend to his sensei that he learns better control of his emotions and to take full advantage of situations.
The silence was almost deafening.
Naruto just stared blankly at nothing, the sandaime inwardly sighed he expected this reaction from Naruto, he might came across as boastful and confident but in a village that saw you as a monstrosity an abomination that they wanted nothing to do with, he had no choice but to put this façade up. It pained the saindaime greatly that the village he loved would do this to a child. A lot if the time he blamed himself for not doing more for Naruto.
"Naruto look at me" he asked softly
No response
"Naruto look at me" he said more forcefully
Still no response
"Naruto!" he almost shouted
Naruto snapped out of his trance and looked at the sandaime "do you think I'm weak jiji, have I simply been lucky that I've made so far. I barely made being a genin how am I supposed become a chunnin."He said in almost in a dead tone.
The sandaime winced, he needed to do something quick or Naruto would lose his will to fight,' think think think' he mentally chanted… that could work.
"Naruto I never thought you were weak, you just haven't reached your full potential and I have plan to fix that." Naruto looked at up at him with a small glimmer of hope.
(Play Naruto Shippuuden OST 2 Gekiha)
Genin uzumaki Naruto I the sandaime hokage will be your sensei for the month before the chunnin finals you will learn discipline control and you we learn to become strong to stand up on your own two feet. do you except. "He said in the utmost seriousness and conviction
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"DO YOU EXCEPT"
"y y yes"
and on that day a legend was born.
so the end of the first chapter and again review, it would be much appreciated