I've re-written my 1st chapter of Remembrance Day, with complements to
'little miss Demosthenes' who gave me some pointers on how to make it
better.
I try not to add my own views, attitude and opinions into my stories
unless it's necessary.
Talking about not adding my own views, attitude and opinions into my stories, I don't mean to offend any Americans. In central park I just wanted Art and jewel to start their bickering again.
I love America, even though I've only been in long island and New York. That's why the gang's in NY; I know some places in it like the games place which I thinks just off Times Square. I love that place. My Ma asked where I wanted to go on my last day and I said there. See I talk too much! That was totally not anything to do with the story.
Anyway I wanted to change some things any way. I want to add central park to the proceedings to make a little pivot for my next fic. Though it'll go along the same lines.
I call Artemis 'Art' and Juliet 'Jewel' because I want to get across that Artemis is no longer a completely serious berk. (I have no idea what berk means)
*looks up at the text written* WOW how do I do these things. I was scared of writing to little but wow. # I counted up to the # using the counting boyo on word and its 233 words.
So.*takes a deep breath and pauses*I can't think of anything else to write so lets get on with it.
Disclaimer: no matter how much I scream, shout and break stuff I DON'T OWN ART, JEWEL, DOM, MULCH, HOLLY, FOALY *sniff* Root, Trouble or anyone else who you'll recognize from the book or any other fan-fics though I might add more characters who are mine, all mine! Ok that's good enough of a disclaimer to stop a Mr. Eoin Colfer suing my backside. On with my story...
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New York, America
The 17th of March. The day when the whole world wants to be Irish. Artemis fowl, child prodigy is now eighteen. He and the Butlers were weaving through the crowd full of green. Artemis was in a funny mood. Not particularly good and not particularly bad, just, funny. He was always like this around public holidays but for five years Christmas and St Patrick's Day stood out like a thorn. Mentions of small men and funnily, holly, have made him double back. Words like baby horses and parts of plants had the same result with the Butlers as well.
Juliet Butler had invited Artemis and her big brother over to join in on the celebrations, partly for company over for the holiday, partly because she missed the company of her big brother and best friend, and partly because Artemis junior had been kicked out of Fowl Manor by his father Artemis senior for going back on his word about being legitimate and had nowhere else to go.
Juliet was getting fed up with Art, she felt weird around the same time, words and names as him. As if there was something hidden at the base of her skull, wanting to come out but held at bay by a more powerful force, as if something in her past was forgotten and niggling at her mind, 'remember, remember this, its important, why cant you remember?'
Any way she was getting completely pissed off with his mood and decided to let him have a piece of her mind.
"Arty you've been acting weird again today. What the hell's up?"
"What's up jewel," he replied irritably, "is that your noses keeps sticking itself into my business, and please refrain from using my mother's pet name for me." Even though Butler earned his wage from Artemis he wouldn't let his baby sister be pushed around by him.
"Artemis," he growled warningly, "don't be cheeky to Juliet, she is our hostess after all."
"I suppose your right Butler," Artemis said, "I was only really being sarcastic."
Butler didn't believe him, but didn't pursue the matter any longer. Artemis and Juliet were always fighting and He was fed up telling them off.
"Eh, Jade Princess?" a small voice squeaked at Juliet's feet, "Will you sign this for me?"
Butler and Artemis both started, both for different reasons. Butler was surprised that the small boy got past him, 'I must be getting old' he thought sadly, Artemis on the other hand was now very worried. Usually one small one was sent to see if she was going to give an autograph. Because of the enormous presence of Butler everyone else was too chicken to go and see for themselves, then once the little one got past, a whole crowd comes shouting,
"Please JP, I'm your biggest fan." or "If he got one why can't I have one to?"
Artemis and Butler glanced at each other; the message was clear, get Jewel out before she was forced to do more than one autograph.
Juliet's Apartment, New York
Later that night, after the crowds thinned outside the apartment, Juliet and Artemis were found to be getting ready to leave for Basement Jaks, an upper-class nite-club which Jewel was able to get tickets for. Butler was very reluctant to let them go alone. Juliet was giving her make up the finishing touches when he decided to voice this.
"Ahh," Juliet said in a baby voice, "is DD upset that nasty Arty and jewely are going out and enjoying themselves? Does he think I'll loose Arty and he'll be kidnapped or killed? Or. Does he doubt his little sister's abilities?"
"No," he replied shortly, "but there's going to be a lot of people out tonight and you might get confused like you did in Tunisia for your field stimulation test with Madam Ko."
She scowled. "I didn't want to harm that carpet man." She sulked.
Butler laughed, her heart was too soft. But out loud he said, "But that didn't stop you from giving him a full nelson did it?"
"Well Dom actually..." she said malevolently and was interrupted just as Artemis walked in.
Despite the shock Butler received because of the fact that his first name was almost disclosed to his charge, (Madam Ko, the Butler sensei forbade any bodyguard to disclose their first name to their charge) Butler couldn't resist a joke at the sight of Artemis, who was wearing a green suit that Juliet insisted he wore.
"Well don't we look handsome," Butler chuckled, "all you need now is a hat and you'll look like a Leprechaun." He suddenly regretted saying this as Artemis and Juliet suddenly looked thoughtful and distant. 'I wonder what makes us go like that' he thought to himself.
Artemis, after a moment overlooked this simple statement and turned to Juliet,
"You ready?" he asked.
"Yep," she replied grabbing a bag off the bed, "now don't stay up all night D and if you get lonely there's always Ms Summers across the hall." She added deviously, raising an eyebrow.
Artemis chuckled. Juliet and himself were the only people in the world who could get away with laughing at Butler; Juliet was the only one who could get away with insulting him.
"Oh ha ha, very funny," Butler said with an injured air, "You two look after each other and no fighting."
He studied at the two young faces looking at him with amusement written on each of them and couldn't help but smile. They were the two people alive, he cared for most, his little sister who was his only family, despite his uncle and cousin who Butler hated more than anyone else, and his principle Artemis, who made him, Butler, privately break one of the most important body guard rules, never get emotionally attached to your principle.
"Have a good time," he said gently, "and don't come in too late."
"We'll try to do the first thing alright," giggled Juliet, "can't promise the last two though."
Central park, New York, America
Art and jewel walked sleepily through central park. They were extremely tired and never noticed the shouts and pounding of footsteps that came increasingly nearer until the commotion seemed to be only a few meters away. Juliet and Artemis sat down on a bench and looked at each other.
There were some shouts in a different language and the pair looked at the spot the noise seemed to be coming from. There was nothing there. But Artemis could have sworn that there were waves, like heat waves, or like he was looking through water.
"Let's go and look." Juliet said coming out of the daze.
"Nah," Artemis replied, "lets go home I'm tired."
They stood up and ignored the commotion behind them.
"Americans." Artemis tittered
"I take offence at that Artemis Ryan Fowl," Juliet said sleepily, "in case you've forgotten I'm American."
"Exactly!" Artemis shouted throwing his arms in the air and collapsing into a giggling fit.
"Ya cheeky wee git." Juliet shouted.
And they walked back to the apartment, their arguing drowning out the invisible scuffles and yelling behind them.
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Next chapter focuses all on Holly ok? Please r&r (wat does that actually mean?)
Flames welcome. But have pity; my computer is as flammable as any computer when it has flames in it. The same with my hotmail account. But you wont get my BT, yahoo or any of my other accounts so HA!
Well Slán 4 now. Luv soap sudd
Talking about not adding my own views, attitude and opinions into my stories, I don't mean to offend any Americans. In central park I just wanted Art and jewel to start their bickering again.
I love America, even though I've only been in long island and New York. That's why the gang's in NY; I know some places in it like the games place which I thinks just off Times Square. I love that place. My Ma asked where I wanted to go on my last day and I said there. See I talk too much! That was totally not anything to do with the story.
Anyway I wanted to change some things any way. I want to add central park to the proceedings to make a little pivot for my next fic. Though it'll go along the same lines.
I call Artemis 'Art' and Juliet 'Jewel' because I want to get across that Artemis is no longer a completely serious berk. (I have no idea what berk means)
*looks up at the text written* WOW how do I do these things. I was scared of writing to little but wow. # I counted up to the # using the counting boyo on word and its 233 words.
So.*takes a deep breath and pauses*I can't think of anything else to write so lets get on with it.
Disclaimer: no matter how much I scream, shout and break stuff I DON'T OWN ART, JEWEL, DOM, MULCH, HOLLY, FOALY *sniff* Root, Trouble or anyone else who you'll recognize from the book or any other fan-fics though I might add more characters who are mine, all mine! Ok that's good enough of a disclaimer to stop a Mr. Eoin Colfer suing my backside. On with my story...
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New York, America
The 17th of March. The day when the whole world wants to be Irish. Artemis fowl, child prodigy is now eighteen. He and the Butlers were weaving through the crowd full of green. Artemis was in a funny mood. Not particularly good and not particularly bad, just, funny. He was always like this around public holidays but for five years Christmas and St Patrick's Day stood out like a thorn. Mentions of small men and funnily, holly, have made him double back. Words like baby horses and parts of plants had the same result with the Butlers as well.
Juliet Butler had invited Artemis and her big brother over to join in on the celebrations, partly for company over for the holiday, partly because she missed the company of her big brother and best friend, and partly because Artemis junior had been kicked out of Fowl Manor by his father Artemis senior for going back on his word about being legitimate and had nowhere else to go.
Juliet was getting fed up with Art, she felt weird around the same time, words and names as him. As if there was something hidden at the base of her skull, wanting to come out but held at bay by a more powerful force, as if something in her past was forgotten and niggling at her mind, 'remember, remember this, its important, why cant you remember?'
Any way she was getting completely pissed off with his mood and decided to let him have a piece of her mind.
"Arty you've been acting weird again today. What the hell's up?"
"What's up jewel," he replied irritably, "is that your noses keeps sticking itself into my business, and please refrain from using my mother's pet name for me." Even though Butler earned his wage from Artemis he wouldn't let his baby sister be pushed around by him.
"Artemis," he growled warningly, "don't be cheeky to Juliet, she is our hostess after all."
"I suppose your right Butler," Artemis said, "I was only really being sarcastic."
Butler didn't believe him, but didn't pursue the matter any longer. Artemis and Juliet were always fighting and He was fed up telling them off.
"Eh, Jade Princess?" a small voice squeaked at Juliet's feet, "Will you sign this for me?"
Butler and Artemis both started, both for different reasons. Butler was surprised that the small boy got past him, 'I must be getting old' he thought sadly, Artemis on the other hand was now very worried. Usually one small one was sent to see if she was going to give an autograph. Because of the enormous presence of Butler everyone else was too chicken to go and see for themselves, then once the little one got past, a whole crowd comes shouting,
"Please JP, I'm your biggest fan." or "If he got one why can't I have one to?"
Artemis and Butler glanced at each other; the message was clear, get Jewel out before she was forced to do more than one autograph.
Juliet's Apartment, New York
Later that night, after the crowds thinned outside the apartment, Juliet and Artemis were found to be getting ready to leave for Basement Jaks, an upper-class nite-club which Jewel was able to get tickets for. Butler was very reluctant to let them go alone. Juliet was giving her make up the finishing touches when he decided to voice this.
"Ahh," Juliet said in a baby voice, "is DD upset that nasty Arty and jewely are going out and enjoying themselves? Does he think I'll loose Arty and he'll be kidnapped or killed? Or. Does he doubt his little sister's abilities?"
"No," he replied shortly, "but there's going to be a lot of people out tonight and you might get confused like you did in Tunisia for your field stimulation test with Madam Ko."
She scowled. "I didn't want to harm that carpet man." She sulked.
Butler laughed, her heart was too soft. But out loud he said, "But that didn't stop you from giving him a full nelson did it?"
"Well Dom actually..." she said malevolently and was interrupted just as Artemis walked in.
Despite the shock Butler received because of the fact that his first name was almost disclosed to his charge, (Madam Ko, the Butler sensei forbade any bodyguard to disclose their first name to their charge) Butler couldn't resist a joke at the sight of Artemis, who was wearing a green suit that Juliet insisted he wore.
"Well don't we look handsome," Butler chuckled, "all you need now is a hat and you'll look like a Leprechaun." He suddenly regretted saying this as Artemis and Juliet suddenly looked thoughtful and distant. 'I wonder what makes us go like that' he thought to himself.
Artemis, after a moment overlooked this simple statement and turned to Juliet,
"You ready?" he asked.
"Yep," she replied grabbing a bag off the bed, "now don't stay up all night D and if you get lonely there's always Ms Summers across the hall." She added deviously, raising an eyebrow.
Artemis chuckled. Juliet and himself were the only people in the world who could get away with laughing at Butler; Juliet was the only one who could get away with insulting him.
"Oh ha ha, very funny," Butler said with an injured air, "You two look after each other and no fighting."
He studied at the two young faces looking at him with amusement written on each of them and couldn't help but smile. They were the two people alive, he cared for most, his little sister who was his only family, despite his uncle and cousin who Butler hated more than anyone else, and his principle Artemis, who made him, Butler, privately break one of the most important body guard rules, never get emotionally attached to your principle.
"Have a good time," he said gently, "and don't come in too late."
"We'll try to do the first thing alright," giggled Juliet, "can't promise the last two though."
Central park, New York, America
Art and jewel walked sleepily through central park. They were extremely tired and never noticed the shouts and pounding of footsteps that came increasingly nearer until the commotion seemed to be only a few meters away. Juliet and Artemis sat down on a bench and looked at each other.
There were some shouts in a different language and the pair looked at the spot the noise seemed to be coming from. There was nothing there. But Artemis could have sworn that there were waves, like heat waves, or like he was looking through water.
"Let's go and look." Juliet said coming out of the daze.
"Nah," Artemis replied, "lets go home I'm tired."
They stood up and ignored the commotion behind them.
"Americans." Artemis tittered
"I take offence at that Artemis Ryan Fowl," Juliet said sleepily, "in case you've forgotten I'm American."
"Exactly!" Artemis shouted throwing his arms in the air and collapsing into a giggling fit.
"Ya cheeky wee git." Juliet shouted.
And they walked back to the apartment, their arguing drowning out the invisible scuffles and yelling behind them.
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Next chapter focuses all on Holly ok? Please r&r (wat does that actually mean?)
Flames welcome. But have pity; my computer is as flammable as any computer when it has flames in it. The same with my hotmail account. But you wont get my BT, yahoo or any of my other accounts so HA!
Well Slán 4 now. Luv soap sudd