Hello! This is Twilight Falls, with my first story. I really need some constructive criticism. I've been readin fanfic for years, but never had the nerve to actually write some. Please, please can someone review and tell me what they think. is my writing style good? Is it long enoung for a prologue? All that stuff. I plan to have the next chapter out tomorrow (Yay Christmas holidays) but, I have next to no motivation, so it's unlikely I'll post very reguarly. I hope you like :)

Hannah rolled her eyes as she stormed into her bedroom and slammed the door. Honestly. Nii-san'll drive me mad with his whole 'genius over hard work' rubbish. She threw herself onto her bed and stared up at the ceiling. Hmmm, I guess it's because I still haven't beaten him in aikido. Not that it's my fault, I only just started. I don't see him beating me in archery. She smirked and closed her eyes. That was one thing that he would never be able to beat her in, no matter how hard he tried.

The Ironic Power sweat dropped as she inadvertently backed up the theory she had been complaining about. Then he settled back to watch her, which was always more fun than going round creating havoc. The mortal girl did so herself with such minimal effort, that people never knew whether it was deliberate or not. Another Power materialized next to Ironic.

"So, this is the girl you are so fascinated in?" The Ironic Power nodded and pointed to the street, where a dog had just noticed something on the floor. It was an ice cream that Hannah had dropped earlier, whilst trying to carry it and five carrier bags of shopping. The dog strained at its lead, trying to get to it. This action was unfortunately unnoticed by a group of five primary school children, who were running down the path. The dog's owner had stopped to stare at the sky and also did not notice. The two Powers unconsciously held their breath until the inevitable happened CRASH/BOOM/SMASH/SCREAM. The children's mothers quickly ran to catch up and so started the shouting/blaming fest. The new Power sweat dropped.

"Was that deliberate on her part?" Ironic shrugged.

"Even I can never tell. Anyway, you must have some reason for leaving the immortal Plane." The other Power smirked

"Yup"

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"Well?"

"Well what?"

"What is it?" The other Power took pity on our poor frustrated Ironic.

"The others have gotten bored, so we decided to do something to amuse ourselves." Ironic looked confused "We're gonna send her to another world. Destiny and Fate suggested it, to be fair. Chance was also strangely keen. Death was the only one annoyed. She wanted to meet this girl in person" Ironic started.

"You mean…?" The other nodded

"Unless we change something, as we plan to, she's going to die."

"When?" A frown.

"Tomorrow." Ironic frowned and looked down at his 'favourite' mortal. She had fallen asleep, oblivious to the chaos she had caused.

"She cannot die!" The other nodded and rested a hand on his shoulder.

"For more reasons than you can guess." He shook his head at Ironic's questioning gaze. "Destiny and Fate. They know something about her that we don't. And they aren't talking. So, what do you suggest?"

"Well, she cannot stay in this world." His gaze brightened. "I have the perfect idea." His hands glowed with a golden light, that built up, and then shot at Hannah, enveloping her in a gold cloud, that then died away, leaving an empty bed.

"I hope that was a good idea." The other frowned. "That world? It could be risky."

"Only for you. Come on. You just don't want to deal with the extra work she'll create in such a volatile world"

"Indeed, and you just want to see the chaos she can create both there and for me?" Ironic nodded, with a huge grin, and then vanished. The other Power sighed, then followed suit, leaving an empty room.