Hey , nice to meet you! This is my first story, so I hope you like it! It's set when Nala & Simba are still cubs, way before Scar kills Mufasa.
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Mufasa's POV:
I was worried. I had relentlessly searched the whole of the Pridelands for my son, but to no avail. I returned to Pride Rock and we mourned our loss. I noticed that Nala hadn't left her spot on the tip of Pride Rock for days, and went out to comfort her.
"What's wrong, my dear?"
Her eyes blazing, she turned to look at me.
"Nothing."
"Please tell me, I can help."
"No!"
With that she skulked off.
Nala's POV:
Why didn't Simba come back! I feel like ice, and my heart is broken. I never got to tell him how I felt about him. I need to feel his soft, golden fur against mine, his soothing words comforting me when I am bullied by the other cubs. My life doesn't mean anything now.
I heard heavy footsteps behind me.
"What's wrong, my dear?"
How dare he ask me what's wrong! He knows perfectly well what's wrong! I turned to look at him.
"Nothing."
He pestered me a while longer, and overcome with the memories of Simba, I walked to the watering hole. Suddenly, there was a thunderous roar and lighting flared across the sky. The heavens started crying with me, and my tears mingled with the rainwater. I hid under a nearby tree, shaking with fright and jumping with every loud sound. I tried to be brave and imagine I was Simba, always brave and ready to face the storm. As I moved out from under my cover a bolt of lighting hit the tree and set it alight. I ran, screaming and crying, into the wilderness, just waiting for this nightmare to end.
Well, that's the first chapter done! Is it a good size? A good style? This is only an introduction to the story to see how things work around here. I need reviews to answer these questions, however constructive criticism is always better than flaming!
Dan