So yeah,my first story published and written.it's the first time I write fanfiction,so I'm kinda scared of your reaction XDDD It's just that I'm not very fond of this poem;I wrote it this morning in third period(greek,ag!) and I know it's not at the level of the things I've written before...maybe it's because usually I write original stories.
Also,I would be glad if you pointed out my grammar mistakes cos english is not my first language and I'm sure there are some errors.
I'll be really grateful if you spend a little of your time reviewing my work.Thank you!

Ah,yes! Of course I don't own DGM;if I did there would be massive fan-suicide

Thanks

A chill running down my spine

A feeling I cannot define

And suddenly everything is blurry,

and suddenly everything is clear

I see Akuma wrapped in dark clothes

but my heart holds no fear,

it is just shaking with the expectation

of carrying out at last

the duty I've been drowning in all these years.

I come closer,in the face a smile I know they trust;

I've chosen her for a smooth start,

the black butterfly I (me?) used to hold so dear

crushed under my feet now,

she's all crimson and tears.

A smirk in my (his) lips,

I turn my head back,

a stunned little rabbit stands unable to talk.

I knew it very well,

green goes better with red,

his fur has been proving it all along;

how beautiful the rabbit is

covered by his own shiny blood.

Another chill cooling my skin

now provoked by cold,metallic claws;

he will not let it be

for he shall erase any flaws,

the mighty dark panther shadowing his (my?) slightly tinnier form

Without a second though he sinks his claws in our neck,

a growl of rage while holding him in a not-so-sweet embrace.

And suddenly everything is clear,

and suddenly everything is blurry;

I'm being pushed aside.WHat's wrong?

there's no need to hurry.

My ("MY!") eyes aren't focussing anymore,

his ("yes!") hands clench to the panther's silky mane

as if asking for more,

and as I fade,

diluding myself in that life sliding down to the floor

I get to hear the last of his breath shaped into one only word...

"Thanks" .

PD: Why did I kill Lavi?! I LIKE LAVI!!