* HI Everybody, This is my first fic and I would really love some comments and advice on how I can improve my writing. This is a Makoto and Minako fic so if you don't like that then too bad.
*Disclaimer: I do not own any of the scouts, if I did then I wouldn't be writing fan fics about them would I?!? :)
NOTES: In this fic Andrew and Minako are cousins, and Sailor Venus has not yet joined the scouts. Now on with the story.
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Makoto was slowly walking down the street thinking her ex-boyfriend who just broke up with her. She never could seem to keep guys for long. Either she lost interest or the guy stopped liking her for some stupid reason. Makoto frowned slightly as she thought of the excuses that they usually gave her, "Your too manly for me, I don't want a girl who can beat me up. It's just not right." Too manly! What nerve those guys had.
Makoto continued to walk deep in her thoughts until she reached the arcade. As usual Usagi and Rei were fighting over something or another. Their tongues were out and spit was flying everywhere. Ami had her face stuffed in her book, Makoto smiled at Ami's tactics for avoiding the spit. Makoto sat down in the seat next to Ami trying to stay as far away from the arguing pair as she could. Makoto stared blankly until she felt someone shaking her.
"Makoto... Makoto..." Andrew was looking at her a little worried when she came back to the real world, "Whew, I thought lost you for a minute." Andrew smiled sweetly, "Do you want anything?"
"Yeah, how about a..." Makoto started but between Usagi's high shrieks and the mumbling of the arcade crowd, she never got to finish. Usagi was pointing her finger at a person who had just walked in and now everyone was looking at her like she was crazy.
"She looks just like Sailor V," Usagi shrieked as she jumped from her seat and ran to the girl. "Can I have your autograph?"
Makoto looks embarrassingly up at this new girl and her breathe stopped in her throat. *Wow, Usagi's right she does look like Sailor V, damn she's beautiful... Whoa, where did that come from, I'm supposed to be mourning my breakup not trying to find someone new... Hey wait a minute, I'm not interested in girls!* Makoto let out the breath she was holding. Looking at the girl again she thought *but she looks soooooo cute when she blushes* a small smile plays on Makoto's lips at that thought.
I wrote it about a year or two ago. I never got any comments on it but I decided what the heck I'll try it again.
*Disclaimer: I do not own any of the scouts, if I did then I wouldn't be writing fan fics about them would I?!? :)
NOTES: In this fic Andrew and Minako are cousins, and Sailor Venus has not yet joined the scouts. Now on with the story.
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Makoto was slowly walking down the street thinking her ex-boyfriend who just broke up with her. She never could seem to keep guys for long. Either she lost interest or the guy stopped liking her for some stupid reason. Makoto frowned slightly as she thought of the excuses that they usually gave her, "Your too manly for me, I don't want a girl who can beat me up. It's just not right." Too manly! What nerve those guys had.
Makoto continued to walk deep in her thoughts until she reached the arcade. As usual Usagi and Rei were fighting over something or another. Their tongues were out and spit was flying everywhere. Ami had her face stuffed in her book, Makoto smiled at Ami's tactics for avoiding the spit. Makoto sat down in the seat next to Ami trying to stay as far away from the arguing pair as she could. Makoto stared blankly until she felt someone shaking her.
"Makoto... Makoto..." Andrew was looking at her a little worried when she came back to the real world, "Whew, I thought lost you for a minute." Andrew smiled sweetly, "Do you want anything?"
"Yeah, how about a..." Makoto started but between Usagi's high shrieks and the mumbling of the arcade crowd, she never got to finish. Usagi was pointing her finger at a person who had just walked in and now everyone was looking at her like she was crazy.
"She looks just like Sailor V," Usagi shrieked as she jumped from her seat and ran to the girl. "Can I have your autograph?"
Makoto looks embarrassingly up at this new girl and her breathe stopped in her throat. *Wow, Usagi's right she does look like Sailor V, damn she's beautiful... Whoa, where did that come from, I'm supposed to be mourning my breakup not trying to find someone new... Hey wait a minute, I'm not interested in girls!* Makoto let out the breath she was holding. Looking at the girl again she thought *but she looks soooooo cute when she blushes* a small smile plays on Makoto's lips at that thought.
I wrote it about a year or two ago. I never got any comments on it but I decided what the heck I'll try it again.