Not based on any one episode, , don't be afraid to be honest, the only way to get better is with constructive analysis from other people :D
Chapter 1
"Arrrggghhhh, my head hurts...my eyes hurt...my brain hurts..." Deeks sat back in his chair in the ops centre, holding his head in his hands,
"You need a brain for it to hurt partner," Kensi joked before walking over to her partner. Gently, she laid her hand on his forehead, "Your burning up" she said quietly with way to much care than she would usually show,
"You need a sick day officer?" Sam smirked from his desk,
"No" Deeks said defiantly, before raising his hands in triumph, " I never get sick! Plus, i'm trying to save my sick days for when i'm better, that way I can enjoy a day off" Deeks said quickly with his half smile,
"I knew it" Kensi playfully punched him in the arm before returning to her desk.
A shrill whistle pierced any potential conversation, "Let's go team!" Eric said with way to much excitement, "we've got a hot one!"
" And he don't mean you Deeks" Callen said patting Deeks on the back as he raced up the stairs,
"Gentlemen and lady I give you Oscar Mendez," Eric waved his hands to the screen which showed a man in his mid 30's, " he was once a Ranger is our fine Army, but was dishonourably discharged 3 years ago for assault,"
"Mendez served his time in prison and was recently released," Nell continued, " He seemed to stay out of trouble until last night,"
"What happened last night?" Called asked leaning back on the table,
"He was murdered," Hetty said from behind, giving them all a fright,
"Do you have to do that? Really?" Deeks mumbled,
"Are you feeling okay Mr. Deeks?" Hetty asked with a little concern evident in her voice,
"Just chipper, thank you for asking" Deeks forced a smile,
"Sam and I will go check out the murder scene, Deeks and Kensi, go check out his home" Callen lead the way out the door, "Nell and Eric..."
"Autopsy!" They finished the sentence for Callen in unison.
While driving to the scene, Callen answered his phone,
"What have you got Eric?"
"Nothing pretty," Eric spun around on his desk chair to face his computer with the coroner's report on it, "Mendez was beaten, badly. Coroner suspects torture and days of it. Judging by bruising, he suffered at least a week of it. He shows signs of hyperthermia, toxic shock and septicaemia,"
"That's not all Callen," Nell intervened, "There's something wrong about his story,"
"What do you mean Nell?" Sam asked as he carefully manoeuvred the LA streets,
"It's so perfect it's wrong,"
"What are you getting at Nell,"
"It's like a cover story, one we'd make up for one of you, everything is at the right time or place or situation, i'm pretty sure Mendez was an undercover,"
"Found out who for Miss Jones, " Hetty said quietly, "This man's story needs to be told right," with that the little leader of the group turned and walked out of the room.
Callen and Sam arrived at the location the body was found,
"Definitly a body dump G, there's no signs of struggle, or blood or anything, just this flattened piece of grass," G looked around the area. It was off the main road on a country stretch. It was so surreal, so quiet, the birds were humming and Sam was right, there was no signs of anything happening here.
"I'll ring Kensi and see if she and Deeks found anything at this apartment," G flipped out his phone as Sam went for a wander in nearby patch of trees,
"G, you find anything?" her voice answered,
"Nope, you?"
"Well, his apartment isn't where he lived, that much is clear to see, there's a bed, barely been slept in, an empty fridge and a TV gathering dust. It looks like a bachelor pad but it's missing the personalized items of a home. His deodorant is full and there is just nothing here, nothing to say this is Mendez's home,"
"Nell thinks he's an undercover,"
"Yeah, she filled us in, and this certainly backs it up" Deeks called from the bathroom. Hanging up, Kensi took a minute to sum up her partner, he was certainly sick, he was getting paler by the minute and a thin line of sweat at started to form on his upper forehead, pushing her phone into her back pocket, she put her hands on her hips, "What?" he asked defiantly standing up, it was then she noticed the slight tremble,
"Your sick"
"I'm ok, it's just the flu"
"You need to go home Deeks, have some soup and hop into a warm bed,"
"Are you going to nurse me?" he asked wickedly,
"Yeah, in your dreams perhaps. Get in the car, i'm taking you home"
"Guys, we have something," Eric said to the whole team, "get back to OPs as fast as you can,"
"On our way" Sam said jumping into the charger,
"On my way," Kensi said, "after I drop Deeks off at home,"
"He gave in" Callen smirked to Sam who just grinned back.
20 minutes later, they were gathered in the ops centre, minus there blonde haired Detective.
"What have you got Eric?" G asked folding his arms in front of his chest and leaning back against the desk,
"Alot, actually, Mendez is actually Joseph Santiago, he was never dishonourably discharged, in fact he served 2 tours before returning home to the LAPD. He was a detective. But that's not all," Eric pressed several buttons on his tablet to bring up 7 faces on the screen, "these men here have been found dead in a similar manner all around the states, they were all once a detective with the LAPD,"
"Oh my God," Kensi said quietly, "what do they have in common?"
"after some digging, and by some, I mean a lot, they all worked at some stage on a case file known as Tear Drop. It was a case the LAPD were trying to set up against a Victor Mansfield, he was a young ambitious lawyer that knew everyone in the city. He was also involved in many black arms deals, illegal drugs, prostitution, you name it, he was in on it. The LAPD were never able to build a case against him and these detectives were all at some stage, a part of the Op."
"Where is Victor now?" Sam said quietly eyeing the pictures,
"That's the thing, he disappeared 5 years ago without a trace. No one has seen him or heard from him, he just disappeared"
"That a good thing?"
"It could be Mr Callen, however," Hetty said walking in, "This man had secrets on the most powerful and rich of our city, he had dirt on everybody,"
"So if he fell into the wrong hands, that information could damage certain people," G asked
"Exactly"
"But what do the detectives have to do with it? If they had the information they would have arrested him," Kensi said quietly, her brow knitted together in concentration,
"It is possible that they knew something they shouldn't and someone is looking for that information" Nell said quickly,
"Or, they know where Victor is and is protecting him" Eric added on
"Or Victor is cleaning house" Sam said finally,
'Look, we can speculate all we like, hell, we could be here all night, but for some reason, there were a lot of undercover detectives on this case and nobody could lay a case against this guy, what does that tell us?" Callen said with a hint of frustration,
"That the LAPD put a lot of money and effort into a hopeless case"
"Or someone in the LAPD was after something..." Hetty said to Kensi's suggestion
"Were there any other detectives on that case that haven't been targeted yet? If whoever is doing this hasn't got the information yet, there may be more victims to come" Sam said looking at Eric,
"Um...give me a second" Eric tapped away at his keyboard, "Oh my God," he said quietly, "There are 3 other detectives...guys, one of them is Deeks."
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