Hey, I just got finished reading the "Uglies" Series by Scott Westerfeld and felt that
Tally's reaction to Zane's death was all wrong. The author didnt show how much Zane meant to Tally,
she barely reacted in the story. I changed that, so she had more of a goodbye.
Read it and let me know what you think this is my first EVER fanfiction. Enjoy.
P.S. I starts off with a few paragraphs from the book just so you get the idea better.
But this time starring at Zane, everything was much worse - her eyes were special now. Every detail was a hundred
times clearer: the wrong color of his face, the too steady pulse in his throat, the way his fingernails were slowly fading
from pink to white.
"Tally..." Tach;s voice chocked off
" Im So Sorry", Shay said.
Tally glanced back at her fellwo cutters, and realized that they couldnt understand. They still might be strong and fast,
but Maddy's cure had made their minds average again. They couldn't see how maddening death really was, how
colossally pointless in every way.
The fires still burned outside, mockingly beautiful against the dark and perfect sky. That was what no one else could
see, that the world was too bubbly and gorgeous for Zane to be missing form it.
Tally reached out and touched his hand. Her exquisitely sensitive fingertips told her that his flesh was cooler then it should be.
This was all her fault. She'd coaxed him here to become what she wanted, she had wandered around the city instead of watching over him.
Since she had not stopped him he must have known or thought that this is what she wanted. She had started the war
that had torn him apart.
This was the final price of her massive ego. Im so Sorry, Zane, she whispered. She bent down to lighly press her lips against his cool forhead, when she was suddenly
assulted with images: The first time she meet Zane at the pretty party, their first kiss on their picnic, all the tricks they pulled together, find the pills, falling through the ice, taking the pill, learning so much about
eachother they could tell eachothers thoughts from a single look or gesture, falling asleep in his arms every night, escaping to the smoke, being captured together,
escaping again, following and trying to take care of him, and finally their last kiss... How perfect and right it felt being in his arms. Then the look of hurt on his face by her
repulsion, their last kiss was ruined because she couldnt rewire herself for the one person she would give up everything for. If only she could go back and change it. She could feel her heart beating
so fast she was almost positive it would jump out off her chest and break into a thousand tiny peices. she ran her fingers threw his hair once more and kissed him like
she should have when she had the chance. She couldnt stop thinking this was the last time she would ever feel him next to her. She stared at him trying to memorize everything about him. She
stood abruptly startling Shay and Tach. Five minutes was suddenly too long to stand here, eyes burning unable to cry.
" Ok lets go", She whispered.
" Tally are you sure? It;s only been -"
" Lets go! on our boards. This war has to stop."