Uh.. This is a story I wrote recently. I'm not sure if you'll like it since I'm not a good writer and it might be boring so… please give me some advice for improvement. Thank you…
Plot: Jenifer and her best friend Alex go back in time and learn the dark truth hidden inside the strange castle.
September 6, 9pm..
Jenifer climbed the cracked stairs with her best friend Alex but heard a sickening voice as they took each step towards the attic, saying welcome… She reacted to the voice and softly replied you are...the owner... of this house?..
I.. don't know…
Jenny!
She looked up and saw Alex's face right in front of her. She slowly backed away from the enormous pressure she had felt from the voice and knocked a vase down. Shards of glass glittered in the gloomy room. A few drops of blood seeped slowly out of her flesh. She quickly touched her hand and the blood was gone. Alex quickly ran to her and asked if she was okay. She stood up without his help and looked down. Her clothes were still clean nothing was broken. She lightly smiled. Suddenly a strong rush of wind blew inside the house and books and furniture began tumbling down. She walked downstairs and spoke a few words.. eclipse rise and obey…
Alex could not see her. A bright flash of light glowed. Stairs began breaking and Alex could not reach her and ceased to fall. He could not speak as he was coming to unconsciousness. He unknowingly reached out his left hand and felt a small feather touch and cower inside as he closed his dark blue eyes.
A few hours later… 3am
Where am I.. He slowly stood up. Halfway he fell back down on the cold hard floor that he now realized. What's happening! He reached up again but failed. Each time he used up a lot of energy and not long he fainted.
Arghhhh!
What's wrong with him? Is he okay? He's not dead is he? What do we do?
He could hear hushed voices frantically whispering mostly about himself. Suddenly the voices stopped and there was only silence. Someone came in I thought and I felt a soft hand touching my head. It was a relaxing touch.
"You may move now.." she whispered so soft I almost could not hear her.
I registered in her words and began getting up. I opened my eyes and saw the cloaked figure that had spoken to me. There were four other girls dressed in elegant gowns. As I looked around I noticed I was still wearing my clothes. I was in a large room, lots of books and lightings and the room looked like what kings and queens rooms used to look like.
….. 'just realized'…..
"How did I get here?" I asked.
What! You don't know! Hush! Excuse me! The four started bickering about my question and soon turned into a fight. I clearly became annoyed with the ruckus and turned to the lady who had healed me. It seemed to me that she did not wish to show me her face nor speak to me. But this only intrigued me more. I want to see what is covered behind her cloak. My face turned into a smirk. A playful smirk..
Meanwhile…. (after Alex fell, what happened to Jenifer?..)
As quick as lightning the house shook. She remained calm and still while Alex fell into a deep hole. ..sway back in time..rain…
She disappeared and reappeared inside a gigantic castle. Right now she arrived back in time when there were still kings, queens, princesses and princes (Medieval Ages). She quickly ran through the halls and stopped in front of a decorated gold door. She could hear small voices. She touched the door and saw everything. (How? She has physic powers.. and can use magic. Oh! and many hidden talents too…)
What will happen after she opens the door? Will Jenifer be filled with joy or sadness in her heart? What were the reactions of the four girls besides the silence that entered the room..
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