I got this review once:
Hey this is the weridest story u ever wrote come on Ryao already gets enough toment from other writers. U could make Ryao have a girlfriend come on please i'm begging u. Well write more storys k. Cya.
KLA aka Kai's Lil Angel (AKA Alexa)
It was to one of the Candy Coated stories. First I figure after reading Ryou's name a few times you'd remember how to spell it, but whatever.
This is my response to that review.
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My Mary Sue
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Chapter One
It was a sunny Friday spring morning, but Ryou Bakura ignored everything around him as he tried to hide the newest bruise that had been added to his extensive collection that morning. His egotistical, abusive, emotionally devoid, yet stunningly hot yami, also known only as Bakura, had for a reason only the spirit knew and understood, punched poor, sweet and oh so innocent fifteen-year-old Ryou in the face.
Since he was so lost in thought he didn't notice the thin and overly beautiful figure coming toward him on roller blades until it was too late. Blinking, Ryou sat up and found himself staring into the biggest, greenest eyes he'd ever seen! It was love at first sight! This creature must have been an angel sent to make his life better, maybe she could even find out why Bakura was so abusive to him!
Suddenly, his angel opened her mouth, "Why don't you watch where you're going you white-haired freak!" She snarled, then softened at the pitiful look on Ryou's young face. "I'm sorry. You maybe a white-haired freak, but I have this unexplainable urge to protect you and I feel the mental barriers that I have spent years building around my fragile heart ever since I was raped and beaten by my very abusive father, crumble as I get lost within the depths of your eyes." She helped him up. "The name's Blaze."
"Ryou. It's nice to meet you." Ryou spoke politely because he's such a good boy. Suddenly he felt a strong power from this girl and the voice of his evil, yet very sexy, yami echoed in his mind.
/ I sense a Millennium Item. /
"Well, nice ta meet ya! Hey, I've gotta go, maybe I'll see you later!" Blaze left, leaving Ryou alone.
/ You must stay close to this girl. I want her item; you have to stay close. /
// Yes master. // Ryou replied softly, submitting instantly.
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RANDOM YAOI MOMENT
(For those of us who can't stand the het any longer.)
"Malik. . ." Ryou began softly, his voice just above a whisper as the two boys sat alone together on a bench in the middle of the park where everyone was playing.
"What?" The touch Egyptian practically snarled as he glared at nobody in particular.
"I. . .I love you Malik." Ryou whispered, afraid of rejection.
Malik tensed and then looked down into the beautiful doe eyed boy beside him. "Really?" Malik asked, daring to hope. "I love you too Ryou! I didn't want to tell you though because you're too pure and innocent for someone like me! That's why I always act like I've got a stick shoved up my ass!"
Ryou giggled as Malik pulled him to him and kissed him hungrily. "And here I was thinking it was your Millennium Rod."
. . .
Um, yeah.
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Shall I continue?
Like you had a choice!
Mwahahaha!
Hey this is the weridest story u ever wrote come on Ryao already gets enough toment from other writers. U could make Ryao have a girlfriend come on please i'm begging u. Well write more storys k. Cya.
KLA aka Kai's Lil Angel (AKA Alexa)
It was to one of the Candy Coated stories. First I figure after reading Ryou's name a few times you'd remember how to spell it, but whatever.
This is my response to that review.
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My Mary Sue
- - -
Chapter One
It was a sunny Friday spring morning, but Ryou Bakura ignored everything around him as he tried to hide the newest bruise that had been added to his extensive collection that morning. His egotistical, abusive, emotionally devoid, yet stunningly hot yami, also known only as Bakura, had for a reason only the spirit knew and understood, punched poor, sweet and oh so innocent fifteen-year-old Ryou in the face.
Since he was so lost in thought he didn't notice the thin and overly beautiful figure coming toward him on roller blades until it was too late. Blinking, Ryou sat up and found himself staring into the biggest, greenest eyes he'd ever seen! It was love at first sight! This creature must have been an angel sent to make his life better, maybe she could even find out why Bakura was so abusive to him!
Suddenly, his angel opened her mouth, "Why don't you watch where you're going you white-haired freak!" She snarled, then softened at the pitiful look on Ryou's young face. "I'm sorry. You maybe a white-haired freak, but I have this unexplainable urge to protect you and I feel the mental barriers that I have spent years building around my fragile heart ever since I was raped and beaten by my very abusive father, crumble as I get lost within the depths of your eyes." She helped him up. "The name's Blaze."
"Ryou. It's nice to meet you." Ryou spoke politely because he's such a good boy. Suddenly he felt a strong power from this girl and the voice of his evil, yet very sexy, yami echoed in his mind.
/ I sense a Millennium Item. /
"Well, nice ta meet ya! Hey, I've gotta go, maybe I'll see you later!" Blaze left, leaving Ryou alone.
/ You must stay close to this girl. I want her item; you have to stay close. /
// Yes master. // Ryou replied softly, submitting instantly.
\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/\*/
RANDOM YAOI MOMENT
(For those of us who can't stand the het any longer.)
"Malik. . ." Ryou began softly, his voice just above a whisper as the two boys sat alone together on a bench in the middle of the park where everyone was playing.
"What?" The touch Egyptian practically snarled as he glared at nobody in particular.
"I. . .I love you Malik." Ryou whispered, afraid of rejection.
Malik tensed and then looked down into the beautiful doe eyed boy beside him. "Really?" Malik asked, daring to hope. "I love you too Ryou! I didn't want to tell you though because you're too pure and innocent for someone like me! That's why I always act like I've got a stick shoved up my ass!"
Ryou giggled as Malik pulled him to him and kissed him hungrily. "And here I was thinking it was your Millennium Rod."
. . .
Um, yeah.
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Shall I continue?
Like you had a choice!
Mwahahaha!