My first fan fiction, tell me what I should improve on. Its about Final Fantasy XII. Tell me what you want to see in there. it's the same time as when the game starts but the events in the game don't happen. The Empire is still ruling Dalmasca but, you know what I mean. Ok so here it goes.
Vaan: So hungry, ugh┘ Its been 2 days since I've last eaten, got any food Kytes?
Kytes: No, sorry Vaan, I don't have anything on me, and it'll be a while 'til we eat, I'm hungry too.
Vaan: Well, I guess I've got to go get something from uptow-
Kytes Interrupting: -VAAN! You can't steal anything, you almost got caught last time, c'mon,
I can wait another day.
Vaan: Well I can't wait, I'm going now.
That was Vaan and his friend Kytes. Vaan is 17 years old, and trying to get by. He lost his parents to a plague and he lost his brother in the battle at Nalbina. After the Empire came, they took everything from those who lost loved ones in the war. This includes Vaan. Now he digs through the garbage to find food. Or he steals it.
Vaan looked around town for a store with some food to steal, and that wasn't guarded by Imperials.
Nothing seemed to be perfect, until he found Migelo's Sundries.
Vaan Thinking: Perfect, no Imperials are around, the employees look weak and busy, and they have an outdoor stand. This will be quick and easy, but I still can't get caught.
Vaan took a look around the stall, while making plans to steal the food and escape. He didn't steal food much,
unless it was necessary. After making plans to escape, he started looking for food. Then the Damalscan Apples caught his eye.
Vaan Thinking: Are those Damalscan Oranges? Those are so delicious! I have to get one!
He picked it up, and it was so shiny he could see his reflection on the apple. It was getting closer to him too.
Closer and closer it got to his face, he wondered what was going on. What if someone saw?
Vaan Thinking: No Vaan, don't eat it, at least, not yet! Put it down, someone could be looking!
Stop! Stop! STOP!!!
No matter how hard he tried he still ate the apple, his hunger go the best of him. He took such a big bite half the apple was left.
Vaan Thinking: Dammit! I shouldn't have done that, but it tastes so good, and at least I got some food.
Girl: Excuse me sir, did you pay for that.
Vaan Thinking: Oh shit, she called me "sir" that means she probably works here. I'm screwed.
Vaan was silent
Girl: Hey you, blonde kid, that ate the apple, I asked if you payed for that.
Vaan: I was, uh... taste testing.
Girl: Well you cant do that, that'll be 7 gil please.
Vaan Thinking: Well I'm broke so time to get out of here.
Vaan jumped out of the stall, dropped the apple, and took of full speed heading towards the Lowtown.
Vaan Thinking: Oh well, at least I wont get caught.
He snickered at the thought of the look of the peoples faces when he jumped out of the stall. He wasn't worried at all about anyone catching him. He was the fasted kid in the Lowtown. Nobody could ever catch him.
Until Today.
A hand grabbed onto Vaan's arm and pushed him into the ground.
Vaan Thinking: THIS CANT BE!?!?!
He hit his head on the ground and past out on impact. Lying in the middle of the street in front of everyone.
NEXT TIME
Who caught Vaan? Or yet what will happen to him read the next chapter to find out!!!