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Divergent: No War
Tris
I can't believe it. I ranked first. I mean, I knew I did a lot better in stage 2 because of my little…secret. But still. I don't even care that I ranked first as long as I came before Peter that was all I really cared about.
"What! There has to be some kinda mistake! There is no way the stiff did better than me!" I heard a familiar whine from the, oh so familiar voice, of Peter. I am about to defend myself, but someone beats me to it.
"No mistake Peter." Says a cool, proud voice. And I immediately know its Tobias, I turn to look at him. He is wearing a simple black shirt, with tight fitted black jeans. Good. God.
I smile at him, my smile warm. Saying 'Thank you' without using my words. Everyone around us is still chatting with one another about where they came. Soundlessly, I approach Tobias. He smiles as I approach.
"Congratulations on your results Tris. I'm proud of you." He says, and with the warm expression on his face, I know he speaks the truth.
"Thank you, but I can't take all the credit," I lean closer to him "I had a great trainer. I heard he only has four fears." He grins down at me. He goes to lean in, and presumably kiss me, but he stops when he remembers where we are. In public, in the pit.
Normally, I would be grateful but right now I just don't care. I grab his face in my hands and kiss him, passionately. His eyes widen, but he responds, a little too willingly. I break the kiss. He looks utterly confused, but has a wide smile plastered to his face.
"Hey!" We both turn to the sound, and of course Peter is watching us. Crap. I forgot about Peter. "That's why she ranked first! Because she is sleeping with the trainer." Tobias opens his mouth to respond. But Max steps in.
"I can assure you Peter, Four here" He points at Tobias. "Had nothing to do with those results. Miss Prior earned the position she got. She was one of the quickest person in and out of that simulation. And Four had nothing to do with that." He says, with a loud voice. Making sure everyone can hear.
Peter scoffed at Max's comment and he noticed this. "You'd better remember your place Peter, after all your Dauntless now. Don't want to annoy the wrong people, now would you?" Max says, with an ice cool expression. Peter gulps, and shakes his head.
Max smirks slightly at his small victory. He nods at the both of us and then resumes chatting with Eric and a few other Dauntless members.
"Well, I think we got Eric's approval." Tobias smirks at the scene he has just witnessed.
"I think you might be on to something there." I agree with him.
He reaches out for my hand and I gladly let him. He frowns slightly. "I would love to stay here and chat more but I have to go and sort something out in the computer room. How about you come to my apartment in a couple hours and we can celebrate. Just you and me?" He suggests.
My face falls. He knows about my fear, why would he suggest something like that. He notices my face falling. And quickly tries to amend what he has said.
"I-I don't mean like that" he stutters "I mean we can just sit and talk, maybe have a drink." He says.
Me and Four. Alone. I nod. "Sure, I'll meet you there. I need to catch up with Christina anyway." I say, with a neutral expression.
He smiles as my tension wears away. "Bye." He kisses my forehead, then he is gone. I smile at my feelings for him and wonder 'Will it always feel like this?'
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