Alter
Hey guys, this is my first fanfiction and as such any criticism (preferably constructive) is welcome and , lack of a proper flow, or a any lore issues I may commit. Also looking for a beta reader as I don't have Word and I'm hoping someone with a more professional client will be able to do some more professional editing that may or may not be done. On with the story eh?
So this is Alter (as an alternate to Naruto and its own blaring issues I'm sure I will have many of). In this story we will follow Naruto Uzamaki and Itachi Uchiha. No Slash! or any kind of male homosexual relationships (I have nothing against it I simply cannot write it as I constantly feel I'm being insulting or otherwise. I support all do you etc etc). Some ships I've already kind of set in stone others you guys have full input on! So comment on my dear readers. Now on with the story of Alter!
Itachi brought his blade down again, cutting down another member of his clan. He felt no pride, no shame, he felt empty. His eyes were hollow except for the blazing red of his sharingan. 'It had to be this way...to save the lives of many, few must die...'
His mind flashed back to the men who had given him this mission, Danzo and the third Hokage. "Itachi, are you sure you want to do this? There are still more...peaceful ways we can handle this. It still may be possible to achieve piece without bloodshed." Hiruzen said. Danzo sat next to him in the Hokages office, while Itachi was kneeled before them.
"Come Hiruzen, you know this cannot be! The Uchiha are one of the largest clans in Konoha! There is little we can do at this point. The Uchiha's coup will not wait forever and their numbers are growing. Only with the complete extermination can peace truly be achieved." Itachi flinched at the harsh sound of Danzo's words. 'Exterminate' rang through his mind over and over as he kneeled before them. There had to be another way. Danzo was right though, there is no way for peace to be achieved diplomatically, death will be wrought in some form. But must it be the whole clan?
Itachi was deep in thought for a time before a thought hit him. Many of the Uchiha will die- the leaders of the coup, those who held power inside the plan...his father. The Uchiha held little more than 1/16th of the villages total population, and even less trained shinobi. From what he could gather and what little intel a few other spies could gather, he would have to kill nearly 40 fully trained shinobi. All of which would have awakened their sharingan with atleast a half having fully awakened all three tomoe. Then there was the mangekyou. His father held one, and his right hand Daichi had his own. He wasn't sure how far Daichi had mastered his but he knew his father could even activate the susanoo as well as a unique power. What it was he wasn't sure but unless he wanted to have a full blown battle in the Uchiha compound he would have to kill his father before things escalated.
With all of this in mind Itachi rose and looked between the true leaders of the village hidden in the leaf. "I will not destroy my clan, nor will I doom them to extinction. I will instead hunt down and kill each of the heads of the coup as well as any supporters. Only those he stand against or know nothing about it will remain...this is the only way I will continue" Itachi looked between the two men, both of whom held looks of deep contemplation. Hiruzen spoke first "This...is better than I could've hoped, I will stand behind this decision but only if we're in agreement there is no possible way that this can be ended peacefully" Itachi and Danzo both shook their heads, with danzo standing "While it does not have the assurance that exterminating them all holds, I will stand behind it as well. Though I will be putting my own men in place after the act is done to assure that there is no chance at another coup being attempted." With this Danzo walked out of the room leaving Itachi alone with Hiruzen.
"Itachi...this is a hard path you have chosen. Are you sure you can go through with it? Once you start you cannot stop until the deed is done or my hands will be tied." Itachi sighed and nodded. "There is no other way, my clansman will not stand down, they feel as if they have been wronged and that it can only be rectified by blood. I will not have a civil war brew within our walls. By following my plan and leaving the rest alive, my people will live and be able to flourish again. Konoha will be there to support them in this time of despair and our bonds will be forged anew. It is the only way." Itachi's hands were shaking but he gave no reprieve. Hiruzen simply nodded. "Then you will be labeled a missing nin and given the label of a murderer. Never again will you be welcome within Konoha's walls or surrounded by the warmth of your kinsman. A bounty will be placed on your head as an S-class criminal. Anbu will be dispatched to hunt you down come sunrise. That is all I can offer you in return of your efforts. I'm sorry."Itachi for his part held his composure and nodded before disappearing in a cloud of smoke and an audible "Poof!"
Now he stood upon his final victim, the one he'd been dreading most. He stood in his own home in his parents bedroom. Covered in blood and eyes glowing he stared at his father, resting in bed. H'd been here for minutes now without doing anything. He couldn't do anything. It was his own father, the man who had raised and trained him, he couldn't kill him in cold blood...but he was also the leader of the coup who sought to lead Konoha into a bloody civil war. "It had to be this way...to save the lives of many, few must die."
He'd been repeating this to himself for hours now as he went from home to home murdering his clansman one by one. It was his crutch. Now, it was failing him. He couldn't stop now though, this was the pivotal moment. If Fugaku lived then the coup would rebuild through his words. He was the leader of the Coup and the head of the clan.
"It had to be this way...to save the lives of many, few must die."
Steeling himself he stepped forward, and then another. Soon he found himself standing in front of Fugaku with his blade raised. "I'm sorry...it had to be this way." But right as Itachi uttered these few words Fugaku flew from his bed, eyes flashing red as his sharingan spun to life. But it was too late, Itachi's blade swung down and cleaved his father through his shoulder before the blade dug deep into his chest. Itachi could just see his father's eye's spinning into a mangekyou sharingan before his eyes closed and he fell to the floor in front of Itachi. Itachi however had reverted into nothing more than a hollow. His body felt nothing and his mind was empty. Kneeling down he dug his fingers into his fathers eye socket and dug out his eye, still glowing with the power of his mangekyou. He pulled a small vial out and stored them inside.
Itachi knew the power of a fully awakened sharingan was coveted far and wide, their eyes often being the target of assassinations so that others could implant them in an attempt to gain their power. Who knows what those same people would do in the pursuit of a mangekyou sharingan- even if those who know about such an awakening could be counted on one hand. Storing them away in a small pouch next to Daichi's. He could hear his mother stirring and flew from the room, off into the night. He had previous little time to escape and he needed to make every second count lest he be forced to spill more blood.
And there we have it! Chapter one of Alter. I believe it's roughly a thousand words and while I could diffidently kept writing, I feel that this was a good stopping point and a thousand words is a good start. I like to think I'll be able to average four or five thousand words per chapter but I won't hold myself to any guidelines past a thousand words. A very important thing i forgot to touch on is that each character in this story are being aged up about sixteen years, I will attempt to keep this as lore friendly as possible but I find it very difficult to write children into a romantic situation and I won't be writing a time skip anytime soon. Itachi right now is roughly 27. Also as stipulation beta readers should hopefully adhere to these guidelines when applying.
-Good knowledge of grammar and word flow (I do not want to be one of those stories that are poorly written with a good story)
-deep understanding of Naruto lore and timelines (not too much of a necessity more of a want than a need)
-Flexible with time tables and are willing to actually set aside time to read and assist in editing these chapters. I will not have a post delayed by a beta reader.
-and to the one who gets the job, in case I don't say it enough. I will literally love you forever because I love writing and can't wait to get better with your assistance. Till next time, Darksidejuggalo out!