You know that fan fiction 'My Immortal'? Yes you do. You wouldn't be here if you didn't. I've decided to do my own commentary. Like everyone else. Sad isn't it.

Disclaimer: Let's be awesome again! It's just a jump to the left! Then owning Harry Potter! Put your hands on your hips! And become Tara Gilesbie! But all I own is this laptop! That really drives me INSANE! I don't even own anything again! (Sing to the tune of Time Warp)

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) No 2 my gf (ew not in that way) You might not be so sure if you think we think that raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. She HELPED. That's unbelievable U rok! Justin Bieber? Timberlake? ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX! I used to think so too...

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way What a retarded name. And what is with the random apostrophe? and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name)Your parents are Seers... with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears WTF? and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) I don't know who she is... I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. Nothing like incest to make you happy... I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white.As opposed to purple and crooked. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England I live in England... No Hogwarts... Look North... To SCOTLAND! where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic The UK does NOT have a Hot Topic... and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. Pointless clothes description No. 1 I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining What odd weather so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. You win the award for the nicest person ever... I win the award for the most sarcastic person ever

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! What did he do to you?

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly. If he was real and reading this, he would AK himself...

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. Making that conversation pointless...

AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! You want the truth? YOU CAN'T HANDLE THE TRUTH! It was appalling, terrible, stupid and every other adjective to say it SUCKED BALLS!

Chapter 2.

AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! This person clearly failed.. .BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok! POWER TO THE PREPS!

The next day I woke up in my bedroom. I wake up in my bathtub... It was snowing and raining again. It's sunny outside... Where do you live? I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle Remember students of Hogwarts, a bottle of blood a day keeps Madam Pomphrey AWAY! I had. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun. Pointless clothing description No. 2

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) BRILLIANT! Nothing like obvious insertion of real people to brighten up my day! woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.) Pointless clothing description No. 3

"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly.

"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing.

"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.

"No I so fucking don't!" I shouted. Such a lovely, sweet tempered girl...

"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.

"Hi." he said.

"Hi." I replied flirtily. I thought you didn't fancy him...

"Guess what." he said.

"What?" I asked.

"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me. Muggle band, wizarding area, something does not make sense...

"Oh. My. Fucking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR.

"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked.

I gasped. Beautiful way to end a chapter.

Chapter 3.

AN: STOP FLAMMING DA STORY PREPZ OK! Preps are some of the best people in the world though odderwize fangs 2 da goffik ppl 4 da good reviews! Only "Goffik" people give good reviews FANGS AGEN RAVEN! oh yeah, BTW I don't own dis or da lyrics 4 Good Chralotte. I would be worried if you do...

On the night of the concert I put on my black lace-up boots with high heels. Underneath them were ripped red fishnets. Then I put on a black leather minidress with all this corset stuff on the back and front. I put on matching fishnet on my arms. I straightened my hair and made it look all spiky. Pointless clothing description No. 4 I felt a little depressed then, so I slit one of my wrists. It's like 'I felt hungry, so I ate some food' I read a depressing book You can read? while I waited for it to stop bleeding and I listened to some GC. I painted my nails black and put on TONS of black eyeliner. Then I put on some black lipstick. I didn't put on foundation because I was pale anyway. I drank some human blood so I was ready to go to the concert.

I went outside. Draco was waiting there in front of his flying car. He was wearing a Simple Plan t-shirt (they would play at the show too), baggy black skater pants, black nail polish and a little eyeliner Pointless clothing description No. 5 (AN: A lot fo kewl boiz wer it ok! CoughdDragQueensCough).

"Hi Draco!" I said in a depressed voice. Doesn't seem like it...

"Hi Ebony." he said back. We walked into his flying black Mercedes-Benz (the license plate said 666) Authur Weasley faced an inquiry because of this... ABIDE BY THE DAMNED LAW! and flew to the place with the concert. Look back... It says Hogsmeade. On the way we listened excitedly to Good Charlotte and Marilyn Manson. We both smoked cigarettes and drugs. What good role models for little children When we got there, we both hopped out of the car. We went to the mosh pit at the front of the stage and jumped up and down as we listened to Good Charlotte.

"You come in cold, you're covered in blood
They're all so happy you've arrived
The doctor cuts your cord, hands you to your mom
She sets you free into this life." sang Joel (I don't own da lyrics 2 dat song). They are disturbing lyrics...

"Joel is so fucking hot." I said to Draco, pointing to him as he sung, filling the club with his amazing voice. Aren't you going out with someone?

Suddenly Draco looked sad.

"What's wrong?" I asked as we moshed to the music. Then I caught on. You have the emotional range of a teaspoon...

"Hey, it's ok I don't like him better than YOU!" I said.

"Really?" asked Draco sensitively and he put his arm around me all protective. What...?

"Really." I said. "Besides I don't even know Joel and he's going out with Hilary fucking Duff. I fucking hate that little bitch."You do not personally know Hilary Duff I said disgustedly, thinking of her ugly blonde face. So she has a face like Chewbacca. But it's blonde.

The night went on really well, and I had a great time. So did Draco. After the concert, we drank some beer and asked Benji and Joel for their autographs and photos with them. We got GC concert tees. Draco and I crawled back into the Mercedes-Benz You crawled because you were so pissed, but Draco didn't go back into Hogwarts, instead he drove the car into…The tension is killing me WOMAN! the Forbidden Forest! This is on Hogwarts grounds...

So far... this is retarded... Yet is better than the offensive epic fail called 'Imma Wiserd' by an idiot calling themselves 'Ravenretalliashun'