Disclaimer: I don't own these characters, nor do I want to. Anyway, on a less formal note, HELLO people of the internet. It's me, and, unless I change my name in the future, I'm called Gotham Champion. I recently decided to do a commentary of My Immortal. Yeah, cue to the commen-no that's not where it is scroll down a- THERE YA GO

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My Immortal

Chapter 1.

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX! I... won't even try to translate.

Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way Hello Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way, why is your name so weird? Not gonna answer? and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) Guessed that, do I get a prize (:(:(:(: WHAT DO YOU MEAN NO! with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back Why the highlights? and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee Minus the highlights.(AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie. Ah... you want to be in an incestuous (might have made that word up, maybe not) relationship? I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England SCOOTLAND YOU IGNORANT STUPID IDIOT where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) and I wear mostly black. Raise your hand if you couldn't tell... or put it in the review/comments, it's hard to see real people when they're not near you.I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. Sorry, no comment other than she's very self-aware (possibly caused by being the centre of attention for being a vampire) , which could cause her to go to great lengths to fit in, and therefore feel a need to be popular. This could fuel a subconscious need to be the very definition of 'cool', thus explaining the behaviour... Or she's just an idiot, that's possible to.

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!... Rather out of character.

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly. Then why did you say hi to her? And if it's because they're friends, explain this:

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. WHAT WAS THE POINT OF THAT CONVERSATION

AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz! No. No it was not.

Chapter 2.

AN: Fangz 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok! They should teach us this language in school instead of French or German. It would be... interesting.

The next day I woke up in my bedroom. It was snowing and raining again. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had. Who gives a vampire blood in a room with someone else? Also, why is there a vampire in a school. I think that should be a slight safety hazard. My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun. Yet more evidence for the subconscious need to be popular. Also, why a messy bun?

My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) You know, if your friend ever started to hate this story (could see it happening) she could possibly get SO mad/sad that I'm not going to write the possible consequences down woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner.) That was unnecessary.

"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly. Why are you only talking about this now?

"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing.

"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall.

"No I so fucking don't!" I shouted.

"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me. Say it with me; WHAT AN INCREDIBLE COINCIDENCE!

"Hi." he said.

"Hi." I replied flirtily. Does the phrase "No I so fucking don't!" ring any bells?

"Guess what." he said.

"What?" I asked.

"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me. I'll look over the whole muggles in Hogwarts thing. I'm saving that anger/things commenters do for later.

"Oh. My. Fucking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR. NANANANANANANANA INSERT-PLUGMAN. Sorry, the Batman fanboy inside me couldn't resist.

"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked.

I gasped....Give your answer. Ebony? Anyone there? Maybe she'll be back next chapter