Hello everybody, please take some time and tell me what you think of this Oversimplified series I am working on.

Wings of Fire

Oversimplified

An Ice Dragon, Hvitur, is running from the Skywing hatchery with an egg. He thinks he's unnoticed, but he's not. Queen Burn and her soldiers catch up to him, and one of the soldiers throw a burning chain over his mouth, preventing his use of frostbreath. Queen Burn looks at the skywing egg, which was to be born on the brightest night, and deducts that Hvitur is working for the Talons of Peace, an underground movement working to fulfill a prophecy to end the war. Queen Burn does not like this prophecy because she doesn't want dragonets bossing her around. She wants it to end, and she has the perfect idea how to do it. She "accidently" drops the prophesized egg down a cliff. As Hvitur lunged to catch it, his wings were brutally shredded, and was then stabbed through the skull with Queen Burn's venomous tail. She and her soldiers flew off, leaving both the egg and the dragon, dead.

A while later, a Skywing looked at the remains of the two and entered a series of caves until reaching her destination. She informed her colleagues, Webs and Dune of the deaths. They had more unfortunate news. Another colleague of theirs had arrived with the Mudwing egg, but had died of battle wounds soon after. The Seawing, Webs, set out to steal a Rainwing egg to make up for the destroyed skywing egg. (He and the other guardians would afterwards tell her how she wasn't a prophecy dragon and was lazy and stupid, even though she was the hardest worker AND it was THEIR idea to steal a Rainwing egg in the first place. More on that later.)