(Hello, i am RatcheT2497 and welcome to my first commentary and/or story on fanfiction! I will be commentating on the possibly worst fanfiction on the internet, My Immortal! So, let's venture into this crapfiction!)
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) (Ha. Ha. Ha.) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) (You were thinking about it. Not us.) raven, bloodytearz666 (...) 4 helpin me wif (She/He is your wife?) da story and spelling. U rok! Justin (Who?) ur da luv of my deprzzing (What's a deprzzing?) life u rok 2! MCR ROX (I am not even going to comment on that one.)!
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (Is it even possible having a name that long? Also, is Dark'ness even a name that exists?) and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) (Captain Obvious is obvious...) with purple streaks and red tips (Wha-?) that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid (Limpid...What's a limpid?) tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) (Don't worry people. Even i don't know who that is, and i won't "get da hell out of here"). I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major fucking hottie (Incest!). I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white (Oh, my teeth are wavy and green). I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch (..a witch vampire...), and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England (*cough* Scottland *cough*) where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen) (NO SHIT). I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) (She thinks we are stupid. ) and I wear mostly black. (No duh.) I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today (WARNING: This part will make you lose 1 IQ point for every clothing item she describes here.) I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt , pink fishnets (Fishnets?) and black combat boots (Black combat boots? Really?) . I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow (Da hell) . I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining (Snowing and raining? *sigh*) so there was no sun (Again, No duh), which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them. (The protagonist of this story, everybody!)
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was . Draco Malfoy!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. (Uhh, shyly?)
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away. (THE BEST CONVERSATION EVER!)
AN: IS it good? (Nope!) PLZ tell me fangz! (Well, that's it for this chapter... So, if you want, review, rate, but if you don't, ok. See ya next chapter! -RatcheT2497 out. )
