Hello, everyone. I have returned, but not with a new story. I have returned with a better version of one of my stories. I have rewritten Hours after Hours. I have made it more understandable, and fixed the grammar. I hope you enjoy it!
Disclaimer: I do not own Xiaolin Showdown. Hours after Hours, Rewritten! In a dark, cold, lonely room laid Jack Spicer. His unconscious body was on the ground. Shackles were on his feet, meaning someone didn't want him to leave. Dried blood and an oversized bump was on his head. The rest of his body laid in pain from being beaten. Bruises could clearly be seen along the pale body. His trench coat was gone, so he only had his red sleeve less shirt, and his black paints, and boots. His goggles lay beside his head, and looked like they had been smashed with a bat, and so did the rest of his body. This was not the Xiaolin Monks doing, noir Chases, Wuya's, or Hannibal's. The credit belonged to a new enemy. Jack Spicer isn't his only victim. He has four more victims who he has given, or giving pain to. The clock is ticking and there are still many hours to go before the ending comes ups. Go forwards and see what happen to the Monks. "Stop it!" yelled a female voice. She was chained to wall, tears ran down her face, and pain went through her body. It wasn't physical pain that made the girl cry. It was emotional pain. The sound of a whip cracking could be heard. It was followed by the sound of two people crying in pain. Kimiko was the female voice, and Raimundo was the unlucky victim of the whip. Raimundo lay on the cold ground, in pain and in waiting for the next blow of whip. All Kimiko could do was watch her friend be beaten. The whip came down on Raimundo back, and he cried in pain. His breathing was hard, his back in pain. He laid on the ground, with all his pride of a warrior gone. This was supposed to be Kimiko beating, but Raimundo stood up for her and took her beating. "Stop it! You're going to kill him!" Kimiko yelled at the person or thing that was doing this. It stood in the shadows, so it couldn't be seen. The figure turned its body around, so it looked like it was facing Kimiko. "Be silent!" The figured yelled and snapped the whip at her. Kimiko shook with fear, trying to think of a way to defend herself. Raimundo tried to come to her defense, but his body was far too weak in the state it was in. The figure turned back to Raimundo and hit him with the whip once more. After that he stopped and chained Raimundo to wall. The two stayed in silence waiting for the hours to past by. How many more hours do these two have left? Will there time be up before the story ends? I guess only the time, and the rest of the story will tell. "Clay, please awaken." Omi begged. The Cow boy and the Monk looked like they had beaten. Clay lay unconscious on the ground while Omi tired to wake him up. "Why has this happen?" Omi said to himself. "Why are we here, and why have we been beaten us like this? This is most confusing." Omi asked, but no answer appeared. Look's like some time has passed by these two already, even Omi couldn't stand up to this new enemy. I wonder what will happen in the next hour. How did they get there? Is there new foe stronger then them? Find in the next chapter!
How do you like the new rewritten version? I changed it a bit. I hope my grammar improved.
