Erin Hunter comity topic/362288771046277695

Okay, so I read this, and I have never really thought about it. I totally agreed, so I am writing this. Before you read, please look at this sight.

Brokenstar was a terrible character.

He never won, died pathetically, and all the "evil" things he did were done off scene. (Windclan)

Tigerstar was better written, not completely evil, actually had a reason to be feared, and was awesome in battle.

He was also well liked, and so it was harder to "dispose of him."

Brokenstar was a mean bully who was pathetic. And he got killed by a medicine cat after training in the Dark forest and being like twice her size.

Brokenstar shoved Yellowfangs muzzle into the damp earth. He smirked; raising his paw above her throat, ready to finish this once and for all.

Firepaw eyes widened with horror.

"No!" He lunged at the bigger tom, raking his claws along Brokenstar's face. With a yowl, he threw Yellowfang backwards and slammed Firepaw down. Firepaw struggled to stand but Brokenstar was to strong to move.

"You're bold for an apprentice. Not that it will matter once your dead." Claws ripped a gash open in his side. Pain blurred his vision.

"Leave him alone!"

With a yowl Whitestorm attacked Brokenstar throwing him backwards. Brokenstar swung his legs underneath Whitestorm, knocking him onto to the ground. Brokenstar stood triumphant, knowing he had won.

But slowly the Shadowclan cats, so long forced into submission, began to move. For to long they had suffered because of this bloodthirsty cat. Brokenstar tail twitched nervously, for he knew he was outnumbered. With snarls that rose to growls, Shadowclan advanced upon their cruel leader. Brokenstar backed away with hiss.

"This isn't over," he growled. Firepaw watched him leave in a haze of pain. It's over; we won. He thought before he blacked out.