Disclaimer: Still don't own it.

Apparently what I intended to be helpful sounds mean. I'm not trying to sound that way, but if you're offended, don't read it.

Don't make Bella pregnant unless you have a real reason as to how she could have gotten that way. Vampires are sterile, so unless you can come with a good idea as to how that could happen, it doesn't work very well.

After Bella gets turned into a vampire, think about what powers you're giving her. First of all, there's always the possibility that she doesn't have a power. Second, if she does, she's most likely not going to have a host of new abilities. It starts to get a little far-fetched with multiple powers.

Twilight characters don't swear very often. If you're trying to write like Stephenie Meyer (and I'm sure most of you are,) then I would recommend putting the swearing at a minimum.

Edward will probably not suddenly decide that he's going to fulfill Bella's conditions before they get married. The only reason that he would turn her into a vampire before they got married is if she was going to die. And as for the other condition, he's reluctant enough as it is. There's not a whole lot that could convince him to do that before they are joined in holy matrimony.

Emmett is not an insane child! Sure, he may enjoy the occasional practical joke, but he has how many years of life experience? He's not jokes all the time, and he is actually rather smart.

Along the same lines, Alice is not as shopping crazed as many writers are making her out to be. Yes, she likes to buy things. Yes, she probably has more money right now than you and I will have altogether in our entire lives. Yes, she has a sense of fashion and is always getting Bella clothes. But she can be serious. That's not all that she thinks about.

That's all for now, hope these help.