REVIEW COMMENTARY:
Ok, so. After every chapter (or it might be spread out to after every couple chapters) I want to put in a commentary chapter, where I can reply and talk to reviewers and discuss pokemon and my story, because I like talking to people. So tell me if you don't like this and I'll keep it brief at the end of chapters, but I rather like not having a huge chunk of text at the bottom of my writing, so whatever.
Right, so first off let's explain this world and it's mechanics a bit more. Since Septentrion Euchoreutes left me a few notes which I greatly appreciate.
Flying and riding pokemon. (as demonstrated by the Salamence ride in the first chapter)
Well, first of all it's pretty hard to imagine in the normal pokemon world even just one person flying on some smaller Pokemon such as Pidgey, but whatevs. I do want everything here to seem reasonable (as reasonable as a Pokemon world can be.) It's all in the description of the Pokemon, like I said, Salamence was 7 and a half feet tall at the least, which is taller than a normal sized door. And that he was pretty built and broad which means he's probably as wide as a door, at least in his torso. (and, as most people yell at the tv when watching titanic, Rose could've easily let Jack onto that door with her) Plus Salamence is a Pokemon; Pokemon are pretty amazingly strong, he could probably easily fly two people or a small truck. But yeah, I'll try to write things that won't be too much of a stretch to imagine. (like someone riding or surfing on an anthro pidgey or magikarp.)
Trainer and Pokedex info
Trainer car d info and Pokedex info, yes, does not give the same information. Like the Trainer card doesn't have Body type. Well although Pokemon are very much humanized here, Pokemon and humans are not the same and humans are not categorized as much.
Pokemon not showing age in the Pokedex. Well, I didn't want to deal with age that much and just say every pokemon was just at an acceptable age, just being a pokemon, but then I realized that that doesn't explain newly hatched pokemon, or pokemon that has been alongside it's trainer for generations. So here's how I've determine Pokemon aging culture in this world to be: Newly born pokemon are raised either in daycares, or in the homes of their trainers, or in their pokemon habitats in the wild. As they grow up they cannot battle or even learn any moves until they come of age (which we'll say is around 18-22 human years) then they are able to be trained or go off on their own into the wild for a trainer to battle and encounter. Then they age alongside humans, some species aging slower and having a longer lifespan than humans, and some having shorter.
Deviance. Ok. Deviance is a measurement in this world that identifies how open a person/pokemon is to sex in general and how often and how much they want to be sexual with someone. Just basically how sexual a person/pokemon is in general. So like, Charles at a level 4 out of 10 is more reserved sexually and wouldn't crave to have sex as much and wouldn't be as open to sex as easily as someone with say an 8 to 10 level of deviance. This I added in my story just because I was a bit bored of the anthro pokemon stories I have read where it seems everyone is so sex crazed and wanting sex all the time everywhere. I wanted more build up and variety.
Alright, so that explains a bit more of this pokemon world. If you are curious about more things, just ask.
Yes this is based off a game which some to many readers may not have played and don't know the storyline. But believe me I am giving you plenty of information from the game to let this standalone as a story without you even needing to know that this is based on game at all.
DISCUSSION
Septentrion Euchoreutes mentioned:
Waking up late cliché -1
YES YES I KNOW AND I DO NOT LIKE IT JUST AS MUCH AS YOU! I found myself writing it and I was like, ooohh gosh, what am I doing, noooo, but I just decided to be lazy and keep it in there.
Coolevilshark commented:
I've been meaning to play LP for a hell of a long time, but I've been super busy, but I actually prefer the idea of following this story instead.
Nice! And yeah you should definitely get the whole storyline of Light Platinum out of this story, as a lot of time I am taking straight dialogue from it and twisting up the words to suit my own whims. But yeah, so far it is a pretty great game. Also thanks for the kind words and encouragement.
