Please people please, don't be too hard on me, I'm a Malaysian and an ordinary 18 year old student. Yes I understand if my grammar suck, but I'm still a beginner to english! After all, most of us Malaysians aren't any better. Anyway, here's the redo part of Chapter 1.
Chapter 1: Welcome to 'Dreamland'
Ki, is the name of the boy who call himself and Ki is a runaway boy. He escaped his life from a violent father who treated him as if he was as lowly as a scapegoat. Ever since he lost his mother, Ki gained an ability to turn holographic solid visions into realistic solid visions. A person with these abilities are known as psychic duelist which are extremely rare in numbers. They are like out-casts of this world. Ki is a duelist and he is now in his early fifteens. In his ten dreadful years, Ki make friends and even loses some… but in these ten years he had matured in terms of skills, psychology and physically. He uses a spell caster deck, like no others. The deck of cards were all that is left from his mother…
Present day,...
In a small narrow room occupied only a bed, a table, a small headlight and a black bag, a young man was waking up from his sleeps as the alarm clock with the shape of a Time Magician was ringing loudly into his ears.
He sat up, deactivates it, stretched and gets off the bed and changes.
He slipped his hands into his gray jacket sleeves and fix his sleepy hair with his hands and he picks his bag up.
The young man had light brown hair with several side burns runs down covering his cheeks partly; the young man had tanned skin and jet black eyes. He had a deck above his waistline, largely hidden below the rim of his jacket and a Cheap Duel Disk attached to his left arm. The young man had several scars runs down behind his back, there was a huge gash along with it. To most people, it was a mark off horror but to him, it was a proud souvenir.
Ki exits the room and into the living room where he meets the young woman who allows Ki to accommodate in her house (which is an inn now)-Katie Minas, was there sweeping the floor.
Katie had a bright bluish shoulder length hair; she had pale skin and blue eyes like her short bright azure hair. Katie had on a white one piece as a casual wear. An apron was donned as well. Ki could smell the usual scent of cool mints. She resembles his sister.
"You're awake? Sleepyhead?" Is what she threw at Ki who just woke up. Across the hallway was the mess hall. The tenants were gathered around talking about their courier while eating. Clair, as always had on her cap which covers her head. Nimbus, is as studious as he always is. His pet orange furred cat which had a green ribbon around its neck yawned in his laps. Innes remained as pale and as ladylike as she used to be. "Everyone! Ki is about to leave now, any wishes?"
"Ah, Ki! Keep your cool alright? Also good luck in your exam!" wished the short woman with a cap.
Innes, the pale lady turned her and gave a gentle smile. She is the silent type to begin with, but most of her words could be understandable through her actions and expressions. Ki simply assumed that as, "Good luck."
Nimbus, the studious man remained focused to the book as if his entire life depends on it. His cat could only purr while wagging its tail affectionately at its master. Sometimes it makes Ki wonders, how is it able to put up to a guy like him.
Ki waved to the others and turned back to the landlord. "I guess I'll be going now!" he said. "By the way… do give Yuri my regards." he reminded as he turned to the upper floors. "It's been ages…"
"Indeed it has…" said the landlord. "Anyway Ki," Katie fixed the messy look on Ki and after that, she looked at him in every corner. "Got your cards?" Ki raised the rim of his jacket revealing his deck, "Your disk?" Ki raised the Cheap Duel Disk. "Provisions and equipments?" Ki taped his bag. "Good," Katie patted him on the forehead. It was hard to believe that someone about two years younger than him could manage an inn like this. Still, with a farewell hug, he sprinted off to the streets.
The sun was shining, the birds were chirping, and the people were casually moving about. It was a beautiful, quiet morning. Ki sprinted in an impatiently to the main scene.
The clock struck at eight fifteen in the morning and Ki had arrived at a large building on the edge of Domino. The tower is called the Kaiba Corporation. He looked up to the peak of the tower and he smiled as he murmured "Guess this is where my 'story' begins."
Ki gave his name to the registration ladies behind the counter and "Ki!" is the name he gave to them as his registration name. They sweat dropped for his weird name and one of them stood up and said to Ki, "Alright please follow me into the exam hall."
Inside the building, several duelists applying for the academy each faced off against a proctor with different decks and strategies. The dueling field was as large as two combined football fields and there were nine fields, three times three and surrounding them were about hundreds or thousands of seats.
"Interesting site." Said Ki impressed.
"Yes but you are to take the written exams first," the lady replied, which Ki did not bother much nor without any hesitations, "this way please." Ki followed her.
A short while later, Ki returned to the arena, ready to duel. Back during the written exam:
Flashback
"Alright, here's your exam paper," the lady said handing Ki his exam paper. "You have half an hour to finish, so-" the lady's word was cut short as Ki held up his paper, "Finish!" With this, the lady gasped in surprised and froze in position as she heard so. "Holy! Less than a minute and all questions-correct!"
"Yeah, got a prob?"
"Uh, no. Mister uh…"
"Ki"
"Right, Mr. Ki, you may proceed into the arena." The lady said merely with a little sheepish in her tune and off Ki goes.
End Flashback
"Hmph! Those written exams were just pushovers… guess this is where the true fun begins." Ki said as he then sat on an unoccupied chair and watches some of the duelists duel down at the arena. One of the duels catches his eye:
The teenager had magenta hair, aquamarine blue eyes and wearing a black uniform and his proctor. He had the remaining 1000 Life Points left with only a Red Eyes Black Dragon (Level 7/Dark/Dragon/Normal/2400/2000) on his side of the field. The proctor had 2500 Life Points and three face down cards along with a Summoned Skull (Level 6/Dark/Fiend/Normal2500/1200). "My draw!" the duelist said as he drew. He nodded and "I play the spell card known as Heavy Storm to destroy every spell and trap card on the field!" A large whirl wind which destroys the three face downs on the proctor's field which leaves only Summoned Skull onhis field, "Sweet, now I play Brain Control, By paying a ton of 800-" the teenager has 200 LP left, "-I gain control of your Summoned Skull, so say farewell cause it's game over!" The two monsters attack with a combined of lightning and fire and instantly decreased the proctor's Life Points to zero. The teenager sighs in relief and he walked away.
"Interesting, a dragon deck user," said Ki as he watched and Ki seem to have a sixth sense of knowing what kind of deck a duelist owned after seeing the first monster. "Imagine he has Kaiba's Blue Eyes White Dragon."
"And I hope so too," replied a voice behind Ki. Ki turns to find the teenager from the duel he watched, "Liner Positions, you?"
"Ki," is all he answered
"I-I see, pleasure to meet you!" he said raising his hand wanted to shake Ki's, but Ki just turn away back to the arenas. "Hm, not too friendly eh man." He said.
"Indeed," said Ki coldly, "how long will it take to-"
So long after and now finally, "Attention to applicant number 101: Ki, please report to arena 3." Ki heard his name being called. He stood and descends the stairs to begin his field exam.
"Alright, The Arcane King, Ki! Prepared to duel!" he bellowed.
End Chapter 1
That is how things go so far... any way like always, R&R and tell me how my grammar is doing. Till the next chapter, Chapter 2 Ki the Arcane King.
