So after some spelling mistakes on my part, and very lovely reviews (thank you all by the way) I have written a second, slightly shorter chapter. The third will be up soon too. This is a series of texts between a variety of people all leading up to the 1 o'clock mark, when they have to face each other again. Tell me what you think about this chapter, because there's going to be no scene setting or people placement. Instead it's just names, times and dialogue and I want to know if it's a revolutionary literary technique, or if I should leave it in a corner to be forgotten ;)
Enjoy!
Danny & Richie
Danny grabbed his phone and found the only person he could go to in moments like this... His brother.
8:02am
Dude I did something stupid. And it's all your fault. How have you been?
D x
8:05am
Hey Danny what's up? I'm good thanks and you can't blame me. I wasn't there ;) LOL Xx
8:08am
This is not a time for lots of laughs! This is serious! I kissed Mindy.
D x
8:09am
WHAT?! :O why?! What happened?! And stop putting 'd' I know it's you! Xc
8:12am
Fine but stop using those little faces they're stupid! And what does 'xc' mean?
X
8:15am
Fine but stop changing the subject! What made you finally do it?
Oh and it's a typo Xx
8:18am
I dunno. What do you mean 'finally'?!
X
8:22am
You know EXACTLY what I mean! Don't play dumb Danny. You didn't shut up about her last time I saw you! Xx
11:46am
Sorry I fell asleep. And it's all your fault anyway! If you hadn't of told Morgan about dad it wouldn't have happened!
X
11:48am
No worries and yeah dad called and said you went to see him. I'm so proud of you Dan. So what happened with you and Mindy?Xx
11:54am
Honestly? I have no idea. We were sat together. She walked away, and I missed her? How can you miss someone a few feet away?!
X
11:58am
Awwww Danny 3 Mindy! Did you talk about it? Xx
12:00pm
Shut up it's not like that. She came with me to dads, it was nice. Look I have work in an hour and need a shower and to clear my head a bit. I'll phone you later and we can talk? mainly about Danny jr? YOU COULD HAVE TOLD ME!
X
12:09pm
Sorry Dan! And okay phone me after you've finished, make sure it's not too late though I'm out after 9. One last thing, what changed from 'all talk' to 'action!?' Xx
12:10pm
Probably when I saw her naked. pushed me over the edge.
X
12:11pm
EXPLAIN NOW
12:22pm
I will later LOL
X
12:24pm
Fiiiiiine! talk later xx
-Meanwhile-
Mindy & Jeremy
Mindy awoke on her couch at 10:30. She showered and began getting ready, until her phone beeped. Cliff had text her.
Hey babe I've sorted my shift so I'll around the building at 1 too! Looking forward to seeing you xxx
Oh god. Oh god oh god. Mindy planned to turn to the only man she could right now... But no. She couldn't turn to him because he'd kissed her. Okay plan B.
10:37am
Hey I can't come in today super duper sick sorry!
10:42am
What's wrong? How was your flight back?
10:45am
It was just a flight what do you expect? All I did was sit down for a while geeez why do people ask about flights? Anyway I think I've got jet lag so I need to stay in bed :/
10:53am
You're being an idiot I'm not covering anymore patients for you. You were on the plane for less than five hours. I've been more jet lagged walking up three flights of stairs. Get your ass to work or you're doing the on call work for the next four weekends! How was Mr Castellano? Morgan told me everything!
10:54am
What do you mean? Danny was consistent with what Danny is usually like. What does Morgan know?
10:59am
I mean Danny's dad! What happened in LA Mindy? Have you two had a fight?
11:16am
Kind of. Do I really have to work? Pleaaaase?
11:19am
Yes. You have to. See you at 1!
Dammit! Mindy thought. She couldn't avoid what was coming. She didn't know what to do.
•Danny was out of the question
•Jeremy was of no help with skipping work
Which left Gwen. Gwen was mostly useless in confusing situations. But she had no alternative.
11:33am
Gwen I need to talk to you. Danny kissed me! Xx
11:47am
Sorry Riley has a cold, I didn't see my phone and WHAT! Finally! Was it good? Xx
11:50am
Finally? Why finally? X
11:54am
Handsome jerk? You two are practically inseparable! And you didn't answer... WAS IT GOOD?! Xx
11:59am
But we were friends! Xx
12:03pm
MINDY! Was it good? Xx
12:06pm
IT WAS FANTASTIC! It's ruined what I wanted with Cliff and confused me so much! He said it was a 'thank you'! What does that even mean? Look I need to get ready, I have to go to work pretty soon so can I just call you after the most awkward shift of a lifetime. Can I call you around 7? Xx
12:09pm
Of course! I'm always here for you, you know that :) xxx
Mindy stood holding the pole for support on the subway. It was almost ten to one, and she didn't know whether to be excited or nervous. She didn't have time to wonder when she felt the bag on her hip vibrate. She grabbed her phone and her face involuntarily lit up. It was from Danny.
12:48pm
I can see you.
D
She looked around, and tried to spot him, but she couldn't spot him.
12:50pm
Well done, what do you want? A medal? :P
12:51pm
You have one on hand? That'd be great!
12:52pm
Where are you? I can't give you a medal while you're hidden!
12:53pm
I don't think you have one...
12:54pm
You got me I don't :P
She smirked at her phone as she got off of the subway, but Danny was no where in sight.
12:55pm
Why do you always disappear on me Castellano? :P
Danny stopped for a moment to consider his reply. He honestly didn't know how he had gotten to the office building before her, they were only one carriage apart. He decided to go with the message he knew he shouldn't send, but the one he wanted to send most.
12:57pm
Why do you always let me go Lahiri?
He pressed send and immediately headed for the elevators. He had planned to wait for her, to try and ease the awkwardness but instead, he decided to stick his foot in it. Nice one Castellano he thought to himself.
1 New Message
Danny
She opened it with haste, but then her heart sank. She read through their conversation. Flirting. More flirting... and then he ruined it. She sighed and headed into work.
1:02pm
Mindy arrived at the office and went through greeting the excited friends and colleagues, and those that were not that excited. She craned her neck and stood on her tip toes to get a glimpse of Danny's door. She saw it slam shut, Danny hidden behind it. She sighed, before telling everyone everything about her trip. Well, almost everything.
I really hope you guys enjoyed it! I wanted to get their kind of mirrored feelings shown without being too obvious, but I'm not sure if I achieved that. Also the subtle flirting on the subway was an attempt at showing how unaware they still are about their relationship because I never said this would be easy!
Number three will be here before Friday people! :)
