Hey Again! I got positive feedback from the first chapter! But I have a question! Do you want my writing style (From chapter 1 and 2) to be the same or do you want me to make it more formal. For example!
"Hey Amu!" Max said!
"Oh, hi!" Amu said smiling!
So. yeah you're choice :D (Idea from Heart-Shaped Quill) Apart from that, read on Minna and AkariRedApple is awesome :D
Max, still in shock of these "Shugo Charas" stood back and took it all in. "Uhh." He said nervously as everyone was staring. "When will it hatch?" Amu smiled. "That's something none of us know." Max smiled back. At that moment, something struck Max's chest. His eyes widened in shock. "Agh.." He grunted falling on the ground. The only thing supporting him was his arm. "Max!" Amu said running up. Max grunted again, struggling for breath. "Amu-chan! I can sense a mystery egg!" Miki said urgently. Max collapsed. "I...just...need...a...b-breath..." He said breathing slowly. "Tadase-kun and I will go to the Mystery egg! You keep Max ok!" Amu said running off. Nagihiko walked up to Maxwell and bent down. "Do you have Asthma, or any lung problems?" He asked. "N..No." Max replied getting up. "Nagihiko, I sensed the egg as soon as he had a chest pain." Said Kusu Kusu flying over towards them. "Does that mean he can sense it?!" Yaya asked jumping over there. "Sense what?!" Max yelled. "I'm not sure.." Nagihiko replied, ignoring Max. "Not sure of what?!" Max yelled once again. "Maybe it was just a coincidence?" Rima asked softly. "WHAT?!" Max yelled again. The three turned to him. "SSHHH! We're thinking!" Rima said. Max just sighed and got up. "Well, I don't think I need to be here any mo-" He was cut off. Another chest pain. He fell sideways. This time unconcious.
"W-Where am I?" Max says slowly opening his eyes. "You're in Dangan Ronpa..." A girl said. Max shot up! "AGHH!? BUT I DON'T KNOW WHERE HOPE's PEAK ACADEMY IS!" The girl giggled. "Just joking!" Max felt relieved. When his eyes came into focus, the girl turned out to be Amu. "Oh, Amu. Or do I say Amu-chan?" He asked. "Oh. Well, I guess Amu-chan is ok." She smiled. Max hopped off the hospital bed. On the way out of the door he looked behind him. The door was tagged "School Sick Bay" Max walked out. Suddenly Miki came up behind Max. "Are you ok?" She asked curious. "I feel a bit dizzy. But apart from that I'm fine! Thanks!" Max replied happy. Miki smiled and flew back to Amu. "Hey, I was just wondering." Max began. "Yes?" Amu replied softly. "What do I do if my egg hatches?" Max asked turning to Amu. "Well, uhh, just bring him to school. " Max nodded. "Also, it said in the book it's supposed to help us to reach our dreams. Is that true?" Amu smiled. "Yes, but sometimes dreams are hard to find. I guess that's why I have so many!" She ended it off with a little laugh. Ding dong, Ding dong. "Oh, it's time to go home! Well see you." Max started to walk. Then he turned around and looked at Amu. "Amu-chan." Max walked home with so many thoughts. "I wonder what my Shugo Chara will look like." Before he knew it, he was at home. "I'm home!" Max shouted. "Max! I got you a present today!" Mom said coming to the door. "OH! Really?" Mom picked up a bag and opened it. Inside was a Manga. "I looked all over town for one in English!" Max smiled. "Thank you so much!" He grabbed the present and went upstairs to read it.
"YAHHHHHHHHHHHH!" Max yawned as he woke up. He looked at his egg, that was sitting on his desk. Max opened up his Manga. "Ultimate Enji! Art & Illustration by Akari." Max said aloud. "Akari sure is a good writer!" Max said getting dressed in his school clothes. He went downstairs. "Noone is awake yet." Max sighed. He quickly made himself a hot chocolate and left for school. He was so concentrated in thoughts. "Hey! Maxwell-kun!" Amu shouted out. Max didn't hear it. He was thinking really hard. "Maxwell-kun!" Amu said again. "Amu-chan, leave this to me!" Ran said smiling. She flew up to Max. "Go, Go Maxwell-kun! Go, Go Maxwell-kun!" Max turned his head to Ran. "Oh, good morning Ran!" Max said smiling. "Maxwell-kun!" Amu said once again. "Oh, good morning Amu! I mean Amu-chan! Japanese is so confusing sometimes..." He laughed. Amu joined in laughing. They started walking and talking. "Hey, just wondering. Have you read the manga written by Akari?" Max asked curiously. Amu put a finger to a chin. "Hmm, oh yeah! The Ultimate Enji one right?" Max nodded. Max was so into the conversation that they ended up at the royal gardens. "Uhh, when did we decide to go here?" Max asked. Amu shrugged and walked inside. Inside were the whole guardians. "Oh, good night everyone!" Everyone looked at him confused. "What? Oh did I say good night? OH! I meant good morning! " He nervously laughed. He walked up to the table where everyone sat down. "Ehh, my bag's moving... is that normal?" Max yelled. "It looks like something's trying to get out!" Tadase said. "It's probably his egg! Yaya want's too see his Shugo Chara!" Yaya said overly happy. "Ehh, ok." Max opened his bag where his purple egg flew out. It started to crack. But what came out was not expected... "Come again?" Max added.
To Be Continued...
I feel bad for ending it off there...
