My Immortal Commentary
Hellllllo again my friends! I've got a couple of chaters of this done so I figured might as well post them up ASAP so you shoudl be gettign a update every day or so, so we should be done in just over a month or so. anyways Reviews!
Zoids Fanatic: we all want to head deck at this story, to be honest the main reason I'm doign this story is it's helping me with my writers block ^^; that and I ike making people happy and I really enjoy laughign at these kind of storys so I figured why not make one of my own? sorry if I've offended anyone.
F: Glad you like the commtary ^.^ my friends say I have a sharp tounge and a talent for sarcasum!
Midori Hotaru: Glad I made you Lol!
AN: Fangz (Stop it with the stupid puns!) 2 bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da chapta (Text Speak, L33t…..kill me now! The two things I can not stand in a story!)! BTW preps stop flaming ma story ok!(it's not flaming when your story is worse than Troll dung!)
The next day I woke up in my bedroom (well if you fell asleep there it's safe to assume you'd wake up there!). It was snowing and raining again (Someone call Storm to fix the weather.). I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had (personally I drink some juice but to each to their own). My coffin was black ebony and inside it was hot pink(My eyes! They Buuuuuurn)velvet with black lace on the ends. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas.(or you know you could use actual Pajama's just a thought) Instead, I put on a black leather dress(must have taken a while to get into), a pentagram necklace, combat boots (Again leave the defenceless boots alone!)and black fishnets on. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears (most sane people stop at one piercing per ear.) , and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.
My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) (huh? Is she Willow or Raven?) woke up then and grinned at me. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink (*twitch* call your self's goths?) streaks and opened her forest-green eyes(Grin, flip hair THEN open the eyes? Amazing she hasn't poke her eyes out by now!). She put on(oh here we go) her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation(that you have no need of) and black eyeliner.)
"OMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!" she said excitedly.( OMFG? Do people really say that in real life, I've hear Oh my god! Or ohemgee! But never OMFG)
"Yeah? So?" I said, blushing (…you are a vampire a member of the undead, undead means no heart beat, no heart beat means no blood pumping to your cheeks, mean no blushing for you!)
"Do you like Draco?" she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room(you have disgraced the house of snakes) and into the Great Hall.
"No I so fucking don't!" I shouted. (someone's taking a trip down de-nile, and a loud one at that)
"Yeah right!" she exclaimed. Just then, Draco walked up to me.(No, no Malfoy run away Save yourself!)
"Hi." he said.
"Hi." I replied flirtily. (flirting with the guy you supposedly don't like, that's gonna show Willow you don't like him!)
"Guess what." he said.(I'm going to murder you)
"What?" I asked.
"Well, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade." he told me. (muggle band in a wizard village, makes a world of sence(not) and why the heck would muggle hateing Malfoy WANT to go?)
"Oh. My. Fucking. God!" I screamed. I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR)."(I feel sorry for those bands)
"Well…. do you want to go with me?" he asked. (please murder her on the way or when you get there!)
I gasped. (I re-quote myself, Worst ending ever!)