A/N: What up my peeps? Warning for the horrible sex scene in this chapter; beware the man carrots and gigglesticks. Enjoy!
AN – VINCENT or watever ur name is thanx 4 the LAME reviw. u totall D*** no one is MAKIN u reed this fic if you dont like it then leave [Someone's new here]. Clestal zodiac and brittany j – thanx for the advice on my character but shes not a marysue, she's not "perfect" look she has anger problems and she looks the way she does 4 a reason i will explain it as the story goes on [I don't know if I should get into some 'spoilers' here, but all I can say is that her looks honestly have no relevance in the future since she just seems to get hotter so... Mary Sue it is].
Chapter 2 – edward
The anger faded form my sapphire eyes "whatevah" i said sweatily "I didnt mean to yell and to be ride" [Uh yeah you did]
"thou are too beuatiful for that" he said, and for once I didnt feel like cockdropping the guy for paying me a compilement, instead I just smiled. [What an idiot - the only reason you're accepting this compliment is because he is 'hawt'. You are no better than the 'horny donkeys' that 'desperately' ask you for your number Tiana]
"I'm Ewdard [Oh God...] Cullen" he mermered "who are thee?"
"Altatntiana [I hope they both actually just mispronounce their names to each other] Loren but you can call me Tiana or mabye Tiaa" i said feeling shy at the way he was looking at me [? ... nope not going to say it] . I had seen THAT look in so many male eyes but never quite as intense or sexy! [*groans* still not going to say it] His eyes burned like hot gold velvet in the midday sun like peonix feathers and rainbows, so gold and magical. [Oh my {lol)]
"thou reminds me of bygone times" he said, carefully retching out a shaking hand and brushing my cheek "thy face is like an old painting, thou is exceptional"" [I can't help but remain on the fact that he is comparing a wannabe goth, with full bra on display and leather pants, to a painting of bygone times]
"your not so shanky [Did she mean swanky?] yourself but i couldn't help noticing you have a fricking GF, you ass! I saw u with her in the cafeteria!" I notched his hand hard with my long black nails.
"thee DID notice me then?" he purred with a sly grin. [Dude she just brought up your gf, you think it's the time to slyly grin?]
I was up against the wall with his face right close to me now. He wanted to sex me I could tell [I really hate how she uses this term instead of 'fuck', it just sounds so... dumb], and suddenly he was kissing me [push him off?]! I felt like my slim legs would break in half and my heart expanded like a big balloon. I fell his hand sliding softly down my neck an underneath my top [push, kick, scream for help?]. He stoked my breasts for a few minutes and his man-carrot [MAN-CARROT!] standing in action and hard as a rock against my legs. And then he ripped my top and pulled it of me and doped it on the floor [Tiaa just scream!]. We made out for 10 minutes and then he tried to take of my bra but I pushed him away suddenly thinking WTF Tiaa are you just gonna let this total stranger take your cloths off in school where anyone could see you [Yeah no kidding]? I'd never let a guy kiss me before or touch me and suddenly I was letting this cheating sicko with a FRICKIN GF grope me just cause he was uber hawt with sexoy hair and cold as death! I was acting like a biatch and a slut and I was suddenly very ashamed of my actions. [... Like I don't even know how to feel about this, because she acts as if what is happening is seriously shocking and bad, yet she justifies her loving it because he is so hot and sexy. (Sigh) She has no pity from me]
-BASTARD! Never touch me again!" i gapsed
"If thou thinks thou can keep thou hands of me!" [She told you to keep your hands off of her Edward, not vice versa] he answered all smug, and I couldn't believe how he made me feel so angry and so aroosed at the same time. [I can't believe it either]
At that moment I'd never HATED anyboy more in my whole life and the worst part of it was he was SO FREAKIN HAWT I was totally creaming my panties and he NEW it, this was horible! [You literally just said that, and please we do not need to know about the state of your panties] I felt disguised with myself and turned to leave.
"Wait! [Just go Tiaa, just go] I need to speck to thee! I no your secret tiaa"he said in a quiet voce gassing into my eyes "your one of my kind. who made thee ?are you part of a coven or on thou own?
"what-is said sharply [Woah that sentence got jacked up] -dude your insane! And you freakin SMELL! (he didnt really smell but I didnt no what else to say!) [... Really? That is the go to insult after he tries to take advantage of you?]
"thy a CAMPIRE [campfire] tia! a VAMPIRE! BUT WHY CAN'T I READ THOU MIND? I THOUGHT BELLA WAS THE ONLY ONE BUT HERE THOU ARE! WHAT DOES THIS ALL MEEEEAN!" He punched the wall with his buckly fist and shouted suddenly furious and his eyes flickered red [(LOL) That just cracks me up].
I schlepped [o _ o?] him hard across the face and tried to leave but he caught my waste and as I struggled and tried to hit him again he caught my hand in mid air and hammed [not again] me against the wall where his hand had already made a huge dint in the wall. His face was blunt and right heavy in mine. My knee came up hard against his massive throbbing gigglestick [GIGGLESTICK!] between his legs and he drubbed over in pan. I broke free and goaded my books and started rugging away to math, but edward hand finished with me [eww].
"TIAAAAAAAAAAA NOOOOOOOOO!"he screamed after me tearing his shrit of himself in fury and throwing it over my eyes. [... I am so confused right now]
I lost my sight and was behind me breathing into my ears.
"i'm sorry tiaa" he wimpered sadly picking me up off the floor and gazing mutely into my eyes "i didnt mean to rut thee! I'm so contemptuos! I APOLOGIZE! THIS IS JUST SO WEIRD!" [Yeah this is hella weird! You ripped your shirt off to cover her eyes (to calm her down?) and then picked her up and stared into her eyes, which are covered?]
"YOUR so frickin weird you mean!" I snaped whitely as he lay on the floor so hawt and crying with his shirt off with his pippling body [*shakes my head*]. I wanted to forgive him for calling me a vampire(VAMPIRE! I'd heard that one before from preppy losers asking if I sleep in a coffin and suck blood like LETSAT just cause I like eyeliner and listen to Linken Park [Really, that's why people would call you a vampire? I wear eyeliner and listen to Linkin Park, and I have never been accused of such a thing)and making fun of me and trying to force me against the wall and maybe plunder my crevises but i didnt [Why would you apologize to him for his own action of plundering your crevices?]. I left him crying on the floor and went to find my class. As I entered math class i suddenly droped my bocks again as a flashing pain burned in my left hand as my brithmark glinted gold for a second (NO JOKE!)then I fell over [Lol]. The pain was suddenly gone and some weirdo blond freak called Eric was helping me up and staring at me like a pervo rapist [Well, you never clarified if you put your top back on so...]. I kicked him in the sholder (kung fu babie [barbie]!)as he gazed longingly after me [He gazed like this after you kicked him?]. In his frickin dreams. I sat down at the back of the class unable to think about anythin but my weird enconter with edward cullen, wondering what it all could mean. [What do you mean "what it all could mean"? He just wanted to fuck your Mary Sue crevices because that's what you wanted]
AN what do u think [Not good things] PLEASE R n R?.BIG SHoutout 2 my friend abigail gud luk for 2moro!)did u see i put the man-carrot thing in! [We sure did]) LMAO! Also love 2 tiffi & rach(and zaccibaby of corse!) LOVE U GUYZ SO MUCH!X X X beckymac x x