Authors Note:
I understand that I'm not the best at Dialog but I don't let other correct my work for me, otherwise I feel like its not just my story anymore. Thank you formerflautist for your input. I really do appreciate it. But..unless I get some positive reviews, this story wont be continued on this site. I hope someone likes it enough for me to want to continue but since formerflautist is the only one to respond so far I wont be writing chapter two on this site until further notice.
Sorry,
May
theboyz.