It seems that I have given the wrong impression during my note in the last chapter. No he will not be getting the sharingan or rinnnegan in this story. He is not actually over powered in this either, that last part for the note was me being annoyed about the whole, 'let's give him a cool eye thing and make him a god' thing that is going on now. None of my stories, unless I actually feel that it is needed, will have him gaining any of the eye powers. Yes, I agree, there are some that are good, but there are many that are not. What actually got me the most annoyed was the fact that they give it to him and he doesn't have a need or use for them, take for example, the sekirei cross where he gains the eternal mangekyou the uses a space time jutsu, when he can just mess around with the flying thunder god, to send him to Shinto teito. It was actually rather unnecessary in reality. If there are questions on what I am talking about with this, ask and I will answer where I can.
Waking on the day for the team placements, Naruto started to get ready, only to be stopped by Yume who was making breakfast, an occasion that had been going on for almost a week now. She seemed to think that since he was giving them room that she needed to do something to repay him even after he told her that it wasn't necessary or needed really.
"Ah, Naruto… I have been meaning to ask you. Why do you wear that orange outfit when you are a ninja?" she asked him as she saw him pulling his jacket on.
"Oh, well, it's just that the village will only sell me this outfit when I went to buy some clothes. I don't actually have anything else to wear since I outgrew all my younger wear." He told her getting a nod.
"Well, if you like I have a set of the male clothes that the disciplinary squad's male members used, or maybe it was actually a male version of the female outfit? Not sure but you are welcome to use it if you like." She told him as she pulled a set of clothes from… somewhere… come to think of it, she didn't have any pockets or anything of the sort so where the hell did she get them?
"Hmm, well, If you don't mind sure." he returned with a shrug showing that he didn't actually mind all that Much. Catching the clothes that she tossed him, he watched as she returned her attention to what she was making.
Going back to his room, Naruto pulled off the orange jumpsuit and pulled the outfit that was given to him on. It consisted of the same coat/cloak like thing on the shoulders of the black jacket and shirt, that had a set of white lines running down the sides, thin and perfectly lined up to be even with the two on the other side, one near the front and one at the back of his sides. The pants were also black but where the white lines on the shirt were, there was instead a pair of dark purple lines running down it. A set of fingerless gloves completed the ensemble, something that he noted that the two women both had on their hands as well. Figuring it was just something that the squad wore, he shrugged it off as he pulled them on.
Nodding to himself, Naruto slipped his arms into the sleeves that were in the grey coat/ cloak unlike the two females that were currently living with him. "Hmm, it's rather nice. Not tight or loose, just perfect. Wonder what they make these things with?" Naruto commented to himself.
"Heh, don't know ourselves, we are given them when we join the squad. Looks like it suits you by the way." Karasuba's voice rang out from the doorway.
"Thanks, Yume gave it to me when I told her I didn't have anything other than that to wear." He told her as he pointed to the orange jumpsuit on the bed causing her to slightly cringe at it.
"I don't know how you can stand that monstrosity, let alone wear it, that thing gives even me nightmares, and I am the one that usually gives them." she said as she shivered slightly in fear of it as she glanced at it before quickly looking back at Naruto.
"Only thing I had, used the excuse of attention grabbing when someone actually asked about it before. You two seem like you are more trustworthy than most of this village so if didn't want to lie to you about it. Plus the fact that you two are actually helping me out with things, like Yume does with cooking and you with a sparring partner always ready to fight at the drop of a hat." He told her getting a smirk from the tired looking woman.
"Damn right. Now, don't you have that team thing to go to today?" she asked.
"Yeah, why? You want to go?" he asked her calmly getting a light shrug.
"Beats staying here all day for sure. Yume and I hate being cooped up with nothing to do for a whole day, so it would be enjoyable or at least pleasant to accompany you. Get to know what it is that you do more, and learn of ways to improve your technique when sparing." She told him getting a nod.
"If you want, I am not one to say no to a pretty girl." He told her getting a light nod from her as she turned toward the kitchen, her back fully to him as she still leaned on the door.
"Yume… we can go with Naruto today." She calmly stated as if the other girl would hear her with the way she spoke normally.
"Alright, just eat first and we will go." Her voice called back in its normally half cheerful, half serious tone to them.
"You know… I still find it surprising how well you two can hear. Better than most ninja to say the least." He told Karasuba getting a small smirk in return.
"You know… if you had boobs, and wore the female version, along with long orange hair and glasses, you would look just like Matsu with how you wear that." She told him causing him to raise an eyebrow.
"Matsu eh, I suppose that she would be of the first then, seeing as how the two of you told me of the second."
"Yeah, she is number two, a brain type, was on the first with myself and the other three aside from Miya." Karasuba told him lightly, her tone never changing from the half exhausted, half deadly one that she used to speak.
"So Naruto… how do you like it?" Yume asked as they walked into the kitchen to see her with three large plates piled with curry, three or four inches high of the plate.
"It's nice, fits perfectly. Thanks Yume chan, you two are the best." He told her, accidently causing them to blush faintly at the praise he gave them.
"You're welcome Naruto kun, happy to help out when you need it." She told him giving a charming smile to him.
"Still, thanks for the outfit, Feels good to finally be out of that damn jumpsuit to be honest. So you two want to go to the placements with me, is that right?" he asked to make sure.
"It beats staying her all day with the damn dream." Karasuba said as she referenced the others name causing her to pout and puff out her cheeks in a half childish way causing Naruto to let out a slight laugh as he saw it.
"Well, I say it's better than staying with you feather head." She returned jokingly causing Naruto so shake his head as he noted that Karasuba started to slowly draw her sword at the other female.
"You want to get hurt don't you?" she asked with a glare before her hands went up with her fingers in a u as she was wacked on the head.
"Kara chan… you know the rules, no fighting inside the house. Take it outside first, or not at all." Naruto said as he held a joke weapon against her head.
"I seriously wonder how anyone can never see the power behind that thing that he uses. That thing is scary." Yume said as she and Karasuba looked wearily at the object in his hands.
"Because they have never felt its power first hand, or the fact that when people use it they tend not to actually think of what one can do with it." He told her as he held the offending object in his hand. "Never doubt the power of the… paper fan, less it meets with your noggin." He said dramatically before slipping it back into his sleeve, effectively hiding it from view once more.
"Hehe, Naruto kun your funny when you're like that." Yume giggled out at him good naturedly causing him to chuckle lightly as well.
"Let's get going you two, need to be there soon." He told them as he started to head out the window, glancing back to see them pulling their boots on, thigh high for Karasuba and shin for Yume, before the two followed after him, who had combat boots on instead of sandals now.
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Walking into the classroom, Naruto was greeted by stares as the students all stared at him, obviously not knowing that he had passed doing a much harder 'test'. He got even more stares as the pair of women walked in behind him, looking slightly bored, at least in the case of Yume, Karasuba seemed to always look bored unless she was sparring with either Yume or himself as it happened.
"Why do you need a team with these people anyway Naruto kun?" Yume asked him as she ignored all the others.
"They aren't much at all, I agree." Karasuba said also ignoring them.
"Village rules, besides, when I make chunnin or Jounin, the two next up, Jounin two up from gennin, I can take solo missions out of the village." He told them getting annoyed sighs from the two, obviously not liking the fact that he would have to spend time with a pathetic team that couldn't possibly match his power.
'Ugh, I hate when there are rules on fucking teams like this; it's a waste of manpower to have stronger people on teams of weak ones.' Karasuba thought to herself as her eye gained a violent twitch.
'Maybe they will be better than their power says they will.' Yume thought as the two fell into a pair of chairs on either side of Naruto who sat in the middle of a row of chairs.
"YOU BAKA, THIS IS A PLACE FOR THOSE THAT GRADUATED. WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?" a pink haired girl screamed out getting glares from both Yume and Karasuba, Much to Naruto's slight surprise. To be honest he actually had expected Kara to glare when the banshee screamed, he actually hadn't thought that Yume would as well.
"How dare you call Naruto kun a baka?" Yume spoke extremely maturely, none of her usual childish cheer in her voice like normal.
"You dare defile the looks of pinky on my squad." Kara spoke with a glare that intensified.
"Girls, calm." Was all Naruto spoke before they immediately started to calm down. "Haruno, if you would use that thing that you and many others call a brain, then like lazy boy over there, you would have taken note that I am wearing a Konoha headband, one that obviously has been sanctioned by either the Hokage himself, or perhaps one that was given to me for passing a Much harder test than the one that you had taken. Now as for what I am doing here, isn't it obvious from what Yume chan and Kara chan said when we walked in? I am here for my team." He told the pink haired girl.
"Ha, you most likely stole that." She said not believing one thing that he said, causing the two women to bristle and Karasuba to slowly draw her katana.
"Kara chan, be a good girl or you will get hit. Yume chan you too. I expected her to do this. She is harmless to me, aside from the fact that if she so Much as touches me I can have her sent to prison for assaulting a ninja of this village." He told them, inadvertently causing the girl to freeze, and fist inches from Naruto's head as she went to punch him after being called harmless.
"He is right Sakura; now everyone shut up and sits down." Iruka said as he walked in. "care to explain Naruto?" he asked as he looked at the brown and silver haired females sitting next to the teen.
"Yume chan and Kara chan have been guests at my house, asked to accompany me today, not liking to be cooped up. They looked so cute asking me that I couldn't say no to them so here we are." He told him as he moved his arms around their shoulders, causing Yume to heat up, not trying to control it at all. Karasuba on the other hand felt it as well, but she actively fought it down and kept the feeling at bay inside her.
"Ok, they can stay, it's not like any of this is secret so it won't hurt anything." He said as he nodded to him before going on to say the teams and who was on them. "team 7, Sasuke Uchiha, Sakura Haruno…" he paused due to hearing a loud scream and the pink haired girl turning in her seat proclaiming things of true love concurring all, "and Naruto Uzumaki…" he paused again, feeling a shiver go down his spine as he heard a loud crack flow through the room. Shockingly, when he looked up, he didn't see what h actually expected to see, but rather Naruto slammed his head into the desk, while Yume and the Kara girl rammed their fists into the said desk as well. He actually expected to see the thing behind Naruto once more, having felt the shiver going down his spine. "Jounin Kakashi Hatake." He finished.
"Oh my, it seems that the Hokage has seen fit to give me a team full of debauchery already." Naruto spoke as he tilted his head while smiling, effectively scaring the hell out of everyone that noticed it, Sasuke, and the fan girls were too busy either brooding or swooning over said brooding to notice it.
"Uh, Naruto Kun." Yume spoke softly causing him to look at her, the oppressive feeling gone from the room. "Are you alright?"
"Oh, never better, just wish that the Hokage would have given me a good team." He told her softly as well, getting a nod from the two women.
'Naruto kun… I have to work faster or those two hussies will have my man.' A certain Hyuuga girl thought to herself as she eyed the two older women with scrutiny.
(Same teams as canon just felt the reaction for Naruto was needed.)
"Naruto, why do we have to wait for this person? He is already three hours late." Karasuba spoke calmly, though he could hear an edge to it as if it was her katana that had spoken rather than her.
"Sadly, because if we are not here, then he can fail us as a team and send us back to the academy, however girls, you can have fun with him all you like when he gets here. I won't stop you unless he is near dead." He told them, getting an evil looking grin from Karasuba and a cheery one from Yume.
"Naruto baka, don't try to act cool, it won't get me to date you and you can't be cooler than Sasuke Kun, it's not possible." Sakura spoke getting a raised eyebrow from the two elder women.
"I wasn't trying girly, I was doing. Besides, I would rather date Yume chan or Kara chan than you any day." He told her causing their bodies to heat up again.
As she started to open her mouth to retort, the door started to slide open, before a head of silver was shown and a mask was on the persons face. Before the person could fully enter, the three elder people in the room took note of a small orange book in his hand, one that they had seen at Naruto's house, being sent to him by some toad man every few months.
"Kara chan." Naruto spoke as he took note that she was very agitated with the three hour wait and the constant screeching voice of Sakura during the time. "Feel free." He added causing her to grin and vanish before the book was slaughtered brutally into small pieces by the sharp edge of her katana.
"Are you sure it was a good thing to let her 'free' Naruto Kun?" Yume asked giving air quotes around the word free, seeing as it was metaphorically spoken.
"Would you rather her go berserk on either of us? I sure wouldn't, even though I am getting better she still beats the crap out of me when we spar for real." He told her getting a nod.
"True, when she does go all out she is faster than I can react sometimes. I see your point Naruto Kun, let's let her vent for now." She said as she nodded as leaned against him while they watched the mostly one sided fight, the man, most likely Kakashi, seemed to be crying over the loss of his book while dodging the partially enraged woman as she moved at far faster speeds than the other two gennin could watch.
"When do you think she will realize she is fighting at only half her capacity?" Naruto asked calmly to Yume.
"Who knows, she is rather bloodthirsty so it is surprising to see her listening to you really. It may be any moment now, or she won't even notice it." She told him still watching the woman trying to cut the Jounin, only using half her speed, but still managing to slice his jacket up good.
As the two watched, Sasuke started to notice that there were cuts appearing on their Jounin sensei and tried to figure out where they were coming from, not noticing that Karasuba was missing from the room as she was moving at high speeds that he couldn't see her at. The only reason that he could actually see Kakashi was because he was only moving barely when he needed to dodge.
Sadly Sakura hadn't noticed a single thing happening in the room.
"Alright Kara chan, you can stop now." Naruto said suddenly as he noticed the slightly satisfied smile on her face, causing said woman to suddenly reappear beside him with her katana in it's sheathe. "Good show Kara chan." He told her getting a small blush from her and a light nod as well.
"Thank you Naruto." Was all he got in return for a spoken reply?
"My first impression of you all is… I hate you." The man spoke getting a blank look from the eldest three in the room while a sweat drop from the other two. "Meet me on the roof in five." He spoke again before going up in a puff of smoke.
Seeing the other two rush to the roof, Naruto looked at Karasuba, who wasn't actually fighting down her blush this time and looking somewhat shy to him, as she glanced at his lips. Noting this, Naruto glanced at Yume, who was smiling at them and nodded to him as if giving her support.
"Kara chan, would you be reacting to me?" he asked her, causing said woman to go redder than before.
"Ah, Kara chan, I am so proud of you. Finally accepting someone." Yume said happily as she clapped her hands together. Not even noticing the light glare that was sent at her.
"I blame you for this you damn dream girl. If it wasn't for you spouting on and on about your dream for the sekirei I would be in this mess in the first place."
"Ah, Kara chan doesn't like me. Yume chan, now I'm sad." Naruto spoke, fake crying as he held Yume, who patted his back gently causing the other woman's eyes to widen slightly at that.
"No, Naruto… I just, um, I just wasn't prepared for this. I wanted to go on without an ashikabi is all." She said, shocked that Naruto took it the way he did, not knowing that it was a joke on his part, causing him to blink at that.
"O-key, I was joking right then Kara chan. I know you couldn't actually hate me for that." He told her getting her to deadpan at him. "would you like to be my sekirei?" he asked calmly to her getting a very slow nod as she stepped closer to him and moved her hands to his face.
"Please, accept me." She whispered before pressing her lips to his. As their lips touched, a set of large blade like black wings ejected out of her back, cutting into the desks behind her while she lightly moaned from the feel of them being released from her body.
"Welcome to my small family then Kara chan." He told her as she separated from his lips.
"Ashikabi sama." She spoke as she bowed her head to him.
Flicking her forehead causing her to rub it as she felt the sudden sting and look up at him, he spoke to her, "just call me what you did before. If you don't, I will have to…punish you." He spoke, whispering the last part into her ear causing her to shudder from the feel of his warm breathe on her ear.
"Naruto kun, no being mean to Karasuba when we need to get to your team." Yume said as she tapped his head with her fist causing him to chuckle at that as the three moved to the window and jumped out before jumping from the ground to the roof as soon as they touched.
"Since we are all here, how about we introduce ourselves." Kakashi said before he noticed Sakura with her hand up.
"Sensei, why don't you go first, to show us how." She suggested causing the four older members of the group to nearly groan and slap their foreheads at her idiocy.
"I am Kakashi, I like many things, dislike several things as well, my hobby… your too young to hear that, dream… never really thought about it." He spoke, "your turn." He said pointing at Naruto.
"Naruto, like pretty girls, training and relaxing, dislike banshees that break glass with a single scream, arrogant duck asses and bigots, hobby, training and relaxing with said pretty girls. My dream is to eventually settle down and have a family, maybe be Hokage as well one day." He said getting a nod from Kakashi and a scoff from Sakura.
"Yeah right baka. The only family you would have is one that falls from the sky." She spoke with a smirk before they heard a sound.
"UWAAAAAH~" a voice screamed out catching all of their attention before Naruto was slammed into the roof by something slamming into his chest.
"Owe, again, what is it with people and flying from nowhere to land on me this week?" Naruto asked with a grown as he started to sit up, the thing on his chest sliding down to his lap. "so, who are you then?" he asked casually, as if he wasn't hurt at all causing the three non sekirei members of the group to face fault at his casualness in this situation.
"Oh, I'm Musubi, who are you Nii chan?" a young girl, around the age of 8 asked him, looking like what a young Yume would he thought.
"Well, I am Naruto. Since you are Musubi does that mean you know Yume chan as well?" he asked her causing her to blink.
"Nee chan is here too? Can I see here?" the small girl asked excitedly to him.
"Hey Musubi chan. How are you doing these days?" said older female asked.
"Yume nee chan. Mu chan was worried ever since you suddenly left me before." Musubi said from her spot on Naruto.
"Sorry, but something pulled me here along with Kara chan." Yume told the younger girl.
"We should continue this later on at the house." Naruto said as he lifted Musubi up and settled her on his shoulder. "So Sakura, looks like I have a kid now. You were right, she did fall from the sky." Naruto spoke calmly causing the young girl on his shoulder to giggle at that.
"Should I call you Tou chan then?" she asked as she tilted her head at him.
"Oh, who would be Kaa chan then?"
"Yume nee of course silly. Kara chan is like an aunt." She told him.
"If you want to. I don't mind little Mu chan." He told the young girl causing her to cheer as she pumped her small arm into the air.
"Well, let's continue on with the introductions then." Kakashi said, feeling that if Naruto was fine with it he shouldn't care either.
"I am Sakura, I like… dislike Naruto baka and Ino pig, my hobby is… my dream is to…" she spoke causing a sigh of disgust to flow from the three other females, even Musubi, knowing from Yume and Kara chan that a female Must be proud in themselves and never act like what she just did.
"I am Sasuke Uchiha…" que glory bells from nowhere for no reason, "I dislike many things and like nothing, my hobby is training, and my dream is more of an ambition because it will become reality, I will kill that man and revive my clan." He spoke as if he was high and mighty.
"Meet at training ground 7 tomorrow at 7 in the morning. Also, if you don't want to throw up, don't eat." He told them before puffing away again.
"You two, come with me, we should get started on reviving my clan." Sasuke said haughtily at Yume and Karasuba, getting blank looks from them.
"No/ no thanks." Was the reply from Karasuba and Yume respectively. "We already have someone that is our world. He is much better than you are." Yume finished as she looked at Naruto who was messing with Musubi on his shoulder, causing her to giggle in laughter at what he was doing.
"Heh, that dobe can't do anything, you should be with a real man like me." The Uchiha said as he tried to grab Karasuba by the wrist.
"I would advise never touching either of them if I were you Uchiha." Naruto said as he got a look from the boy as if to say 'oh yeah, and what are you going to do?' "She may lop what touches her off, especially since she already has her katana drawn and held at the ready." Naruto finished eyeing his sekirei.
"You should take his advice." Yume commented lightly as she stood behind the black sekirei with a frown marring her features.
"Come Kara chan, Yume chan, let's leave before gay boy tries anything else." Naruto said.
"What's gay mean Tou chan?"
"Ah, it is someone that likes other boys, or girls depending on their gender. For example, if this boy here liked another romantically, that would be called gay. Since he turned down every girl that tried to be with him, he is gay, understand Mu chan?" he asked her getting a nod from her.
"Yep, understood Tou chan." She spoke to him with a smile.
"That's my girl." He told her as he wrapped an arm around the older women's waists before he jumped to another roof, taking them away from the gay Uchiha.
ZZ
Arriving back at the house, Naruto set Musubi down on the ground, before actually taking in what she was wearing. A light red knee length skirt with a pair of white stockings that went slightly past the hem of it, a pair of small brown boots on over them. Her torso was covered by a priestess shirt with wide open sleeves, and a pair of red combat gloves on her hands. (Child liker version of normal outfit.)
"So, Mu chan, are you like Yume chan and Kara chan?" he asked her as they sat down.
"Yep, I am number eighty eight, Musubi, fist type." The young girl cheerfully said to him.
"Oh, so you're a strong girl." He teased lightly.
"Muu~ not yet, when I get older I will be stronger that's a promise Tou chan." She said as she punched his leg to show him how strong she was, which considering how young she was, wasn't that strong, though she was Much stronger than most her age were, already being strong as a gennin in terms of pure strength.
"I have no doubt that you will Mu chan." He told her causing her to smile at him.
"So Naruto kun…" Yume started before a loud banging was presented on the door.
"yes." Naruto responded in a drawn out manner as he opened the door to show his landlord there.
"I knew I heard voices other than yours in there demon, get your stuff out by the end of the week, or else." The man yelled at him before storming off.
"Hmm, that was rather pleasant, don't you three think?" Naruto asked as he turned around to face them. "What's the matter?" he asked as he noted the sad looks on their faces.
"We got Naruto Kun kicked out. Were sorry." Yume said, looking about to cry from him being kicked out.
"Not really much to worry about. He was looking for a reason to kick me out for a while now anyway." he told them, though it didn't seem to be helping at all.
"How about this, Kara chan and Yume chan look for a new place for me to stay, and we'll call it even, deal?" Naruto presented to them.
"deal." The two immediately said as they glanced at each other, glad that they still had their MBI cards on them.
"See you in a bit Naruto kun." Yume said as the two walked out of the door.
"So Mu chan, what would you like to do for a bit?" Naruto asked her, getting a cheerful girl to run around the apartment happy to help him out with what he needed to do.
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Three hours later the two older women walked back into the apartment with a satisfied smile and grin on their faces.
"Naruto Kun, we found a place to go to, are you and Mu chan ready?" Yume asked him before she took note of the fact that everything in the apartment was gone.
"Yep, let's get going." He told her as he had Musubi on his shoulder once more as the older two lead the way.
Walking nearly twenty minutes from the apartment, the four stood, or sat in Musubi's case, in front of a large house. Well house wouldn't be the appropriate term in some cases, it was actually a large castle like estate, towering over many of the other houses that were near it.
"You really bought a mansion?" he asked simply as he looked at them.
"Do you not like it?"
"No, it's nice, I just don't see how you could afford it." He told them honestly.
"Oh, that's easy. We still had our MBI member ship cards. Unlimited balance." The two said in unison once more.
"Figures. Leave it to you two to have something crazy on you like that and only remember it now." He said as he shook his head, letting loose a small laugh.
"Mu chan has one as well." The girl on his shoulder spoke as she pulled said card out and shown it to him.
"Why would they give one to you Mu chan?"
"They give one to all the sekirei Tou chan." She told him getting a nod.
"That actually explains a lot actually. Well, since we own this place, let's go see what it's like." Naruto said as he walked up to the door.
ok i can tell that i made a bit of a mess up with not explaining about the cards. to me, since they have radios, microwaves and mostly everything else that doesnt cause a problem for the environment it is perfectly reasonable to have the cards there as well, from what i understand from the cards themselves is that they are fingerprint scan based and would work for nearly anything. to me, the cards would still work seeing as the money gotten from them is purely electronic, and they arent pulling money out so it wouldnt actually matter all that much if they used them.
a gary stu naruto, no actually this isnt like that, he has trust issues that are born to people only inside the village, those that actually show him kindness without even knowing him are unaffected by this. take for example the scene with haku, when haku met naruto he could have died, but being shown a small bit of kindness, he was instantly his friend. he is not godlike, since when they spar, naruto is still beaten rather easily by both karasuba and yume.
karasuba would listen because she doesnt like getting hit with the paper fan, something that many would actually fear i think. other than that she would not want to lose her hosts hospitality for being mean and not calming down even a bit when he asked her to. despite how she acts, she is still a sekirei and they thrive for the love and acceptance of their ashikabi, who she secretly admitted was naruto and only to herself, while still acting in denial of the fact.
i was fairly certain i stated he was either 15 or 16, if not thats my fault and the way he picked them us was, if you mean literal he is stronger than most others his age, and they are pretty light in my opinion, if you mean as in metaphorical, he was extremely nice to them both, and there are some cases where he is only twelve and still gets with some of the older ones. in my stories i try to make them a bit more believable and him older. if you take into account how minato got all of his sekirei save matsu, it was because he was overbearingly kind to them and they reacted based on that fact alone.
too much chakra and too little control is how he failed on an illusion clone, something that he will never be good at to me. it uses so little chakra that when he uses it its like a damn is being opened and floods the clone, making it semi solid and dead looking since it cant handle that much chakra. even though he is smarter than most give him credit, he still knows nothing about the chakra control exercises save for the leaf one that they teach in the academy to unlock and harness chakra.
i am actually quiet surprised that there has been no one to take note of how i compared the two before in the first chapter. no naruto and the world mbi are on are not the same. if anything, the naruto world is the same as the sekirei home world, if you take into account that the two races have cores that give energy, they either pass out or die when it is all used, they have special powers. see what i mean, it's as if the two worlds are the exact same with only one power being set for each sekirei being the only real difference.
when he was still taking the academy, i mentioned that he acted the fool, basically fooling everyone into thinking that he was an idiot, so while that was going on, he acted the exact same as the original naruto did, playing as if he was trying to get a date from sakura, who is too set in her mind that he will always be there for her no matter what. i am partially aware that i do make things like him being godlike without reason, but i am actually trying to tone that down, in this he is not godlike per-say, more along the terms of being stronger than most think he is. he is still beaten by those that are stronger than him and knows it. naruto isnt actually stuck up really, just doesnt like people from the village all that much. surprised that noone mentioned the refference to miya yet though.
with sasuke, i tend to either make him a prick or non caring about naruto in the way of things, i will take your request into consideration and try to make him nicer, but it may be hard for me to do with how i view him.
i have read thunder maidens and liked it until the author suddenly changed his entire veiw on the story, as well as showing that there are elements that contradict his original idea, it is a good story and i wont deny that, but i didnt see why he switched it up like that without much thought being put into it, or at least thats what it seemed to me anyway. i wont actually say that its bad, but at that point i just found it unreasonable really.