Ok, here's the 2nd chapter, thanx for the reviews and thanx to Lisa for
going over this for me.
I personally don't think this as good a chapter as the last, but I found it a little tricky.
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2 Chapter 2
"Hi Serena. Did you miss me?"
A smile arose upon her face.
"Darien!"
She gave him a hug and a quick peck on the cheek.
"How are you? How was Australia? What did you get up to?"
"I'm great, Australia was great and I'll tell you about it later. How are you?" He replied, obviously happy to see her again.
"I'm good. I can't believe it, I haven't seen you for three years!"
"I know! Your parents said that you had gone out for the week, so when I saw you here, I thought it would be a nice surprise to sneak up on you-"
"And scare me!" she interrupted, "You know, look great!" Was what she said but her mind was carrying on. 'And really gorgeous! His sleek black hair looks really healthy and his eyes; his big dark blue eyes are sparkling with life!' But there was something that Serena didn't notice.
Darien's heart was pounding and he couldn't take his eyes off of her. 'She still has her natural beauty, even more maybe! Her hair seems to have a life of its own sometimes and her smile; her smile just takes my breath away and I can get lost in those sky blue eyes, I feel as though I'm flying through her mind. Wow! It's been four years since my heart beated so fast!' When he came back to reality he replied, "so do you!"
Serena smiled and blushed, she felt really flattered by him, she looked aside so she could stop the blushing and the sunlight caught her face so Darien could see her with more colour. 'She looks so cute when she blushes. Hey, her eyes are red, could she have been crying? Her hairs not as neat as she normally does it either, but then she may have changed a little over three years. Though she hasn't changed her meatball style hair, and never will for that matter! Still, something must be up, she was little jumpy when I put my hand on her shoulder.'
"Are you ok? You look as though you've been crying."
'He's so caring and sweet!' she thought. 'And he makes my heart beat so much! The last time it was like this was at the springball, but that was years ago!'
"Yeah I'm fine…I…er…think I have an infection in my eye. I'm going to have it looked at tomorrow." She replied, feeling guilty that she did tell him the truth, but then again she didn't want anyone to know.
"Oh right…" he exclaimed, feeling embarrassed that he asked. "Do you want to come and have lunch with me?" he asked hoping he could spend more time with her.
A sudden realisation entered Serena's mind, she hadn't eaten in hours and she didn't know what the time was as she left her watch at-
"Yeah, I'd love to. What's the time?" she replied, trying to get that thought out of her head.
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I know it's short, the next chapter is up though to compensate.
In the mean time you can review the story and also help me with it too.
I want to know what name you think I should call the boyfriend and which inner you would prefer to see in the story.
I personally don't think this as good a chapter as the last, but I found it a little tricky.
1
2 Chapter 2
"Hi Serena. Did you miss me?"
A smile arose upon her face.
"Darien!"
She gave him a hug and a quick peck on the cheek.
"How are you? How was Australia? What did you get up to?"
"I'm great, Australia was great and I'll tell you about it later. How are you?" He replied, obviously happy to see her again.
"I'm good. I can't believe it, I haven't seen you for three years!"
"I know! Your parents said that you had gone out for the week, so when I saw you here, I thought it would be a nice surprise to sneak up on you-"
"And scare me!" she interrupted, "You know, look great!" Was what she said but her mind was carrying on. 'And really gorgeous! His sleek black hair looks really healthy and his eyes; his big dark blue eyes are sparkling with life!' But there was something that Serena didn't notice.
Darien's heart was pounding and he couldn't take his eyes off of her. 'She still has her natural beauty, even more maybe! Her hair seems to have a life of its own sometimes and her smile; her smile just takes my breath away and I can get lost in those sky blue eyes, I feel as though I'm flying through her mind. Wow! It's been four years since my heart beated so fast!' When he came back to reality he replied, "so do you!"
Serena smiled and blushed, she felt really flattered by him, she looked aside so she could stop the blushing and the sunlight caught her face so Darien could see her with more colour. 'She looks so cute when she blushes. Hey, her eyes are red, could she have been crying? Her hairs not as neat as she normally does it either, but then she may have changed a little over three years. Though she hasn't changed her meatball style hair, and never will for that matter! Still, something must be up, she was little jumpy when I put my hand on her shoulder.'
"Are you ok? You look as though you've been crying."
'He's so caring and sweet!' she thought. 'And he makes my heart beat so much! The last time it was like this was at the springball, but that was years ago!'
"Yeah I'm fine…I…er…think I have an infection in my eye. I'm going to have it looked at tomorrow." She replied, feeling guilty that she did tell him the truth, but then again she didn't want anyone to know.
"Oh right…" he exclaimed, feeling embarrassed that he asked. "Do you want to come and have lunch with me?" he asked hoping he could spend more time with her.
A sudden realisation entered Serena's mind, she hadn't eaten in hours and she didn't know what the time was as she left her watch at-
"Yeah, I'd love to. What's the time?" she replied, trying to get that thought out of her head.
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I know it's short, the next chapter is up though to compensate.
In the mean time you can review the story and also help me with it too.
I want to know what name you think I should call the boyfriend and which inner you would prefer to see in the story.