Here's chapter 2! This ones a bit longer than the other one, but I'm never satisfied with the length. Also, apparently I can't think of names, and when I do (eventually) they are not very original. Oh well. Please tell me ideas for characters and/or names! That would be useful!
A girl sat at the edge of the derelict building on her knees and head in her hands. She was shaking uncontrollably, whispering an unknown name of some sorts. Few people ran over to comfort her, but it seemed like she was beyond the stage of being comforted. The Dauntless leader stood at the edge of the opening looking fed up- as if it happened all the time. Another scream echoed around the surroundings, but it sounded more distant than it would be if it was someone nearby. I find myself walking towards the edge with curiosity, and I notice blood splattered on the cracked paving below. Also, there is a factionless man hauling a body of into the distance. I piece together what had happened, with the extra of muffled, quiet sobs. I should feel more sympathetic towards the small girl; but no feelings come towards me. Instead, I go up to her, kneel down, and say "We have to jump off into the opening to get into Dauntless-"
"I can't" She interrupts. "Elaine made me feel safe, that I was doing the right thing, and now she's gone." A wave of tears overcomes her. "Then do it for Elaine. Be brave to do what she doesn't have the chance to do." I say in desperation. Eventually, she nods, and wipes the tears off her face with her sleeve. "Well done." A boy says behind me. "I would of never of been able to do that myself. My name's Josh."
"Kathy" I reply. The abnegation slacks he was wearing indicates that he transferred. Apparently, he can be selfless, but not enough. We come to the opening. I stand on the edge, which is just a bit higher than the rest of the roof. And then I jump.
The falling sensation overcomes me. I plunge into the darkness, and then I land in a tangle of wires. It seems as if I have become a part of the tangle. I giggle, because the idea is stupid. And when my senses come back, I realise I'm on a net. Someone helps me off, and that is when I know I felt weightless. Or liquid. I don't think it matters. Well...
"Welcome to Dauntless" was what I think he was meant to say, but sounds of screams filled the silence up and he trotted off to help the girl. "That reminds me" I think to myself "I never introduced myself to her, and well that's stupid, because I was helping her." Wow. I am so stupid. The guy mentions that we had to go straight forwards along the path. When we do I take the opportunity to talk to her. "My name's Kathy," I mention. "Mine's Sophie," She begins "You seem so brave for someone who transferred from Amity."
"Yeah well, I was never that carefree. Sometimes being in Amity drove me to madness."
"I could say the same for Erudite."
"But the libraries! All the books you could ever read!" I protest, but I would of never convinced Sophie.
"What about books?" Josh caught up with us, panting, showing us that he just ran. "Oh, Kathy here was just telling me about the amount of books in Erudite is a good enough reason to stay there." Sarcasm reeked through Sophie's voice.
"Isn't it?"
"No of course not! They expect so much of you, expects you to be perfect and know everything, and they pressure you to be better than everyone else! Why would I stay?"
"Ok, so you've got a point. I officially state that I am no good in arguments." I say. Josh comes back saying "I guess you should be glad that you're not in Candor then."
"Hey!"
We all fall about in pieces with laughter, until we get to the end of the pathway. We stand in awe.
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