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I must say, some of you (my friends offline and online c:) commented a lot on the lack of character background and thought and I totally agree. I really should've put more description on my OCs and reflection in the first chapter, but I was busy and a little too excited. I couldn't wait to post the story I guess and I was too exhausted to do some revising (Desiree you have a lazy ass).
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Chapter 2: Awkward Encounters
Lena: 15
Looking around, I was still behind a trashcan in front of the roller coaster, but no one was there. I did notice a glass lining behind the roller coaster, so I guess I'm stuck here. I started walking back to the entrance, but a guy was there. He didn't look too bad. He was a brunette wearing a sweater vest. The problem was, he was very, very tall. As soon as I realized this, I hid behind one of the poles supporting the coaster tracks. I started backing up, thinking that he wouldn't notice. My heart was pounding in my chest, and I knocked over a trashcan (I swear those things are out to get me).
He noticed!
I ran back behind the pole. I couldn't hide any longer. He saw me! I started shaking and panting. Please, don't come this way. Please! I sunk down leaning against the wall and holding my hat. Images of demons with glowing eyes flood my mind. Their grim smiles surround my brain.
"Hi there," one says.
I can do this. Just don't look up at him or say anything. I'll be fine.
I started to calm down and stand up. I kept my head down so I wouldn't look at his face. I clasped my hands together, not knowing what would happen next. I started to walk away, hoping that he wouldn't follow me. Unfortunately, he did.
Bryce: 16
"Wait!" I called out. The small girl froze, and I caught up to her. She seemed a little startled but I was sure she was just nervous. "My name's Bryce."
No response.
The silence was awkwardly long and I couldn't find anything to talk about with her. I just stood there, laughing awkwardly, but I think that scared her a lot because she wouldn't even look up at me. Now that I think about it, I never saw her face. I put my hand on her head, grabbing on to the hat. The next thing I knew, I was screaming on the ground, holding a certain sensitive area while she stared blankly at me, gripping her hat. Luckily, she was kind enough to help me up, but still, nothing came out of her mouth.
"I see you like your personal space," I said, awkwardly.
No response.
"How come you're not talking?" I asked. She just looked down and twiddled her fingers. How can I get her to talk? I sighed. It was not going to be easy. I looked down, her hat blocking her face. Then, I heard a faint growl. The girl clutched her stomach. I smiled. "You must be hungry." She nodded, but still didn't look up. "Let's go to the café to get something to eat."
Thane: 21
Wasn't this place flooded just a second ago? I look up and there was glass above me. I decided to go explore the perimeter of the park to see if there was any way out of here. I passed by three exits, or so-called "exits", that were blocked by God's glass or something. I was sick of this. I sat down by the arcade and was shocked to see a girl come through the doors. She looks around, just as curious as I was.
She looked a little short and had dirty blonde hair. Her bangs were swept to the side and she had her hair in a ponytail. She had her sunglasses on top of her head and wore a blue halter sundress with a large flower on her side that was a darker shade, like the one I saw at the store once (Emily always drags me into dress shopping for her dates -.-) and white flip-flops.
I stood up and walked up to her.
"Thank God I'm not alone!" I said. She turned to me and sighed in relief.
"Me too," she said. "I'm Anna." She held out her hand.
"Thane." I shook her hand.
"So where were you when everyone disappeared, Thane?"
"I work here," I started. "My shift was about to end and I everyone disappeared when I was in the locker room." She nodded. "I'm guessing you were in the arcade."
"Just walked in, actually."
"Oh." We stood there for a while. Things were already getting awkward. "I was walking around a little bit, and it looks like that we're stuck here for a while."
"What?" She was getting a little scared. "Why?"
"All of the exits that I've seen are all blocked by glass."
"Can't you just break it?"
"I tried. It won't budge."
She sighed. "Let's look around."
"Okay," I said. "Should we look around together or split up?"
"Split up," she decided. "That way we can cover more of the area."
"Sounds good," I agreed. "Then, we meet up at the café?"
"Great," said Anna, happily.
"I'll go down here," I said. "You try to see if there's an exit by the roller coaster and the Ferris Wheel."
"Roger!" she said, saluting to me. Anna ran off past me, waving.
I walked off past the entrance, which was, of course, blocked by glass, and went towards the pool. A guy was sitting there, clenching his fists. Something was definitely on his mind. I walked up to him.
"Yo," I greeted. He just glared at me. Must not be the talkative type. "Got something on your mind?" He scoffed and stood up.
"I don't need your help." The guy started walking away.
"You know you're not alone here, right?" He glared at me again.
"You know I want to be alone, right?" I start following him to the entrance. He got pissed, as expected. He started pacing back and forth, scratching the back of his head.
"Did you find any other exit?" He asked.
"So now you want my help?"
"Dude," he sneered.
"All of the ones I saw were blocked," I told him. "Just like this one."
"Did you look around the whole park?"
"No, but I met this girl, Anna, who's checking it out."
He started walking off again. I just gave up on him, walking back to the pool. We will spend a lot of time together, huh?
Anna: 13
There was no free exit behind the gift shop or the Ferris Wheel. The roller coaster had nothing either, so I went to the Merry-go-Round to find some underground exit.
I saw a girl sitting on the edge of the Merry-go-Round. She was just staring at her hand. She had on a black shirt with a white jean jacket over it (must've been expensive and new considering how new it looked). She must've liked black and white a lot because that's all she wore other than a red ribbon she wore to keep her hair in that "half up, half down" style. I wish I was as tan as she was. She was perfectly golden. It looked like this was a big day for her. I sat next to her and decided to talk to her. I'm sure Thane wouldn't mind me taking a little break.
"Hi," I greeted. "I'm Anna and you are?"
"Jennifer," said the girl. "Nice to meet you Anna."
"You look nice today," I said.
"Thanks," said Jennifer. "You do too. What were you doing here before everyone disappeared?"
"I am an intern for the local newspaper, Cigam Weekly," I explained. "They're giving me this huge opportunity to show I have what it takes to be a part of the journalist team by making a report of the grand opening of Pactheland."
"That's big," said Jennifer.
"It is," I responded. "What about you?" She shook her head.
"It's stupid," she told me.
"It can't be that stupid," said Anna. I grabbed her by the shoulders and started shaking her. "Tell me! I won't tell anyone if you don't want me to." Jennifer sighed. She didn't move for a while. She was probably thinking about telling me.
"I was stood up," said Jennifer.
"Okay," I said, confused. "It's just one guy. More will come around."
"It's not the guy," said Jennifer. She started messing with her hair and got a little mad. "I'll probably tell you later, okay?"
I didn't want to make her even more upset, so I gave her a little hug and headed for the café.
Evelyn: 10
The first thing I noticed was the huge glass wall blocking the entrance. I bet all of the exits were like this. I sighed and checked my phone.
10
What does this mean? What's going on? All of these questions flooded my mind as I stared at the mysterious number. That number blew my mind! I was about to throw my phone on the ground just to show how frustrated I was.
"Huh. Your number's much lower than mine."
I look up, and there was a guy standing a bit too close to my face. I guess my reflexes told me to scream, wave my arms around like an idiot, and fall on my butt because that's exactly what I did. I'm such a clumsy fool. The guy helped me up.
"Chill," he said. "I'm Thane." So 'Thane' here decides to invade my personal space and tells me to chill, perfect.
"I'm Evelyn," I greeted. "So you're stuck here too, huh?"
"Pretty much."
"How long have you been stuck here?"
"I have no clue," said Thane. "I think maybe for a couple hours."
"Really?" I asked, although it was stupid to ask now that I think about it. "I just got here, where ever 'here' is."
"That's a little weird."
"I spent the whole day here with my friends and we were just about to leave," I explained. "But I guess I can't now. I knew it was a bad idea to come on opening day."
"Same here," said Thane. "I was working at the arcade. My shift just ended and right when I was about to leave, poof, everyone was gone." The silence afterwards was a little awkward. "It's nice to be actually talking to someone now." I nodded in agreement. "I met this girl. She and I are were just looking around the park for exits, and so far, everything's blocked." I sighed.
"We really are stuck here."
"Yeah," said Thane. "I did run into this other guy too, but he didn't want anything to do with me. He wouldn't listen to me about the glass. When he walked away, I got a peek at the number on his phone, which was 14, but yours is 12. I wonder why mine is higher, and what the hell do these numbers represent—days, hours, some sort of achievements? I guess we'll have to figure it out." I nodded. Boy, this guy talks a lot—not that it's a bad thing! "Are you tired?"
"Kind of," I responded. "Why?"
"You can go rest up at the café. I have to go check on a few things. I'll meet up with you later."
"How about I go with you?"
"Why are you scared of being alone?" I noticed a little smirk form on his lip.
"No!" I shouted. "But…" He sighed.
"This is going to be a little awkward."
"Why is that?"
"I…uh…" His face was starting to turn red. "I was actually going to use the restroom." Now I was the one turning red.
"O-oh," I managed to spit out.
"Well," said Thane, who was still as red as a tomato. "Now you made me say it."
"Sorry…"
"It might be a while so-" I just had to stop him there.
"Okay! Alright! I got it! I'll just go. Just please stop talking. You told me enough!"
"See you later," said Thane, walking away. I guess I'm headed for the café.
Jennifer: 11
I didn't move even after Anna left. I just sat there by the Merry-go-Round still trying to figure out what made me do the best thing I ever done, bitch-slap Shane. I laugh every time I think about it. Damn bastard deserved it. I sighed. I heard a groan from the other side of the Merry-go-Round. I looked up but I didn't see anyone. I got up and walked around the ride and saw a guy lying on the ground. His hands were covering his face so he couldn't see me.
"Get up," I told him. He moved his hands and looked up at me, but he didn't move. I sighed. "I know it's opening day and all, but you still don't know what has been on that ground." He just gave me the "Does it look like I care?" look. I tried everything I could to make him stand up to no avail. Instead, I just laid down next to him.
"What are you doing?" he asked. I shrugged.
"'If you can't fight them, join them' my mom always said." His stare was locked for a while, but then he returned to looking up.
"You're weird," he told me.
"Good," I told him. He stood up.
"Alright, you win." He offered me a hand. I grabbed his hand and smiled. He rolled his eyes and smiled too. "I'm Spencer."
"Jennifer."
"You're a strange person, Jennifer."
"Oh, I know," I told him. "You're boring." I started to make a run for it.
"Hey!" Spencer started chasing me around the bottom half of the park. We jumped over trashcans and benches until I saw another guy and hid behind a pole. Spencer caught up to me. Panting, he said, "I got you!" I was too busy spying on this guy to notice that Spencer's expression completely changed. The guy saw us and headed for us. "God damn it! Not him again." I looked at him with a look that asked "Do you know him?" "I saw him when I first got here. He wouldn't stop bugging me."
"Still don't need my help?" asked the guy.
"No," said Spencer. "Now go away."
"Who's this?" asked the guy, obviously referring to me.
"I'm Jennifer," I greeted. "Nice to meet you."
"I'm Thane."
"Come on, Jen," said Spencer, pulling my arm.
"Wait," I told Spencer. I turned my attention to Thane. "Are you going to the café?"
"Jennifer!" said Spencer, in shock.
"What? I'm kind of hungry, and if he's going the same way, we should go together right?" Spencer just pouted.
"Actually, I was just heading over there," said Thane. I could feel the glare I was getting from Spencer who groaned.
"Agh! Let's just go," said Spencer, who was already walking. Thane and I just followed him.
Anna: 13
I met three other people in the café, Bryce, Lena, and Evelyn. Bryce was super tall and nice—only flaw: Sweater vest (TAKE THAT DAMN THING OFF!), Evelyn is like a lot of my friends, calm but will freak out over little things… sometimes, and Lena is quiet and ostracized Bryce for some reason.
"How can you be so calm in a situation like this?" asked Evelyn. Bryce chuckled.
"Actually I'm freaking out like a baby on the inside." I slapped my forehead.
"That's attractive."
"That's okay," said Bryce. "It feels good to have your company."
"Yeah," said Evelyn. "We can make it through together." I smiled.
"I like you guys," I told them. "You're so optimistic."
"Oh, don't get me wrong," said Evelyn. "I actually think we're all going to die here."
"That's the spirit!" I exclaimed, sarcastically. Then, I heard a voice in the distance.
"Leave me alone!" A guy stormed inside holding Jennifer followed by Thane.
"Just listen to me!" shouted Thane.
"No!" shouted the guy. "I don't need your damn help!"
"Oh, hey Evelyn, Anna," greeted Thane, completely ignoring the raging bull.
"What's going on?" asked Evelyn.
"I'm chasing a nincompoop with a hostage."
"I think we should all just calm down," said Jennifer, who's probably losing circulation in her hand considering the grip the guy had on her wrist.
"Who's the nincompoop?!" Thane ignored the raging bull, again.
"Who's the sweater vest?"
"This guy?" I pointed at Bryce. Thane nodded. "Yeah, this is Bryce. Who's this guy?"
"I don't know," said Thane. "Now that I think about it, I never got your name."
"Who are you people?!" asked the raging bull.
"I suggest we do a name listing!" said Bryce. "GO!"
"Thane."
"Evelyn."
"Anna."
"Spencer."
"Jennifer."
"… Lena."
"Bob!"
"Wait!" Evelyn and I exclaimed. "That's not your name!"
"I had to," said Bryce.
"Anyway," said Thane. "I'm guessing everyone here got that creepy text, and our phones show a weird number instead of the time now."
"Thane's number is 21, Lena's is 15, Anna's is 13, Spencer's is 14, Jennifer's is 11, Evelyn's is 10 and mine is 16," said Bryce.
"Why is my number the highest?" asked Thane.
"I don't get why mine is the lowest," said Evelyn.
"Why am I tired?" asked Spencer. Sometimes I want to slap him. "It's not even that late."
"I actually feel pretty tired too," said Evelyn.
"Oh come on!" complained Thane. "I worked the whole day and I still have tons of energy."
"Hold on a second," said Spencer. He goes to plug in his phone to the wall.
"I feel fine," said Bryce.
"I guess it was a little strange," said Jennifer. "Before all this, I was exhausted. But now I feel really energized."
"I think I notice something," said Spencer. "Our numbers, they add up to 100."
"You're right," said Thane. "But does that mean anything?"
"Well, yeah," said Spencer. "It has to!"
"You can't just assume something like that," said Thane.
"I don't know," said Jennifer. "Maybe he's on to something."
"Yeah, Thane," said Spencer. "I don't care what you think!"
"Let's just go find a place we can all rest for the night." said Bryce. "We can think more about this tomorrow."
"Are you kidding?" asked Spencer. "It's still daylight."
"Didn't you just say you were tired?" I asked, obviously annoyed.
"Oh yeah," said Spencer. Good job! You noticed your mistake you dumbass. "I guess I did… Oh!"
"Really?" asked Thane. "Did you just—nevermind."
"Shut up!" said Spencer. "That's just too freaky!"
"What?" asked Evelyn.
"Can I see your phone, Evelyn?"
"Uh… sure I guess." Evelyn handed Spencer her phone and he plugged it in.
"Wait for it," said Spencer. "Do you feel any different, Evelyn?"
"What are you-?" Evelyn stared at Spencer. "That's so weird! I don't feel tired anymore."
"I don't know what's going on," said Thane. "But I guess we all have to be careful with our phones."
"No shit," said Spencer.
"Good thing I brought my charger," I said, laughing nervously.
"I'm out of luck," said Bryce.
"They sell them at the cinema," said Thane.
"Huh, really?" asked Bryce.
"Don't get too happy," said Thane. "I tried to steal some popcorn from there, but the doors were locked until I put change on the counter."
"The hell is up with this place?" asked Spencer. "Let's just focus on finding a way out of here, and just be sure your number doesn't reach zero."
"Thanks for the tip, Captain Obvious," I mumbled. Spencer gave me a small glare, so I think he heard me.
Good.
WOO!
'TIS THE END OF CHAPTER 2. (no shit)
I still feel like I could do better. *sigh* I'm such a disappointment. (yes you are.)
I'm open to critizism and suggestions (two different things don't get them mixed up ohmybuhjeebus)
Thanks for reading!
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