Anyone want to beta this for me? I'd like someone to help flesh out the bits in between my dialogue. I'm an ideas and details person and need someone to help me piece them together into a vision! Especially if you can flesh out the locale etc. Preferably a female perspective to help me write the Jysella side of the story!

"I'm 21 now Valin. I think I can make my own decisions, thank you very much", she replied with a huff.

"But not when it comes to a Jedi Master with a dark past! Who knows what he is doing to get you so worked up over him!", Valin countered, fiddling around with his lightsaber as he spoke.

"I mean, did you use Jedi mind tricks on Maya to fall in love with you?", Jysella countered with more than a hint of annoyance.

"Of course not!", Valin quickly retorted, his hands wrapping around the hilt of his weapon. Noticing this, he forced himself to calm down before rejoining the conversation. "But then again, I'm not an all powerful Jedi Master who can manipulate the dark side and shield himself from everyone including Grand Master Skywalker!"

"Grand Master Skywalker wants everyone to follow in his own personal vision because he is afraid we will make the wrong choices if left alone. But we're not children. And if we don't get given trust and responsibility, we will never learn to make the right decisions. And the wrong ones too", Jysella conceded to her older sibling. "Which is just my point exactly", she continued hurriedly when she noticed Valin preparing to speak up again. "He asked Jacen and all of us to go out and find our own versions of the Vision, the Force and listen to it rather than him, but still he wants to control us all. Everyone can see Jacen is the right person to take over when the time is right because he is the only one who can see the whole picture. And we need someone like that to lead us on to a vision of the Force that is not just black and white, light and dark."

Valin considered his sister's words carefully. He'd heard these arguments before, from others too. But it wasn't the words that struck him. Not, it was the passion and the conviction in her voice.

"So it's his power you seek then? You know it's not healthy to fall in love with your idol!", Valin countered, going for the kill.

But his sister was having none of it. "Firstly, you idiot!", she exclaimed loudly, hitting his forehead with her fingers. "He is not my idol. I just happen to have faith in his vision, his ideals and his principles."

"Yeah, definitely not your idol", Valin responded with thinly veiled sarcasm.

He was not surprised in the least when this was followed up by a rather painful punch on his arm.

"And two, I'm not after power but self development. As is Jedi Master Solo! His real interest is in healing and teaching. Fighting is just something he feels compelled to do at times", Jysella said, defending her love interest vehemently. "Just because he happens to be a true polymath due to his openness to the Force, and the fact he has learnt from so many different Masters and Force users, doesn't make him a bad person. In fact, it's his slide into the depths of the darkside which he has come back from that has made him even stronger and human!"

Again, the words were not news to Valin but to have them thrown at him like that, from his own sister, made him reconsider his own views, which truth be told, were probably more a byproduct of the opinions of others than his own.

"Perhaps, but you know they said the same things about Master Durron too!", Valin finally replied, a little more demurely than before.

"And Grand Master Skywalker too, back in his day!", Jysella quickly added, knowing she had won this argument. "It's not like even the greatest haven't fallen before."