Saturday, February 4, 2017
Hey guys, this is my first fanfic so I would love to get reviews to know how to make it better.
Also, shout out to Whisperblaze luvs Dramione. Reading her story "The Aspens Screech" inspired me to start this story. Go check it out.
Here's the first chapter!
Disclaimer: I do not own the warrior cats series. I do, however, own the characters in Stars Ascending!
"Thank you," said the tawny queen.
"Your welcome, Poppystep."
Doveflight watched as her tail disappeared out of the den. Cedarstar padded softly through the ferns into the den.
"Do you need any help?" he asked.
She sighed, and flicked a tired ear at him, signalling him to wait. As she shuffled through all of her herbs, she thought of the recent battle. Windclan had been trying to get more land, and all of the leaf-fall scents had masked their smell, so the ambush had taken them completely off guard. After healing all of the injured warriors, her stocks of herbs and berries were low. She walked back to where the Thunderclan leader patiently sat.
"I need some juniper berries and willow bark," she said, showing him an example of each, "You'll find the berries close to the Riverclan and Windclan borders, and the bark is self explanatory."
With a nod, the tom was gone.
As Cedarstar silently stalked through the forest, he kept his mouth open to make it easier to scent even the faintest of smells. Suddenly a metallic smell took over his senses, and he froze to try and figure out where it was coming from. Out of the corner of his eye he thought he saw something silver. He turned towards it, and a gasp left his muzzle.
Doveflight sat at the entrance to her den, gazing up at the star studded sky. A shooting star passed, and her fur bristled. All went black, and a voice whispered in her ear,
When the sun is eclipsed,
darkness will rise.
The spirit of the breeze
will call the storm,
and only the moon and star's ascent
will bring back the light.
As her vision faded back to normal, Cedarstar came rushing through the brambles, carrying a dripping, silver bundle.. Doveflight spun and ran into her den to get some herbs, Cedarstar right on her tail. As she returned to where the brown tom waited, her jaws loaded with herbs, she herd a small whimper. The lump, now surrounded by a small pool of red, shifted in its unconscious state, then resumed sleeping. It was a kit, and a young one at that. The she-kit was light silver in color, with an iridescent sheen to her pelt. Doveflight held back a growl when she saw the kits sides, but began working.
"See if you can get me a leaf or two to wrap her sides and stop the bleeding," mewed Doveflight.
"I'll try." Cedarstar left swiftly.
"Your really clawed up little kit," she murmured after he had left She started applying willow bark and cobwebs to the kit's sides and the one slice running down her neck. Cedarstar came in as she finished with a large leaf in his jaws.
"Here, I found this." he said to her.
"Help me wrap her." Doveflight told him after a second. Cedarstar gently lifted the kit up, while the medicine cat wrapped her underside, keeping clear of the small legs that dangled weakly. When they finished, they laid the kit down on the ground.
"She'll need someone to take care of her. Hardly looks a quarter moon old," mewed Doveflight.
"I can ask Poppystep to care for her," the leader told the exhausted white she-cat. "You get some rest. However, I think we should tell someone about-"
"Absolutely not," Doveflight interrupted. "She would be made a target almost immediately in any given situation."
"Alright, then I'll take her to Poppystep." The large tom lifted the kit, then padded quietly out of the den. Her scent, now that she was cleaned of blood, filled his muzzle, and he stiffened briefly. Forcing himself to keep walking, he crossed the clearing and entered the nursery. He set the kit down and licked Poppystep's head to wake her. A black and grey tabby tom was nestled into her side, next to an orange tom with white paws, both asleep.
"Poppystep, I found this kit injured, and she needs milk," Cedarstar quietly mewed.
"It's alright, just lay her down next to me," she responded with a yawn.
"Be careful of her ribs, a few are broken," the leader said as he laid her down next to the drowsy queen. She curled her tail around the three kits, and fell asleep again. The brown tom went to his den, and after a while he too fell asleep, his mind filled with plans for the next day.
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Alright, that's the end of the first chapter of Stars Ascending!
I have been wanting to write this story for so long, ever since it popped into my head about a month ago. Now, I can't promise regular updates, as I am a student and a very busy athlete, but I will update whenever I can! I'm shooting for a length of about 40-50 chapters so be prepared! I've already got it mapped out to chapter 21! I have a few questions for you guys to answer below, so please review .
Q1) What would you be looking for in a story like this?
Q2) Do you have any questions for me? (Sorry but I'm not reveling the plot line. I want to keep it mysterious. ;) )