Alternate chapter #2
Honestly, I don't want to keep rewriting the beginning where she wakes up and stuff...so i'll be copying and pasting it in and adding where I want to
change things. I'll probably have one or two more after this, I have an idea but I feel like it goes too far, and I don't want to write it. Should I? I don't
know. I'll think about it. Ok, here's the next one. Enjoy!
I wake up way before I would like to. My eyes shoot open, my limbs working by themselves. I look around, seeing my friends acting similarly. I get ready, my mind still
waking up since it feels very early and I went to bed late last night. I try to get myself to go back to bed, starting to panic a little. I finally give up, letting myself see
where I was going to go. I get into a line of people, shuffling slowly, one foot in front of the other. Finally, I wake up fully, just as I pick up a very heavy gun. I look
around frantically, wondering if anyone else was aware of what we were doing. I move outside, heading into the train, helping people in as well. After a while of
standing, not sure how long since I feel nothing, we finally get off. My stomach drops as I realize we're in Abnegation. I realize that mine is slowly being raised, and that
i'm pointing it at a leaders head. Before I have time to react, I shoot him in the head, his lifeless body crumbling to the floor. Then, i'm off to someone else. If I could
cry I would, but all I can do it kill. I kill what seems like hundreds, but is probably only five, which is still to many. Story starting here. I stare in horror at my parents
who are looking around scared and confused. I noticing that they recognize me, and at first they seem relieved, then their faces register horror as they see my lifeless
eyes and gun. On the inside i'm sobbing, but on the outside i'm sure i'm expressionless. I roughly grab my father, who is bloody probably because he's been beaten.
Someone who looks like Eric makes sure they don't try to escape, holding them captive.
"Beatrice, what are you doing?" I want to tell him i'm sorry, that I love him, but I don't get a chance. I throw him on his knees and fire. I watch as his body crumbles to
the ground before I hear my mother scream. I turn to her, and my heart breaks as she tries to get me to stop.
"Beatrice, please. Don't do this. I'm your mother, I love you. I forgive you." That last part gets me, and it makes my whole body ache. She forgives me, because she
knows I can't fight this. That's all she says before I throw her to her knees and fire, but I don't even register it. All I feel at his point is nothing. I'm pretty sure I've been
shot a few times, but I don't even care. I feel numb. I killed my parents, i'm a monster. Eventually, whatever was causing me to kill is lifted and my injuries come to
me. I've been shot three times, and the last thing I think about is my parents before I crumble to the floor, seeing blackness.
A/N
Ok, that was dark. I'm sorry, I just like these ideas even though they're Incredibly dark and depressing. If I do decide to write a final one, it's going to
be the darkest. I really don't want to write it, but I probably will...we'll see. Ok, bye :'(
-Grace