Chapter to the rose of a Heroin
ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry.
StarKit wock (A skill only known to Mary-Sues: Wocking up) up and sunlit was in the branches. She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom wouldn't let her sleep not today. (Her mom's a stick of butter? Or is she just a really fat cat? wTF)
"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. (Her eyes have shins in them. . . ?) "Today is important today." (This grammar. . .)
"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was. ("Rememembered" is an awesome way to say that she's stupid.)
"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice! (Squelling must be the equivalent to a daily workout if she does it "excercisedly". . .)
She flicked outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick.
"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said.
StarKit glared. She didn't lake beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different!
"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down. (Ooookay. . . Who's the poor cat missing a leg?)
"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you." (*Searches up apentice on Google Images and sees Donald Trump somewhere down the list O_o*)
Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!". ("She herd hear mother"? Waht)
Firehert liked her shoulder. He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti." (FireHEART liked her shoulder? What, does he have his own magazine all about Starpaw's shoulder. . .? Yes, I think I know "ti".)
Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her./ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod. (Yes. But I wish they had prodded her to death, and the end, everyone's happy, especially these viewers over here. . .)
"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." (When you're the illegal father of a Mary-Sue: You have your chest puffed "ouit" all the time.)
StarPaw gasped. What does it mean? (What does it mean? whAT DOES IT MEAN? IT MEANS YOU'RE AN IDIOT FOR NOT UNDERSTANDING SUCH AN OBVIOUS "pROPHECY!")
lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk (But I'm not kidding. . .)