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VI
The camper was a bulky teenage boy of maybe fifteen or sixteen. He had tousled blond ish hair, with specks of rust in them. Probably a Hephaestus camper.
-Need help?- the campers voice was deep, but kind. He had a laughing glint to his eyes, and seemed to be smiling.
-Are you willing to help?- There was shielded venom in my voice, which he probably noticed. his face contorted in pain for a second, but he quickly relaxed his facial features.
-Of course. I'm not a monster. So dodge to my left. NOW!- at the end of his sentence he yelled, and I complied, jumping to my right I barely avoided the dragons scorching orange and white flames. The monsters chasing me were stumped, some instantly became yellow dust, others just stopped short in their tracks. the automaton quieted, and I yelled "thanks. I can handle it from here" to the camper, and did a 180, and jumped straight at the hellhounds that melted into the darkness as soon as they saw the flames. I drew my blade from my pocket, and sent a few dead heroes at one of the hellhounds. I slashed at another making it explode into yellow dust. I heard the dragon creak behind me, and jumped to the side, which angered the monsters, as fames dashed to intercept them, and killed off a dozen or so. There were two or three left, which a chasm that suddenly rumbled open swallowed as black flames danced around their bodies. I closed the chasm again, causing the ground to shake, and the camper to fall to the ground from the automatons back.
-WOW!- the camper exclaimed. Did you just do that?- he was bewildered, and staring at me with a mix of awe and fear. I returned his gaze, which silenced him.
-I did. If I hear you utter a single thing about this to the campers, you will find yourself in the depths of Tartarus, and no chance at even the fields of Asphodel.- My voice cracked a bit from exhaustion. I felt the locks loosen more, and I doubled over in pain. My breaths came in shallow gasps, and I barely heard a voice asking me what was wrong, and what happened. I blacked out.

time gap

I heard a male voice calling my name. It sounded like my half brothers, voice. Memories flooded my mind of my last night being conscious, and I suddenly jumped up, my eyes popping open. My eyes clouded over, and i collapsed back onto the bed. I was in the camps infirmary, and the one calling my name was none other than the camper who saved my sorry ass the other night with his automaton.
-He's awake- he yelled, and a few campers came in, as I noticed my surroundings, I saw in another bed, Annabeth Chase, and Percy right next to her. She seemed beat up, and it seemed as if the time has fast forwarded.
-Beckendorf! Don't yell so loud!- I heard a mans voice. This voice was eerily similar to Chirons.
-Chiron?- I called hopefully sounding like a child waiting for his father to come back home, and hoping that every man that came inside the threshold is the father. And of course the father never returns, only enemies come inside. They have a nice exterior, but inside evil lives in them.
-Yes child?- a man comes inside. He is rolling himself in a wheelchair. and it's it's...
-Chiron- I slump back into my pillows. He was back. I close my eyes again, and go back to sleep.