help with a story please?

by caiusreese

hi, i'm a slightly newbie writer I do a lot of rping but not book writing and i'm trying to do a trilogy of books and I could use with some help please WARNING! This story will depicts scenes of domestic violence, rape and possibly childbirth that could potentially be graphic and triggering for some. It will also contain profanities (Cursing, swearing)

2. Chapter 2

A snippet of chapter 1:

I remember clearly the day my mother and father told me I was to marry King Vernon. It was quite ironically a very miserable day, with the heavens opened up pouring down rain with quite violent lashings of lightning and roars of thunder tearing through what should have been a very exciting day for my family and me. I was not sure how my parents expected me to react or feel, as I had never thought of marriage and here they were throwing me at a man I've never met before. I did not know much about king Vernon all I knew was that 1. He was the King 2. He was absolutely horrendously hideous and thirdly he was rumored to be very cruel. My parents only wanted me to marry King Vernon because he was the King and we were the richest and most respected family in our town. I did not see what was so great about marrying a man that would most likely not love me I wanted to wait until I met the man I knew would be the one why couldn't I decide this one thing for myself?

so... How was this little snippet?

good?

bad?

Should it start differently?

How should I proceed?

Should she meet Caius before she meets the king? (She will meet the king in Chapter 2)

Or should she meet him the same time she meets the king?

Should I continue this?