Hey! My friend, Fawndapple helped a lot! Here is my redid story!
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Mosskit ran through the forest, her eyes bright, a happy smile on her face. Firekit, her sister, ran beside her.
"I can't believe we snuck out of camp! I really hope Sweetsong doesn't find out!" she squealed. Mosskit snorted, since they had always tried to sneak out of camp. Ever since Emberpaw became an apprentice, they had been best friends and were inseparable.
Mosskitpadded alongside her littermate. Firekit abruptly stopped, and Mosskit skidded to a stop next to her sister.
"Are you okay?" she asked. Firekit nodded.
"Race you to the edge of the ravine!" she squealed and raced foward. Mosskit dashed after her.
Mosskit was soon panting but was determined to pass her sister. Just as she passed her, Firekit skid to a halt. Mosskit stopped, but she had been running so fast, she tripped and tumbled down the cliff ahead.
Before she hit the water, she heard a scream.
"MOSSKIT!" Firekit wailed. Then she was in the freezing ocean, struggling to stay above the water. She spotted a rock and tried to push through the water towards it. After awhile, she finally climbed onto, and collapsed, letting darkness engulf her.